ISSUE47 ★无敌拍场★第十一期，欢迎拍拍

dudujasperUID: 2180289

第十一期：Issue47
"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
(社会对人类智力即逻辑推理和其他认知技能没有予以足够的重视)

论点：社会虽没有单独明确的强调这两方面的技能，但是社会在它实际的发展过程中却时时刻刻都在对我们强调这两方面的技能
OUTLINE：

P1：首先根据现在社会的复杂性，给出什么是逻辑技能和认知技能
P2：社会可能确实没有单独和明确对我们提出这两项技能的重要性，而且也没有必要去花这精力去提出。（这些技能作为一种基本的生存的工具没有必要花这些精力）
P3：但是这并不意味着社会没有给予足够的重视，反而在它发展各个方面都有重视这些技能

WORD:632

A brilliant performance of an opera needs a group of skilled and excellent actors. Equally, a society, developed rapidly, demands us have a higher capability, especially on reasoning and cognition. Although there is not a specific emphasis on these two skills in our society, they, as an basic requirement on surviving in nowadays, are emphasized momently in various aspects.

Starting from the premise that every definition has an appropriate meaning when it adapts itself to a specific condition. Therefore, in today's society ,flooded with high-tech, furious competitions and complex information, the skills on reasoning and cognition are influenced by many factors. Considering a complexity of the society, sometimes it is difficult, or even unable, to distinguish right from wrong. The contradictions are always existed, such as a conflict between a counteractive function and a possitive effect by using a chemical insecticide. On one hand, this insecticide may reduce the numbers of pests. From this view, the reasoning that this chamical insecticide can be used widely, which can be deduced easily, however, is not comprehensive, nor dose the cognition that this insecticide is effective. Because on the other hand, an ability on adequate variability will leads an increase in the number of mutants, then, the insecticide loses its effectiveness. Besides, this insecticide may not fit all kinds of insects. Draw a conclusion, the definition on reasoning is the ability to deduce a most reasonable conclusion from comprehensive surveys. And the definition on cognition is to understand the essence and the internal rules from a series phenomenons.

From the vision of the definition of these two skills, they are the basic requirements in the contemporary society. To discriminate among the options avilable, one shoule konw how to locate himself and how to plan a way of prograss. A proper reasoning about the trend of developing and a comprehensive cognition about current situations is absolutely necessary. One should estimate his ability correctly and consider the possible consequence properly before doing a certain thing. For example, a market research guarantees a profitable selling. Thus, these two skills are just like the ability in walking and respiration. Moreover, birds learn to fly by their instincts, and infants learn to walk by their desire for cognizing the world. Equally, an initiative on learning these two skills as the instinct and the aspiration is taken by all of us. Thereby, for a wasting of resources and energies, there is no need for the society to offer us a specialized training on these skills. Accordingly, it is, indeed, infrequent to find an obvious measure on emphasizing those two skills alone in the society.

Notwithstanding an infrequency on specific training, those two skills are stressed by the society in many other ways. As the basic prerequisite to the society's progress, the ability on reasoning and the cognition is already intermingled with every areas in the society, such as natural science, social science, social production, art and so on. Take the transgenic soy beans, which applied to the mass production in agricultural, as an example. Nor would these soy beans have popularized, if the researchers had concentrated their energies on how to explore them exclusively. More careful reasonings and cognitions were involved into their considerations. Whether those soy beans lead an additional influence to the people and the environment or not, researchers did comprehensive surveys and anticipations. Also in a job interview, the company regards one's capability on market analysis and market forecast highly. When confront with the rapid-developing world, one will handle a more complex problem and situation, the demand on these two skills are emphasized highly by the society than ever before.

Therefore, by the emphasis on our intellect on reasoning and cognition from the society momently, an initiative on improving these two skills should be regarded highly by ourselves.

[ 本帖最后由 dudujasper 于 2006-2-23 00:15 编辑 ]

lyan1102UID: 2148674

第十一期：Issue47
"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
(社会对人类智力即逻辑推理和其他认知技能没有予以足够的重视)

论点：社会虽没有单独明确的强调这两方面的技能，但是社会在它实际的发展过程中却时时刻刻都在对我们强调这两方面的技能
OUTLINE：

P1：首先根据现在社会的复杂性，给出什么是逻辑技能和认知技能
P2：社会可能确实没有单独和明确对我们提出这两项技能的重要性，而且也没有必要去花这精力去提出。（这些技能作为一种基本的生存的工具没有必要花这些精力）
P3：但是这并不意味着社会没有给予足够的重视，反而在它发展各个方面都有重视这些技能

