=七月流火 小组= 第二次作业 Issue 48 by ianking7368

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ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history
were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
I concede that it is significant to research the groups in history study and it is the groups, not the famous few who make
the trends possible in history. However, the statement overlooks that famous people in history are often symbolic in their
times and they do play important roles in the events that leave deep impressions on our history. So in history study, it is
necessary to combine the research of the individuals with that of the groups and omitting of either would be impropriet .  
The reasons why historians should study the groups lies  in certain aspects. Firstly, historian could get an overview of what
happend  in the past, thus the history study will not lost in complex and meaningless details. The action of the individul
may be confused since there are many diverse and unknown factors that affect what an individual does. But the action of the
public is understandable for it omits thoes factors and reveal  the major trend or conflict of the society and times.  
Secondly, just as what the statment said, it is the public that determin the history trends. Because an idea or thought is
effective only after it is acceptted by at least a group of people in society. So the research of the groups will help the
historians draw the outlines of what happened in the past. Thus they can make impartial and comprehensive comments.
However,  the famous individuls, or the heroes in histroy often strongly reflect the characteristics and ethos of their times
because what makes individuals famouse lies in that they are representative in a peirod of time, or they are tightly
associated with big events in their time. Hence only through exploring what they did and thought, could historian get a deep
understanding of the past. When talking about the Renaissance, we cannot avoid Leonardo da Vinci, a master of art, science
and engineering. His painting, Mona Lisa, reveals the rise in Human self-consciousness druing the Renaissance, while his
achievemet in engineering also demostrates the prosperity of geometry and mechanics in his times. No one would doubt that it
is a great loss if historian skips this great man in the study of Renaissance.
In additon, it is the groups that make the trends possible, but it is often the famous few who lead the trends, and the
latter usually plays a central and meaningful role in history. "All men's life is history, but only a few ones can change the
history". One important purpose of history study is to explain and understand great changes in human behavior, so through
study the achievements of the famous, historian can grasp the key points, hence draw a clear clue and get a better
comprehension of the past. There were many poets in thirteenth and forteenth century in Europe, but their works faded to
Dante's brilliant poem The Divine Comedy, for the initial and revolutionary thoughts in this great piece. So in order to
understand the change and development of literature in that time, it is more important to study Dante than the nameless.
In conclusion, groups of people, or the general public and the famous few are both essential part of history study: the
latter lead the trend while the former choose, practice and enrich it. They together create our history. By the combination
of the research in the famous few and the groups, historian can get a full, deep and clear view of the past.

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我改你拉~~呵呵

I concede that it is significant to research the groups in history study and it is the groups, not the famous few who make the trends possible in history. However, the statement overlooks that famous people in history are often symbolic in their times and they do play important roles in the events that leave deep impressions on our history. So in history study, it is necessary to combine the research of the individuals with that of（不用也可） the groups and omitting of either would be impropriet.  The reasons why historians should study the groups lies（lie）
in certain aspects.

Firstly, historian could get an overview of what happend in the past, thus the history study will not lost in complex and meaningless details. The action of the individul may be confused since there are many diverse and unknown factors that affect what an individual does. But the action of the public is understandable for it omits thoes factors and reveal(s) the major trend or conflict of the society and times.  


Secondly, just as what the statment said, it is the public that determin the history trends. Because an idea or thought is effective only after it is acceptted by at least a group of people in society.(很对) So the research of the groups will help the historians draw the outlines of what happened in the past. Thus they can make impartial and comprehensive comments. （However,  the famous individuls, or the heroes in histroy often strongly reflect the characteristics and ethos of their times because what makes individuals famouse lies in that they are representative in a peirod of time, or they are tightly associated with big events in their time.）（famous individuals 也不一定都反映当时的情况的，比如说梵高之类的艺术家和科学家） Hence only through exploring what they did and thought, could historian get a deep understanding of the past.（这个真是绝对了，only吗？而且是这段前后自相矛盾也，前面说群众很重要，后面又说只有通过研究个体才能。。。） When talking about the Renaissance, we cannot avoid Leonardo da Vinci, a master of art, science and engineering. His painting, Mona Lisa, reveals the rise in Human self-consciousness druing the Renaissance, while his achievemet in engineering also demostrates the prosperity of geometry and mechanics in his times. No one would doubt that it is a great loss if historian skips this great man in the study of Renaissance. （建议你这段放到下一段会更好，这段举个需要大众支持才行的改革之类的例子会更好，因为你前2段都没有例子或展开论证为什么大众重要）


