【进军美利坚作文小组】 fancy 作业帖—更新0910作业

752585UID: 2516542

When in troubles or in doubts, people usually turn others for advice. Some prefer to get suggestions from older people for（for+句子表示为了的目的，不能代替because） they are more experienced, while others tend to ask their peers for advice for they are in the situations.（什么意思？） So it is quite arbitrary to decide whose advice is more valuable—the old people or our peers. And I think in different conditions we have various answers. & `" R; ~5 z  K' x" }- \0 r* C# W: J
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Sometimes, the advice from older friends is more valuable. As a well-known saying goes, “wisdom comes with age”. Older friends do experience more than us, and their success and failure accumulates into a precious wisdom.（这句不错） So their advice can give us good reference and guidance. For example, now I am considering about studying in graduate school in America, and my older friends who have already studying in America or have finished graduate school can give me some very helpful advice. They offer(will? offered? 反正不能一般现在时) me detailed information about the applying process, tips and skills, life and study aboard（。。。的情况）, and so on. However, my peer friends who have never applied for a gradate school in America or who are now applying cannot give me such valuable advice. In brief, when we need advice on things that we have never tried before, the guidance from older friends is much more beneficial and advantageous.

In other situations, peers’ advice can be more useful and helpful because they understand our problems better. As the fast changing of our societies and lives, generation gaps can easily appear between the old and the youth, even if there is only a few years’ difference. So sometimes older people find it difficult to comprehend the world of the youth, and we sometimes complain that their advice is outdated. So at this time, peer friends, people of our age and with similar thought, can provide more valuable advice. For example, women prefer to get opinions on clothes and cosmetics from girls of their ages instead of older friends or parents; men incline to find their peer fiends’ advice on digital equipment or sports more useful. This is because people of the same ages usually share the same taste and culture. In short, the value of advice from our peer friends outweighs that from older friends sometimes. ) b% Y2 m$ ~9 }! L8 L
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In conclusion, diverse problems require corresponding solutions. We should search for help from those who can mostly help solve our dilemma. So the suggestions from older friends and peer friends have different advantages. While（为什么转折，应该用therefore吧） it is hard to judge which one is more valuable, they are both necessary.

非常不错，发现你的两个观点跟我一样，但比我写的好，借鉴了~

fancywwUID: 2583671

谢谢批改。
for 可以表示原因，看MW的解释：  conj. for the reason that  : on this ground  : BECAUSE
life and study aboard：国外学习生活的情况

最后一句，看译成中文是不是通： 尽管很难断定两者谁更有价值，但它们都很必要。

wondersmiths2UID: 2609756

When in troubles or in doubts, people usually turn others for advice. Some prefer to get suggestions from older people for they are more experienced, while others tend to ask their peers for advice for they are in the situations. So it is quite arbitrary to decide whose advice is more valuable—the old people or our peers. And I think in different conditions we have various answers.

Sometimes, the advice from older friends is more valuable. As a well-known saying goes, “wisdom comes with age”. Older friends do experience more than us and their success and failure accumulates into a precious wisdom. So their advice can give us good reference and guidance. For example, now I am considering about studying in graduate school in America, and my older friends who have already studying in America or have finished graduate school can give me some very helpful advice. They offer me detailed information about the applying process, tips and skills, life and study aboard, and so on. However, my peer friends who have never applied for a gradate school in America or who are now applying cannot give me such valuable advice. In brief, when we need advice on things that we have never tried before, the guidance from older friends is much more beneficial and advantageous.
In other situations, peers’ advice can be more useful and helpful because they understand our problems better. As the fast changing of our societies and lives, generation gaps can easily appear between the old and the youth, even if there is only a few years’ difference. So sometimes older people find it difficult to comprehend the world of the youth, and we sometimes complain that their advice is outdated. So at this time, peer friends, people of our age and with similar thought, can provide more valuable advice. For example, women prefer to get opinions on clothes and cosmetics from girls of their ages instead of older friends or parents; men incline to find their peer fiends’ advice on digital equipment or sports more useful. This is because people of the same ages usually share the same taste and culture. In short, the value of advice from our peer friends outweighs that from older friends sometimes.
In conclusion, diverse problems require corresponding solutions. We should search for help from those who can mostly help solve our dilemma. So the suggestions from older friends and peer friends have different advantages. While it is hard to judge which one is more valuable, they are both necessary.
非常不错，特别是例子举得很好！领教了！

752585UID: 2516542

life and study aboard（。。。的情况）, 我是说应该加上，the situation of 或什么的
因为感觉这两个不并列“tips and skills, life and study aboard”反正我读的时候有断点，没你之前的流畅
恩 for+名词表目的，+doing 用途，+句子原因 恩 你说的没错 因为我不常用，所以读的时候有点奇怪
尽管很难断定两者谁更有价值，但它们都很必要。，我觉得非常不通。。。。。。