WORD:632

A brilliant performance of an opera needs a group of skilled and excellent actors. Equally, a society, developed rapidly [a rapidly developing society], demands us have a higher capability [great capabilities], especially on [-on] [the skills of] reasoning and cognition. Although there is not a specific emphasis on these two skills in our society [Although our society has not put a specific emphasis on these two skills], they [只用这一个词好像有点孤单吧，我觉得至少有两个词用这种形式才合适], as an basic requirement on surviving in nowadays, are emphasized momently [？] in various aspects.[they are actually thought a lot as basic requirements on surviving in a unconsciously way. ]
改的有点多了，只是我觉得改了读着舒服点，楼主再好好推敲一下吧

（Starting from the premise） [什么意思？] that every definition has an appropriate meaning when it adapts itself to a specific condition. Therefore, in today's society ,flooded with high-tech, furious competitions and complex information, the skills on reasoning and cognition are influenced by many factors. Considering a [the] complexity of the society, sometimes it is difficult, or even unable, to distinguish right from wrong [了解楼主的本义，应该不是很难分清楚对和错吧，是不是‘很难从单一的或表面的性质决定东西或实物的好或坏’？]. The contradictions are always existed, such as a conflict between a [the] counteractive function and a [the] positive [passive] effect by using [leading by] a chemical insecticide. On one hand, this insecticide may reduce the numbers of pests. From this view, the reasoning that this chemical insecticide can be used widely, which can be deduced easily, however, is not comprehensive, nor dose the cognition that this insecticide is effective.[这个长句如果把主干提出来是‘from this view, the reasoning is not comprehensive.’ 而这个‘reasoning’ 应该是从杀虫角度的推理吧，而‘from this view’应该是从上文的观点来看。所以这句话的中文逻辑就应该是‘ 从杀虫剂能减少害虫数量的方面来说，杀虫剂应该被广泛应用的推理是不全面的’---这不是矛盾了吗？（不知道罗嗦了这么多， 楼主有没有看懂）我认为似乎应该改称两句话 From this view，we can easily deduce the reasoning that this chemical insecticide can be used widely. From another, however, this deduction is not comprehensive enough.] Because on the other hand, (an ability on adequate variability) [什么意思？] will leads an increase in the number of mutants, then, the insecticide loses its effectiveness. Besides, this insecticide may not fit all kinds of insects. Draw a conclusion, the definition on reasoning is the ability to deduce a most reasonable conclusion from comprehensive surveys. And the definition on cognition is to understand the essence and the internal rules from a series phenomena.
[对于这一段我明白楼主的意思，在这个复杂的社会中，需要推理和认知才能得到更好的认识和解决问题，这个例子用的很好~~学习一下。不过，我想指出的是，你的一些长句我看了好几遍才看懂，请问楼主是借鉴的阅读上的长难句吗？如果是，那ETS肯定能 easily 看懂,我得学习一下，如果不是就请楼主再推敲一下能不能修改一下让条理更清楚]

From the vision of the definition of these two skills, [we can find that] they are the basic requirements in the [-the] contemporary society. To discriminate among the options available, one should know how to locate himself and how to plan a way of progress. A proper reasoning about the trend of developing and a comprehensive cognition about current situations is absolutely necessary. One should estimate his ability correctly and consider the possible consequence properly before doing a certain thing. For example, a market research guarantees a profitable selling. [这句话似乎跟前后都没关系啊] Thus, these two skills are just like the ability in walking and respiration. Moreover, birds learn to fly by their instincts, and infants learn to walk by their desire for cognizing the world. Equally, an initiative on learning these two skills as the instinct and the aspiration is taken by all of us. Thereby, for a wasting of resources and energies, there is no need for the society to offer us a specialized training on these skills. Accordingly, it is, indeed, infrequent to find an obvious measure on emphasizing those two skills alone in the society.
[楼主认为推理和认知是人与生俱来的能力，所以没有必要训练，这我不是很同意，与生俱来的应该只是好奇的本性，而真正的推理能力是需要学习的，要不怎么以前GRE里会有逻辑题呢？]

Notwithstanding an infrequency on specific training, those two skills are stressed by the society in many other ways. As the basic prerequisite to the society's progress, the ability on reasoning and the cognition is already intermingled with every areas in the society, such as natural science, social science, social production, art and so on. Take the transgenic soy beans, which applied to the mass production in agricultural, as an example. Nor would these soy beans have popularized, if the researchers had concentrated their energies on how to explore them exclusively. More careful reasonings and cognitions were involved into their considerations. Whether those soy beans lead an additional influence to the people and the environment or not, researchers did comprehensive surveys and anticipations. Also in a job interview, the company regards one's capability on market analysis and market forecast highly. When confront[ing] with the rapid-developing world, one will handle a more complex problem and situation, the demand on these two skills are emphasized [more] highly by the society than ever before.

