以后每次同期作文都贴到这，欢迎大家拍砖：） 第五期在9楼

midiyangUID: 2203266

14. Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

我的文章:lol：

Whether student should be required to attend classes has aroused wide concern during students and faculties in campus. Views on the issue on question vary from person to person. Some one think that it is necessary for students to attend class on time in term of responsibility and in respect to teachers who offer the courses, while others think that students have their rights to choose whether they should go to the class or not. In my point of view, I positively agree with the former opinion.

First, in most universities, students select the courses they will learn during the semester by themselves at the beginning of each term, so they must have relatively clear idea what they will learn and what they have to do with the courses they choose. If a student takes a class and does not attend the class, it is impolite to the teacher and unfair to other students who want to take this class but it has no spare space. A student, at a university level, should have the cognition that he or she has the responsibility to cherish each opportunity the society providing him or her, which is also a vital requirement in the future life after school. So it is compulsory to attend classes as a university student.

Second, university courses are all offered and well designed by teachers which they have attach great attention and a lot time to. I absolutely believe that only if we are serious in class, we can learn a lot of knowledge during the class time. And at a civilized society, none of us can have a good life without personal interaction, which is greatly enhanced by mutual understanding and respect. Similarly, students have to attend classes so as to understand their teachers more so that they can communicate more efficiently and get more out of the classes.

As all the points I mentioned above, I am positively convinced by the opinion that students should be required to the classes. Our universities should take some measures to persuade their students back to class and students themselves should be more and more conscious that it is very vital to go to class.


希望得到大家的鼓励，我要继续加油，呵呵:victory:

[ 本帖最后由 midiyang 于 2006-4-29 23:30 编辑 ]

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Whether student should be required to attend classes has aroused wide concern during(among???) students and faculties in campus. Views on the issue on question vary from person to person. Some one think that it is necessary for students to attend class on time in term of responsibility and in respect to teachers who offer the courses, while others think that students have their rights to choose whether they should go to the class or not. In my point of view, I positively agree with the former opinion. (个人认为POSITIVELY有点CHINGLISH)

First, in most universities, students select the courses they will learn during the semester by themselves at the beginning of each term这句看上去有点混乱，虽然细看没有歧义，但这样的长句子个人认为状语提出来好一点，虽然大家都在拼命地造长句子^_^, so they must have a relatively clear idea lack pron.what they will learn and what they have to do with the courses they choose. If a student takes a class and does not attend the class, it is impolite to the teacher and unfair to other students who want to take this class but it has no spare space(but doesn't have a spare place) maybe better. A student, at a university level??, should have the cognition that he or she has the responsibility to cherish each opportunity the society providing him or her(to cherish each oppurtunity society provides)会不会简洁点？, which is also a vital requirement in the future life after school（AFTER SCHOOL 特指放学）. So it is compulsory to attend classes as a university student.

Second, university courses are all offered and well designed by teachers which they have attachED great attention and a lot time to（定从像是修饰TEACHERS）. I absolutely believe that only if we are serious in class, we can learn a lot of knowledge during the class time. And at a civilized society, none of us can have a good life without personal interaction, which is greatly enhanced by mutual understanding and respect. Similarly, students have to attend classes so as to understand their teachers more so that they can communicate more efficiently and get more out of the classes.


As all the points I mentioned above, I am positively convinced by the opinion that students should be required to…… the classes. Our universities should take some measures to persuade their students back to class and students themselves should be more and more conscious that it is very vital to go to cl

加说服性强的例子能更好些！！

midiyangUID: 2203266

谢谢楼上朋友:)

我后来也觉得自己的这篇文章有点混乱。我又写了一遍

Whether university students should be required to attend classes or not has aroused great attention among students and faculties in campus. Views on the issue in question vary from person to person. Some people think it is necessary for students to go to classes, whereas others believe that students have their rights to determine if they will go to classes. In my point of view, I take no hesitation to side with the former opinion.

First, it is students’ responsibility to attend classes. At the beginning of each semester, students, in most universities, are allowed to select the courses they will take in that semester by themselves. So when a student has chosen a course, he should have a relatively clear idea about what he will learn and what he has to do with the course. If a student chooses a course without going to the class, it is quiet impolite to the instructor who give this course and unfair to students who want to take the course but do not have a spare place. A student of a university level should have the cognition that he has the responsibility to cherish each opportunity the society provides, which is also a vital requirement in future life after university education. So it is compulsory to attend classes as a university student.

Second, attending classes provides students the best and easiest way to communicate with instructors and classmates. While being in the class, students can ask their instructor questions and participate in classroom discussion with their classmates, which will help them with their learning and enhance interaction among students and instructors, students and students. If a student does not always go to classes, he will gradually find it hard to understand what his instructors say in class and catch up with his classmates.