752585UID: 2516542

life and study aboard（。。。的情况）, 我是说应该加上，the situation of 或什么的
因为感觉这两个不并列“tips and skills, life and study aboard”反正我读的时候有断点，没你之前的流畅
恩 for+名词表目的，+doing 用途，+句子原因 恩 你说的没错 因为我不常用，所以读的时候有点奇怪
尽管很难断定两者谁更有价值，但它们都很必要。，我觉得非常不通。。。。。。

fancywwUID: 2583671

辛苦批改的同学了，请多指正。

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Generally speaking, the objective of homework is to help students increase knowledge and improve abilities. While opponents of homework criticize the negative effects of homework, they are mainly focus on some inappropriate assigned homework. In my view, I agree that daily homework is necessary for students if only they are proper forms.

To begin with, homework can help students review and reinforce what they have learned from school. It is well known that “practice makes perfect”. Homework may seem to be rote or grind work, because it makes students do some repeated work. However, it is just in such process that students digest and master what they have learned at school. Furthermore, homework can assist students extend their knowledge by letting them apply it to new situations. For example, by doing the homework of planting and observing flowers personally, students can better understand what they learned from botany class. Also, reviewing homework can prepare students for examinations, and previewing homework can get them ready for upcoming lessons. In brief, homework can actually bring students lots of benefits.

Besides, homework is a good feedback of the students’ learning conditions to their teachers and parents. From homework teachers and parents can find out the deficiencies of knowledge in some students. For instance, after giving a quite difficult lesson, a teacher can hardly know whether the students have understood and mastered the lesson if he/she does not assign homework to students. It is highly possible that majority of the class are confused while the teacher starts moving to next chapter. So had the teacher assigned homework on that lesson to students, he/she would spend more time to elaborate the difficult point. And it is the same with parents. If children have problems with their homework, parents can timely offer them a hand. In short, homework is also necessary to teachers and parents to help students learn well.

Additionally, teachers should pay attention to the amount and forms of homework to improve its effect and avoid its negativities. The critique of homework mainly comes from some badly designed homework. I admit that such rigid homework is of little value and even bad to children’ growing. However, homework nowadays is designed to be beneficial. On one hand, teachers should assign the amount of homework according to different students. For example, first grade students may have little concentration ability, so they should not be given more than 30 minutes of homework. On the other hand, the form of homework can be various and creative. It should not be limited to paper work or exercises. Different forms like field survey and social practice can motivate students’ interests and better integrate and improve their skills.

In conclusion, homework is of great importance and necessities to students. And teachers should carefully design it to be interesting, helpful, and meaningful.

goback211UID: 2419259

Generally speaking, the objective ofhomework is to help students increase knowledge and improve abilities. Whileopponents of homework criticize the negative effects of homework, they aremainly focus on some inappropriate assigned homework. In my view, I agree thatdaily homework is necessary for students if only they(前面用的单数，这儿是复数) are proper forms.
To begin with, homework can help studentsreview and reinforce what they have learned from school. It is well known that“practice makes perfect”. Homework may seem to be rote or grind work, becauseit makes students do some repeated work. However, it is just in such processthat students digest and master what they have learned at school. Furthermore,homework can assist students extend their knowledge by letting them apply it tonew situations. For example, by doing the homework of planting and observingflowers personally, students can better understand what they learned frombotany class. Also, reviewing homework can preparestudents for examinations(prepare能这样用么), and previewing homework can get them ready for upcoming lessons. (后面的两个理由貌似和句首的不太对应)In brief, homeworkcan actually bring students lots of benefits.
Besides, homework is a good feedback of thestudents’ learning conditions to their teachers and parents. From homeworkteachers and parents can find out the deficiencies of knowledge in somestudents. For instance, after giving a quite difficult lesson, a teacher canhardly know whether the students have understood and mastered the lesson ifhe/she does not assign homework to students. It is highly possible thatmajority of the class are confused while the teacher starts moving to nextchapter. So had the teacher assigned homework onthat lesson to students, he/she would spend more time to elaborate thedifficult point(没懂这句的意思). And it is the samewith parents. If children have problems with their homework, parents can timelyoffer them a hand. In short, homework is also necessary to teachers and parentsto help students learn well.
Additionally, teachers should pay attentionto the amount and forms of homework to improve its effect and avoid itsnegativities. The critique of homework mainly comes from some badly designedhomework. I admit that such rigid homework is of little value and even bad tochildren’s growing. However, homework nowadaysis designed to be beneficial. On one hand, teachers should assign the amount ofhomework according to different students. For example, first grade students mayhave little concentration ability, so they should not be given more than 30minutes of homework. On the other hand, the form of homework can be various andcreative. It should not be limited to paper work or exercises. Different formslike field survey and social practice can motivate students’ interests andbetter integrate and improve their skills.
In conclusion, homework is of greatimportance and necessities to students. And teachers should carefully design itto be interesting, helpful, and meaningful.