Therefore, by the emphasis on our intellect on reasoning and cognition from the society momently, an initiative on improving these two skills should be regarded highly by ourselves. [结论应该是社会其实很重视智力，because+你的结论]
[还是上一篇issue给我的感觉，楼主有一定的功底，思路也很好不过可能是为了求句子的变化，使意思有点混乱，你的一些长句我词基本都没太改，只是把顺序改了改，就好了很多（不过本人能力有限，改了的地方只做参考），还有就是请楼主加强连接词的训练。以上该处如有错误请指正！]

lyan1102UID: 2148674

望回拍谢谢
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dudujasperUID: 2180289

非常谢谢你的修改，不是借鉴难句[基本上都是原创~~55] 是一到我想表达的意思的时候就说不清楚了，工夫还没有到家的感觉，还有就是本身写的时候思维就有点乱，前前后后的
顺序有时候都把握不好的说~~应该象你多学学句子哈哈~
（Starting from the premise） [什么意思？] -----意思是“从。。。前提开始”
(an ability on adequate variability) [什么意思？] -----意思是一”（害虫）适应性变异的能力“   [有点专业的呵呵]
关于你的建议俺会好好改正的谢谢ING~~
是不是‘很难从单一的或表面的性质决定东西或实物的好或坏’？]. ------是这个意思~
？（不知道罗嗦了这么多， 楼主有没有看懂）-----看懂鸟~
positive [passive]------还是要用positive,因为前面将的是反作用~
关于第二个论证段：是想说明：我们学习逻辑和认识能力是一种本能，而不是这两种技能是我们的本能~[我可能又没论证清楚555]

[ 本帖最后由 dudujasper 于 2006-2-24 19:07 编辑 ]

dudujasperUID: 2180289

谢谢小璇子，俺家没装WORD，俺努力不犯语法错误~~~~5555
existed(exist没有被动！）-----这个我是真的不知道555
dose（什么意思？）----就是说 the cognition that this insecticide is effective is not comprehensive too
（我要昏倒了~你的...中式~have to make a plan to make progress). ------呵呵，这个~~好丢丢~~不说了~~~
Notwithstanding, an infrequency on specific training这又是状语？？？？？, ------这个不能把notwithstanding用逗号阁开，去查查它的用法，可以这么用：尽管一个什么样的事情~~

这两个小例子不合适吧？本性？怎么到那去呢？不是逻辑推理么？那都不是一类的吧？婴儿就会推理呢？. -------看我后面那句，是说我们主动学习那两种技能的过程就象小孩和小鸟，是一种本能和自主的过程，我没表达清楚5555

前面都没东西~不是这样NOR的吧？？看不懂~如果我错了就告诉我-----有这种用法的开头，我原来见过，我还满喜欢用的说55

关于思路咱就不说了，我郁闷着呢~~~~

adugduUID: 2177983

第十一期：Issue47
"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
(社会对人类智力即逻辑推理和其他认知技能没有予以足够的重视)

论点：社会虽没有单独明确的强调这两方面的技能，但是社会在它实际的发展过程中却时时刻刻都在对我们强调这两方面的技能
OUTLINE：

P1：首先根据现在社会的复杂性，给出什么是逻辑技能和认知技能
P2：社会可能确实没有单独和明确对我们提出这两项技能的重要性，而且也没有必要去花这精力去提出。（这些技能作为一种基本的生存的工具没有必要花这些精力）
P3：但是这并不意味着社会没有给予足够的重视，反而在它发展各个方面都有重视这些技能

WORD:632[我直接采用已经被大改了的版本哈，免的重复]

