2009 作文小组 招新 8.13第二次作业

lsr91UID: 2540702

8.13 Some people think it's more important to spend more time working than being with family，你的觀點?


My answer:
To be honored, I prefer spend more and more time on work to spend on family. Not only due to the competitions are full of lives but also that’s my personality. There’s a research claims that both of Capricorn and Aquarius all the best constellations of enterprise. And I am Aquarius. In another way, most family would not astrict us not to work for future.

With many kinds of problems faced to, we should take care of them with time. That’s why we could settle every problem and get moved constantly. But we could not spare one day time into several pieces, in another word, we could only have 24 hours one day. So there is a situation, how we step up our speed so we can finish more things in the same period than before? That’s why we should innovate. When we come up with a great method of how we rise our efficiency, we can be better than our opponents. But that would take huge time to do. If it comes true, it will be the key to keep ahead in the field. We should spend more time on it.

In our country, the person who keeps work in mind instead of family would be remembered. And the spirit of job in my country is good. For example from 1970s-1980s, most of people are working in factory built by the government, and we must be working hard cause our country just establish for 20 years. We want to catch up with developed country in short time period. And this kind of faith reserved nowadays.

At last, elderships know that young people like us should do something useful or study to fill ourselves, I mean, they will got ours back to some extent. Cause they know their children should be diligent to work now and themselves can find other ways to live, fishing, hiking, singing and so on. They could find ways to kill time, couldn’t they?

It is not a fault that spend time to be with family, but we should know that our teenager and midlife are gold time to develop our career. So, we don’t feel bad we cannot take more time on family, they would understand that.

谢谢批改的同学！

cxy7646UID: 2595335

To be honored（honest）, I prefer (to) spend more and more越来越多？ time on work (than) to spend on family. Not only due to (that) the competitions are full of lives but also that’s my personality. There’s a research claims that both of去掉 Capricorn and Aquarius all（are） the best constellations of enterprise. And I am Aquarius. In another way, most family would not astrict（?） us not to work for future.

With many kinds of problems faced to (to face), we should take care of them with time. That’s why we could settle every problem and get moved constantly. But we could not spare (separate) one day time into several pieces. in another word, we could only have 24 hours one day. So there is a situation, how (can) we step up our speed so we can finish more things in the same period than before? That’s why we should innovate. When we come up with a great method of how we rise(raise) our efficiency, we can be better than our opponents. But that would take huge time to do. If it comes true, it will be the key to keep ahead in the field. (So) we should spend more time on it.

In our country, the person who keeps work in mind instead of family would be remembered. And the spirit of job in my country is good. For example from 1970s-1980s, most of去掉 people are working in factory built by the government, and we must be working hard cause (as) our country just establish for 20 years. We want to catch up with developed country in short time period. And this kind of faith reserved nowadays.
At last, elderships know that young people like us should do something useful or study to fill ourselves, I mean, they will got ours back to some extent. Cause (Because) they know their children should be diligent to work now and themselves can find other ways to live, (such as) fishing, hiking, singing and so on. They could find ways to kill time, couldn’t they?
It is not a fault that (one) spend time to be with family, but we should know that our teenager and midlife are gold time to develop our career. So, we don’t feel bad (that) we cannot take more time on family, they would understand that.

继续努力！

wondersmiths2UID: 2609756

To be honored(?), I prefer to spend more  time on work rather than family. It is not only due to the fact that the life is full of  competitions  but also my personality. There’s a research claimming that both of Capricorn and Aquarius all are the best constellations of enterprise. And I am Aquarius. In another way, most family would not astrict (?)us not to work for future.

To face many kinds of problems, we should deal with them taking our cherished time. That’s why we could settle every problem and get moved constantly. But we could not spare one day time into several pieces, in another word, we only have 24 hours one day. So there is a situation, how can we step up our speed so we can finish more things in the same period than before? That’s why we should innovate. When we come up with a great method of how we rise our efficiency, we can be better than our opponents. But that would take considerable time to do. If it comes true, it will be the key to keep ahead in the field. We should spend more time on it.

In our country, the person who keeps work in mind instead of family would be remembered. And the spirit of job in my country is good. For example from 1970s-1980s, most of people are working in factories built by the government, and we must be working hard since our country was just  established for 20 years. We want to catch up with developed country in short time. And this kind of faith reserved nowadays.

At last, elderships know that young people like us should do something useful or study to fuel ourselves, I mean, they will get ours back to some extent. Since they know their children should be diligent to work now and themselves can find other ways to live, fishing, hiking, singing and so on. They could find ways to kill time, couldn’t they?

It is not a fault that someone spend time to be with family, but we should know that our teenager and midlife(?)(adolescence and middle age) are gold（prime） time to develop our careers. So, we don’t feel guilty that  we cannot take more time with family, for they would understand that.


感觉LZ写作文时中文影响较重，用词比较单一，也有口语化的部分。最好看一下托福作文小伴侣，说话有点直，别介意哈！一起努力！