In additon, it is the groups that make the trends possible, but it is often the famous few who lead the trends, and the latter usually plays a central and meaningful role in history. "All men's life is history, but only a few ones can change the history". One important purpose of history study is to explain and understand great changes in human behavior, so through study the achievements of the famous, historian can grasp the key points, hence draw a clear clue and get a better comprehension of the past.（这句就跟上段重复了不是么） There were many poets in thirteenth and forteenth century in Europe, but their works faded to Dante's brilliant poem The Divine Comedy, for the initial and revolutionary thoughts in this great piece. So in order to understand the change and development of literature in that time, it is more important to study Dante than the nameless.


In conclusion, groups of people, or the general public and the famous few are both essential part of history study: the latter lead the trend while the former choose, practice and enrich it. They together create our history. By the combination of the research in the famous few and the groups, historian can get a full, deep and clear view of the past.

红色标注全为错别字，建议放上前在word里检查一下~~ 绿色为其他自己觉得不是很对的地方。

语言很好很好，真的很厉害~~但是这篇逻辑还是稍稍有点不清楚，改改就好了~~
这么短时间里写出来，真的写很好很强大~~学习了

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谢谢KIKI的修改。 我的修改版




I concede that it is significant to research the groups in history study and it is the groups, not the famous few who make the trends possible in history. However, the statement overlooks that famous people in history are often symbolic in their times and they do play important roles in the events that leave deep impressions on our history. So in history study, it is necessary to combine the research of the individuals with the groups and omitting of either would be inappropriate.  
The reasons why historians should study the groups lie in certain aspects. Firstly, historian could get an overview of what happened in the past, thus the history study will not lost in complex and meaningless details. The action of the individual
may be confused since there are many diverse and unknown factors that affect what an individual does. But the action of the public is understandable for it omits those factors and reveals the major trend or conflict of the society and times.  Secondly, just as what the statement says, it is the public that determine the history trends. Because an idea or thought is effective only after it is accepted by at least a group of people in society. So the research of the groups will help the historians draw the outlines of what happened in the past. Thus they can make impartial and comprehensive comments.
However, we should see that most of the time,  the famous few, or the heroes in history often strongly reflect the characteristics and ethos of their times because what makes individuals famous lies in that they are representative in a period of time, or they are closely associated with big events in their time.）Hence through exploring what they did and thought, historian could get a deep understanding of the past. When talking about the Renaissance, we cannot avoid Leonardo da Vinci, a master of art, science and engineering. His painting, Mona Lisa, reveals the rise in Human self-consciousness during the Renaissance, while his achievement in engineering also demonstrates the prosperity of geometry and mechanics in his times. No one would doubt that it is a great loss if historian skips this great man in the study of Renaissance.

In addition, it is the groups that make the trends possible, but it is often the famous few who lead the trends, and the latter usually plays a central and meaningful role in history. That’s because one important purpose of history study is to explain and understand great changes in human behavior "All men's life is history, but only a few ones can change the history". There were many poets in thirteenth and fourteenth century in Europe, but their works faded to Dante's brilliant poem The Divine Comedy, for the initial and revolutionary thoughts in this great piece. So in order to understand the change and development of literature in that time, it is more important to study Dante than the nameless.


In conclusion, groups of people, or the general public and the famous few are both essential part of history study: the latter lead the trend while the former choose, practice and enrich it. They together create our history. By the combination of the research in the famous few and the groups, historian can get a full, deep and clear view of the past.


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