A brilliant performance of an opera needs a group of skilled and excellent actors. Equally, a society, developed rapidly [a rapidly developing society], demands us have a higher capability [great capabilities], especially on [-on] [the skills of] reasoning and cognition. Although there is not a specific emphasis on these two skills in our society [Although our society has not put a specific emphasis on these two skills], they [只用这一个词好像有点孤单吧，我觉得至少有两个词用这种形式才合适], as an basic requirement on surviving in nowadays, are emphasized momently [？] in various aspects.[they are actually thought a lot as basic requirements on surviving in a unconsciously way. ]
改的有点多了，只是我觉得改了读着舒服点，楼主再好好推敲一下吧
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（Starting from the premise） [什么意思？] that every definition has an appropriate meaning when it adapts itself to a specific condition. Therefore, in today's society ,flooded with high-tech, furious competitions and complex information, the skills on reasoning and cognition are influenced by many factors. Considering a [the] complexity of the society, sometimes it is difficult, or even unable, to distinguish right from wrong [了解楼主的本义，应该不是很难分清楚对和错吧，是不是‘很难从单一的或表面的性质决定东西或实物的好或坏’？]. The contradictions are always existed, such as a conflict between a [the] counteractive function and a [the] positive [passive] effect by using [leading by] a chemical insecticide. On one hand, this insecticide may reduce the numbers of pests. From this view, the reasoning that this chemical insecticide can be used widely, which can be deduced easily, however, is not comprehensive, nor dose the cognition that this insecticide is effective.[这个长句如果把主干提出来是‘from this view, the reasoning is not comprehensive.’ 而这个‘reasoning’ 应该是从杀虫角度的推理吧，而‘from this view’应该是从上文的观点来看。所以这句话的中文逻辑就应该是‘ 从杀虫剂能减少害虫数量的方面来说，杀虫剂应该被广泛应用的推理是不全面的’---这不是矛盾了吗？（不知道罗嗦了这么多， 楼主有没有看懂）我认为似乎应该改称两句话 From this view，we can easily deduce the reasoning that this chemical insecticide can be used widely. From another, however, this deduction is not comprehensive enough.] Because on the other hand, (an ability on adequate variability) [什么意思？] will leads an increase in the number of mutants, then, the insecticide loses its effectiveness. Besides, this insecticide may not fit all kinds of insects. Draw a conclusion, the definition on reasoning is the ability to deduce a most reasonable conclusion from comprehensive surveys. And the definition on cognition is to understand the essence and the internal rules from a series phenomena.
[对于这一段我明白楼主的意思，在这个复杂的社会中，需要推理和认知才能得到更好的认识和解决问题，这个例子用的很好~~学习一下。不过，我想指出的是，你的一些长句我看了好几遍才看懂，请问楼主是借鉴的阅读上的长难句吗？如果是，那ETS肯定能 easily 看懂,我得学习一下，如果不是就请楼主再推敲一下能不能修改一下让条理更清楚]
[看的我好晕哦，幸亏有前人仔细推敲了一番，感觉说理的成分不够啊，例子不错注意要详实精练]

From the vision of the definition of these two skills, [we can find that] they are the basic requirements in the [-the] contemporary society. To discriminate among the options available, one should know how to locate himself and how to plan a way of progress. A proper reasoning about the trend of developing and a comprehensive cognition about current situations is absolutely necessary. One should estimate his ability correctly and consider the possible consequence properly before doing a certain thing. For example, a market research guarantees a profitable selling. [这句话似乎跟前后都没关系啊] Thus, these two skills are just like the ability in walking and respiration. Moreover, birds learn to fly by their instincts, and infants learn to walk by their desire for cognizing the world. Equally, an initiative on learning these two skills as the instinct and the aspiration is taken by all of us. Thereby, for a wasting of resources and energies, there is no need for the society to offer us a specialized training on these skills. Accordingly, it is, indeed, infrequent to find an obvious measure on emphasizing those two skills alone in the society.
[楼主认为推理和认知是人与生俱来的能力，所以没有必要训练，这我不是很同意，与生俱来的应该只是好奇的本性，而真正的推理能力是需要学习的，要不怎么以前GRE里会有逻辑题呢？]
[其实说推理和认知是本能也没有关系，关键前头文章对这两个的定义要合适，在有了相应定义的前提下，什么都可以写什么都可以谈，否则就很莫名其妙了，理由不充分了]