很好，我句子和语法不行，没有看出什么错误，请谅解…

fancywwUID: 2583671

0909综合写作

The reading material states three commonly accepted theories explaining birds' navigating ability. In the lecture, however, the professor does not agree that the three theories can fully account for the phenomenon.

Firstly, the theory that birds navigate by the sun or the star is not persuasive enough. Many birds flying at night have no difficulty finding their ways. So it is not necessary for them to navigate by using the sun. Also, the professor mentions that scientists have known only one species of bird using the star as navigation. And we still do not know whether other bird species navigate by the star or not. So this contradicts with the first theory in the reading.

Secondly, the landmark theory cannot explain why some birds can find their way home when put into totally strange environment. Birds using landmark to find ways must have made the journey before, and then they can navigate by experience from previous journey. However, birds can also find ways back from places they have never been to before. So this fact casts doubt on the second theory.

Thirdly, while the professor admits that birds do navigate by sensing the earth's magnetic field, it has great limitation. By sensing the earth's magnetic field, birds can only tell the north and the south. It is not enough for birds to find specific destinations. But the truth is birds can fly to particular places that are hiding in confusing surroundings.
So it means that bird rely on more than the earth's magnetic field.

In conclusion, in the lecture the professor challenges the three theories in the reading, which explain the birds' ability to navigate.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

The reading material states three commonly accepted theories explaining birds' navigating ability. In the lecture, however, the professor does not agree that the three theories can fully account for the phenomenon./ M  m3 g* z; @1 P3 g
开头很好的额, 感觉写的越来越好了.值得学习借鉴
Firstly, the theory that birds navigate by the sun or the star is not persuasive enough. Many birds flying at night have no difficulty finding their ways. So it is not necessary for them to navigate by using the sun. Also, the professor mentions that scientists have known only one species of bird using the star as navigation. And we still do not know whether other bird species navigate by the star or not. So this contradicts with the first theory in the readin 有的词汇有了改变很好的, 我一紧张也想不起来什么, 而且还有时间的 限制就更紧张.

dly, the landmark theory cannot explain why some birds can find their way home when put into totally strange environment. Birds using landmark to find ways must have made the journey before, and then they can navigate by experience from previous journey. However, birds can also find ways back from places they have never been to before. So this fact casts doubt on the second theor 这里我听的还是可以就是我表达的额不恰当. 你的真是很好可以当范文了

dly, while the professor admits that birds do navigate by sensing the earth's magnetic field, it has great limitation. By sensing the earth's magnetic field, birds can only tell the north and the south. It is not enough for birds to find specific destinations. But the truth is birds can fly to particular places that are hiding in confusing surroundings.这里不是很明白,什么意思So it means that bird rely on more than the earth's magnetic field.+ t' @( E( E3 n/ n
In conclusion, in the lecture the professor challenges the three theories in the reading, which explain the birds' ability to navigate.我很喜欢看你的作文也会学不少的, 准备学你几个..嘿嘿

fancywwUID: 2583671

0910 交通繁忙时候该不该课税


The sharply increasing of personal vehicles makes the transportation in many cities very busy, especially during the rush hours. So it has brought a lot of troubles to citizens as well as the government. Some propose that drivers should pay a certain amount of fees so that they can be permitted to drive out in traffic busy time. In my opinion, I do not think it can be an effective way to solve traffic problems. To fully release the heavy traffic, we should take other methods.

To begin with, charging drivers of fees or taxes cannot effectively reduce the amount of traffic at rush hours. Traffic busy time is usually hours when people go to or back from work. Many of them just need to drive at that time. If the fees or taxes are set quite low, it will not influence people who can afford a car. So these people will continue to drive to work. If the fees are very high, a lot of people will choose to take public transportations. Supporters of this method may claim that this is just the effect they want. However, they have not deliberated it further. It will in turn make the public transportations very crowded and busy. So after careful analysis of this policy, I find it little help to achieve its goal.

Besides, this policy may lead to potential problems to society. Some drivers may be rich enough to afford these extra fees, while other drivers may regard it as a huge burden. However, no matter whether different drivers can afford it or not, they all have similar reasons to drive cars. That is to go to work, send their children to school, and so on. So the policy is unfair to drivers. And those who cannot pay the fee will certainly complain. If the complains accumulate into anger, it will definitely compromise the stability of the society.

