arguemnt137 4月作文小组3.26作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT137 - The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up Mason River. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River."
WORDS: 430          TIME: 1:00:04          DATE: 2007-3-26

In the statement, the author concludes that the Mason City council will need to increase its budget to  improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Masson River, in order to increase the
recreational use of the river. However, the argument suffers from several flaws which make the
statement unconvinced.

To begin with, the author cites some surveys to indicate that Mason City residents consistently rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation. However, the author fails to provide enough information of the surveys. Unless the surveyor sampled a sufficient number of respondents and did randomly
across the entire spectrum, the survey results are not reliable to gauge the overall condition of
residents in Mason City. Even the statement don't provide me the total number of respondents and
the percentage of them who rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation, so I don't know
whether the surveys ensure representativeness. Without more convincing and valid information of the respondents of the surveys, the author cannot persuade me.

The author also provides the complaints about the quality of the water in the river confirm that the
residents avoid the river just because if the quality of the water. The author overlooks a possibility
that the complaints are caused by the residents who merely care about the environment along the
river, the living condition and health, instead of whether the river is suit for people to have fun in the Mason River. The foregoing possibility may make the author's statement dubious.

Furthermore, even it is possible for Mason City to improve the condition of Mason River, whether
the solutions and the projects can reach its ultimate goal is still dubious, although the agency
responsible for rivers in their region has announced plans to clean up Mason river. However, the
author doesn’t provide me the evidence that whether they can afford and complete the project well.
In other words, perhaps, it is difficult for people there to clean the river completely, for it all depends on extent of the pollution of the river.  

Even the river become clean enough for people to take any recreational activity after the project, the
recreational use of the river may not increase. On one side, although the residents regard water sports as a famous form of recreation and even they take Mason River as a good place, they may change their views. One the other side, The river is not suit for swimming, fishing or other activities. Both
foregoing possibilities make it impossible.

To sum up, the argument suffers several logical flaws, which make it unconvincing.

攻击各个逻辑错误的时候怎么样才能使语言更丰富 要不总是不透彻并且字数太少
还有就是限时 打字太慢 哎 有什么好的练的方法没
谢了

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In the statement, the author concludes that the Mason City council will need to increase its budget to（改为for）  improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Masson River, in order to increase therecreational use of the river. However, the argument suffers from several flaws which make the statement unconvinced（改为unconvincing）.

To begin with, the author cites some surveys to indicate that Mason City residents consistently rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation.（这一句只是复述原文，不能构成TS） However, the author fails to provide enough information of the surveys. （和上一句合成一句构成ＴＳ）Unless the surveyor sampled a sufficient number of respondents and did randomlyacross the entire spectrum, the survey results are not reliable to gauge the overall condition of residents in Mason City. Even the statement don't provide me the total number of respondents and the percentage of them who rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation, so I don't know whether the surveys ensure representativeness. Without more convincing and valid information of the respondents of the surveys, the author cannot persuade me.

The author also provides the complaints about the quality of the water in the river which confirm that the residents avoid the river just because if（改为ｏｆ） the quality of the water.和上一段同样的问题The author overlooks a possibility that the complaints are caused by the residents who merely care about the environment along the river, the living condition and health, instead of whether the river is suit for people to have fun in the Mason River. The foregoing possibility may make the author's statement dubious.

Furthermore, even it is possible for Mason City to improve the condition of Mason River, whether the solutions and the projects can reach its ultimate goal is still dubious, although the agency responsible for rivers in their region has announced plans to clean up Mason river. However, the author doesn’t provide me the evidence that whether they can afford and complete the project well. In other words, perhaps, it is difficult for people there to clean the river completely, for it all depends on extent of the pollution of the river.  

Even the river becomes clean enough for people to take any recreational activity after the project, the recreational use of the river may not increase.与上一段构成让步，不错 On one side, although the residents regard water sports as a famous form of recreation and even they take Mason River as a good place, they may change their views. One the other side, The river is not suit for swimming, fishing or other activities. Both foregoing possibilities make it impossible.

To sum up, the argument suffers several logical flaws, which make it unconvincing.

每写一句话就问ｗｈｙ，分析的就会透彻了，多学习范文，会有好处的。打字平时抽时间用软件练一下，几天就可以了。

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非常感谢 受益匪浅啊
一起加油！