Notwithstanding an infrequency on specific training, those two skills are stressed by the society in many other ways. As the basic prerequisite to the society's progress, the ability on reasoning and the cognition is already intermingled with every areas in the society, such as natural science, social science, social production, art and so on. Take the transgenic soy beans, which applied to the mass production in agricultural, as an example. Nor would these soy beans have popularized, if the researchers had concentrated their energies on how to explore them exclusively. More careful reasonings and cognitions were involved into their considerations. Whether those soy beans lead an additional influence to the people and the environment or not, researchers did comprehensive surveys and anticipations. Also in a job interview, the company regards one's capability on market analysis and market forecast highly. When confront[ing] with the rapid-developing world, one will handle a more complex problem and situation, the demand on these two skills are emphasized [more] highly[又是highly啊] by the society than ever before.
[最后一句做了一个比较我觉得没有必要，跟主题无关啊。感觉好象跟前面有些矛盾的地方，思路上还要理清啊]

Therefore, by the emphasis on our intellect on reasoning and cognition from the society momently, an initiative on improving these two skills should be regarded highly by ourselves. [结论应该是社会其实很重视智力，because+你的结论]
[还是上一篇issue给我的感觉，楼主有一定的功底，思路也很好不过可能是为了求句子的变化，使意思有点混乱，你的一些长句我词基本都没太改，只是把顺序改了改，就好了很多（不过本人能力有限，改了的地方只做参考），还有就是请楼主加强连接词的训练。以上该处如有错误请指正！]
[又用了highly我的烦了，考官也不会喜欢的。语言上先搁搁，我认为在论证上还是姚加强，毕竟思想才是文章的灵魂所在]

dudujasperUID: 2180289

烤鸡啊~~那个highly俺会想词换滴，先将就一下，本人处于努力ING
还有下次有点颜色成不？看的我好晕~~谢谢~~

dzhb644UID: 2127664

第十一期：Issue47
"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
(社会对人类智力即逻辑推理和其他认知技能没有予以足够的重视)

论点：社会虽没有单独明确的强调这两方面的技能，但是社会在它实际的发展过程中却时时刻刻都在对我们强调这两方面的技能
OUTLINE：

P1：首先根据现在社会的复杂性，给出什么是逻辑技能和认知技能
P2：社会可能确实没有单独和明确对我们提出这两项技能的重要性，而且也没有必要去花这精力去提出。（这些技能作为一种[基本的生存的工具]没有必要花这些精力）
P3：但是这并不意味着社会没有给予足够的重视，反而在它发展各个方面都有重视这些技能

WORD:632

A brilliant performance of an opera needs a group of skilled and excellent actors. Equally, a society, developed rapidly, demands us have a higher capability, especially on reasoning and cognition.[个人认为这个类比不好, skilled and excellent 只能有很少数人达到,或者说是针对不同艺术式的不同类型的观众.然而,题目中society是个泛指的概念, 表达了社会中的大多数人都具有reasoning and cognition的能力, 是一种基本能力的意思.(正如你提纲中第二点所说)] Although there is not a specific emphasis on these two skills in our society, they, as an [a]basic requirement on surviving in nowadays, are emphasized momently[constantly/continuously, 总觉得momently用在这里有点怪, 好像是在强调那种时时刻刻的感觉.] in various aspects. [前后的说法感觉有点矛盾, 在这里你区别了specific emphasis和 constant emphasis两个概念,可是我觉得这两个的差别并不显而易见,所以前后两个emphasis给人的直接感觉就是有点矛盾. 用不同的词可能好一点.]

Starting from the premise that every definition has an appropriate meaning when it adapts itself to a specific condition. Therefore, in today's society ,flooded with high-tech, furious competitions and complex information, the skills on reasoning and cognition are influenced by many factors. Considering a complexity of the society, sometimes it is difficult, or even unable, to distinguish right from wrong. The contradictions are always existed, such as a conflict between a counteractive function and a possitive [positive]effect by[of] using a chemical insecticide. On one hand, this insecticide may reduce the numbers of pests. From this view, the reasoning that this chamical [chemical] insecticide can be used widely, which can be deduced easily, however, is not comprehensive, nor dose the cognition that this insecticide is effective.[明白了最后这个分句的意思,可是语法上就不知所云了,缺少谓语.这句总体感觉不太自然,看起来断断续续的.] Because on the other hand, an ability[???ability] on adequate variability will leads an increase in the number of mutants, then, the insecticide loses its effectiveness. Besides, this insecticide may not fit all kinds of insects.[以上给出了事物矛盾的性质,举例很好] Draw a conclusion, the definition on reasoning[你相当于做了这样一个推理,事物是矛盾的――reasoning and cognition的定义, 感觉论证脱节.你可以说, 因为我们面对的问题是……..性质,所以我们认识事物的方法应该是…….] is the ability to deduce a most reasonable conclusion from comprehensive surveys. And the definition on cognition is to understand the essence and the internal rules from a series phenomenons.