To truly and entirely solve the traffic problems, the government should take other methods. And it is the fact that many cities have adopted other effective ways to solve the traffic problems. For example, constrains the vehicles according to the final number of the vehicles is a fair and widely accepted method. For another example, government can encourage people who use public transportation with allowance. But to fully solve the traffic problems should depend on the development of the city's transportation systems. For instance, scientifically organizing and regulating the streets and subways is very important.

In conclusion, imposing fees or taxes in traffic busy time is not an effective and sound method to solve the heavy traffic dilemma in cities. We should address the root causes of such problems and find the method that can eliminate the problem entirely.

ly8768UID: 2452066

53# fancyww

The reading material states three commonly accepted theories explaining birds' navigating ability. In the lecture, however, the professor does not agree that the three theories can fully account for(这词用的好) the phenomenon.

Firstly, the theory that birds navigate by the sun or the star is not persuasive enough. Many birds flying at night have no difficulty finding their ways. So it is not necessary for them to navigate by using the sun. Also, the professor mentions that scientists have known only one species(specie) of bird using the star as navigation. And we still do not know whether other bird species navigate by the star or not. So this contradicts with the first theory in the reading.

Secondly, the landmark theory cannot explain why some birds can find their way home when put into totally strange environment. Birds using landmark to find ways must have made the journey before, and then they can navigate by experience from previous journey. However, birds can also find ways back from places they have never been to before. So this fact casts doubt on the second theory.

这个你听得确实很清楚

Thirdly, while the professor admits that birds do navigate by sensing the earth's magnetic field, it has great limitation. By sensing the earth's magnetic field, birds can only tell the north and the south. It is not enough for birds to find specific destinations. But the truth is birds can fly to particular places that are hiding in confusing surroundings. So it means that bird rely on more than the earth's magnetic field.


In conclusion, in the lecture the professor challenges the three theories in the reading, which explain the birds' ability to navigate.

感觉你听得挺全的。而且都记录下来了，语句也变换的好，不亏是norm university的啊

thinkerbellUID: 2685525

The sharply increasing(用sharp increse好像好一些，后面跟的介词结构前应该是名词短语) of personal vehicles makes the transportation in many cities very busy, especially during the rush hours. So it has brought a lot of troubles to citizens as well as the government. Some propose that drivers should pay a certain amount of fees so that they can be permitted to drive out in traffic busy time. In my opinion, I do not think（这两处表意重复，in my opinion后可直接说明“这不是一个有效的措施”，不用再讲“我不认为这是一个有效的措施”） it can be an effective way to solve traffic problems. To fully release the heavy traffic, we should take other methods. * ^, t& T8 _2 `0 W4 J:

To begin with, charging drivers of fees or taxes cannot effectively reduce the amount of traffic at rush hours. Traffic busy time is usually hours when people go to or back from work. Many of them just need to drive at that time. If the fees or taxes are set quite low, it will not influence people who can afford a car. So these people will continue to drive to work. If the fees are very high, a lot of people will choose to take public transportations. Supporters of this method may claim that this is just the effect they want. However, they have not deliberated(是不是elaborated?) it further. It will in turn make the public transportations very crowded and busy. So after careful analysis of this policy, I find it (of) little help to achieve its goal.

Besides, this policy may lead to potential problems to society. Some drivers may be rich enough to afford these extra fees, while other drivers may regard it as a huge burden. However, no matter whether different drivers can afford it or not, they all have similar reasons to drive cars. That is to go to work, send their children to school, and so on. So the policy is unfair to drivers. And those who cannot pay the fee will certainly complain. If the complains accumulate into anger, it will definitely compromise the stability of the society.$ q/ y()5 F" M8 t
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To truly and entirely solve the traffic problems, the government should take other methods. And it is the fact that many cities have adopted other effective ways to solve the traffic problems(建议修改：which could better solve the traffic problems compared with the proposed one ). For example, constrains (on) the vehicles according to the final number of the vehicles is a fair and widely accepted method. For another example, government can encourage people who use public transportation with allowance. But to fully solve the traffic problems(, we) should depend on the development of the city's transportation systems. For instance, scientifically organizing and regulating the streets and subways is very important.

In conclusion, imposing（好词^_^） fees or taxes in traffic busy time is not an effective and sound method to solve the heavy traffic dilemma(这里的dilemma意指是什么?) in cities. We should address the root causes of such problems and find the method that can eliminate the problem entirely.

每段的分析和举例说明很到位^_^