From the vision of the definition of these two skills, they are the basic requirements in the contemporary society. To discriminate among the options avilable,[available] one shoule konw [should know]how to locate himself and how to plan a way of prograss.[to progress][这句话可不是那么English 啊,呵呵] A proper reasoning about the trend of developing and a comprehensive cognition about current situations is absolutely necessary. One should estimate his ability correctly and consider the possible consequence properly before doing a certain thing. For example, a market research guarantees a profitable selling. Thus, these two skills are just like the ability in walking and respiration.[这种类比只能说明两者都是必须的,但是对于你所想要表达的instinctive我认为不是很好, 因为guarantee the profit并不是天生就具有的能力,即便是经过学习,也要多年的实践锻炼才能达到,而且还要受到外界的环境影响.我觉得你忽视了重要的一点,reasoning and cognition并不是象吃饭喝水那样不学习就具有,它们都要经过学习才会得到,特别是reasoning and cognition的方法是很重要的方面,另外,这种能力不是静止的,而是随着社会的发展需要不断增强的.] Moreover, birds learn to fly by their instincts, and infants learn to walk by their desire for cognizing the world. Equally, an initiative on learning these two skills as the instinct and the aspiration is taken by all of us. [上面的例子没有说明在这段中最基本的观点,因为你没有阐述这种instinctive 和reasoning and cognition 之间的关系, 无论是walk还是 respire 都没有经过reasoning and cognition 的过程, 至少不是显而易见的, 这样就不能说服别人.]Thereby, for a wasting of resources and energies, there is no need for the society to offer us a specialized training on these skills. Accordingly, it is, indeed, infrequent to find an obvious measure on emphasizing those two skills alone in the society.[这两句话有点绝对,比如类比,推理,查阅等这些技能与方法都是我们经过学习和练习才具有的,社会也投入了力量培养我们的这些技能.]

Notwithstanding an infrequency on specific training, those two skills are stressed by the society in many other ways. [这里有点不太清楚,特别是在几个概念的区分上,比如你上段说society没有必要花精力,这段说社会各界的压力,这两个society好象在文中不一样]As the basic prerequisite to the society's progress, the ability on reasoning and the cognition is already intermingled with every areas in the society, such as natural science, social science, social production, art and so on. Take the transgenic soy beans, which applied to the mass production in agricultural, as an example. Nor would these soy beans have popularized, if the researchers had concentrated their energies on how to explore them exclusively. More careful reasonings and cognitions were involved into their considerations. Whether[would] those soy beans lead an additional influence to the people and the environment or not, researchers did comprehensive surveys and anticipations. Also in a job interview, the company regards one's capability on market analysis and market forecast highly. When confront with the rapid-developing world, one will handle a more complex problem and situation, the demand on these two skills are emphasized highly by the society than ever before.[这段的后半部分说的比较清楚]

Therefore, by the emphasis on our intellect on reasoning and cognition from the society momently, an initiative on improving these two skills should be regarded highly by ourselves.


呵呵,得知你没有装word,那么错误就不算多了,加油啊(不过我个人认为,word还是必要的,否则有的小错误可能自己根本检查不到,特别是经常出现的手误,看起来还觉得是对的,呵呵)
这种写法比较新颖,经验不多,所以我就不做评论了.
第一个body段的逻辑组织不是很好, 很像中文常用的行文方式, 先做很多分析和铺垫,然后再得出结论. 我个人不赞成这么写,我认为ts一定要清楚,一方面是老外的习惯,另一方面考虑到阅卷考官好给分.
第二个body中逻辑有点难以接受,感觉类比不是很恰当,也许你说的是对的,但是不是很直观贴切.
第三个body中,过渡的部分我觉得不是很好,我认为问题出在上面一段,虽然细看似乎合理,但总觉得有点偷换概念和矛盾. 后面证明社会对reasoning and cognition的能力很重视写的挺好,思路挺清楚,看来是好好审了题的了.
这是我的意见,希望大家共同进步!
Dzhb644
2006-2-25

dudujasperUID: 2180289

非常谢谢你的修改，是不是感觉读俺的文章[尤其是前两段]象是在做ARGU的逻辑错误分析啊~~HOHO
:p我也觉得写的满多漏洞的55555~还有就是基本功不怎么到家，表达的也不是很清楚~
还有第一段论证段的那个恶心的长句子很多成分是我后来补充上去的，我自己看的都满恶心呵呵~~~

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