In addition, I absolutely believe that only if students have positive attitude and take the classes seriously, they will gain a lot of knowledge from them and even enjoy them.

In conclusion, I strongly commit to the opinion that it is necessary for students to attend classes.


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[ 本帖最后由 midiyang 于 2006-4-24 20:44 编辑 ]

midiyangUID: 2203266

欢迎朋友们继续拍砖，帮忙修改新文章啊，谢谢:)

夜一UID: 2130338

看了楼主第二段的论述，受到不少启发
这段论述最好的在与扣准了美国式的大学授课方式，注册选课与人数限制，无疑是增强了论述的现实性，值得学习

不过我觉得第三段和第四段可以合并，因为目的都是learn more，而且第四段只有一句话，没有支持的论述内容，从结构上来看不甚完整
最后一段呢，似乎还是在多写个一两句好，因为TWE的目的就是看学生有没有大量写作论文的能力，而大多数的专业论文的结论部分一定有概括前面的内容，而不只是给出一个结论而已

midiyangUID: 2203266

谢谢楼上朋友的建议:)
恳请别的筒子们继续拍砖，谢谢，而且有拍必回:handshake

woodygtUID: 2136751

我也认为倒数第二段那一句话还不如不写，其实论文这种东西挺八股的，完全按照格式来就好了，这里单单放这么一句话完全没有说服力的。不如多腾出些时间把结尾完善一下。

关于例子的问题我现在也把握不好，主要是不是很习惯这种例证的方式，唉，这个估计得多多的练了。。。

michel_shaoUID: 204704

lz 再写的一篇 确定写全了?为什么最后2段那么少?
还有同意楼上的那个观点:一味的句子把句子拉长并不一定就好,长短句结合比较好.

最好最好不要用FIRST SECOND,用有逻辑的句子联系起来.



https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

midiyangUID: 2203266

同期作文 第五期 欢迎拍砖

请同志们拍砖，一定互拍:handshake

Have you ever been disturbed by the noises coming from your neighbor’ house? Have you ever met your neighbor a cold face as if he did not know you at all? Have you ever caught a serious fever but your neighbor just turned his back on you? If you have never faced such experiences, you would never know how important it is for your neighbor to be considerate, polite and kind-hearted.

Consideration is the main concern of most people when talking of a neighbor. We don not want our family life to be destroyed only due to our neighbor’ inconsideration. If your neighbor always uses noisy equipment like vacuum cleaners or has parties during the night, you can hardly do you  things unaffected and can not go to sleep early. Especially when there are school kids at home, it is unlikely for them to study well and have good grades at school. So a good neighbor means showing consideration to others.

While people always first think of consideration ,politeness is also a significant quality of a good neighbor. People are emotive and can be easily affected by others’ reaction to them. Imagine every morning when walking out the door , you meet your neighbor who just gives you a cold glance and turns away quickly. What is your feeling at that moment? For me , I would feel as if I was attacked by a hostile person. Undoubtedly, a neighbor with good politeness can make you feel sorrowed with kind people and warmth.

Except consideration and politeness, kind-heart is equally important. There is an old saying” better good neighbors near than relations far away.” Inter-help between neighbors can form a cozy and kind atmosphere in the neighborhood. When you catch cold or have some other diseases, kind neighbor would be willing to take care of you, and equally, you like to help your neighbor to overcome tough occasions too. having kind-hearted neighbors around, loneliness and helplessness can rarely attack you.

In conclusion, according to all the statements above, I therefore reinforce my standpoint that consideration, politeness and kind-heart are the most important qualities for a good neighbor.

lanccyUID: 2156906

看了第5期的，好文章！学了一句old saying。开头有新意。之前我也写了一段这样的开头，但是后来发现主体写不下去了，贴出来楼主帮我处处主意吧，看看接下去怎么展开。


Can you expect a morning call from your neighbor in case you acciendetally miss an interview? Can you feel relieved to leave your cat to your neighbor while you are away on business? Or can you receive apropos advice when you are in trouble? These are all among the various criteria our society has set for us to assess our neighbors, which are honesty, intelligence and reliability.

然后要怎么具体举例子呢？

这是后来另外写的一篇
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... e%3D1#pid1768504935

u571UID: 2175894

Have you ever been disturbed by the noises coming from your neighbor’ house? Have you ever met your neighbor a cold face as if he did not know you at all? Have you ever caught a serious fever but your neighbor just turned his back on you? If you have never faced such experiences, you would never know how important it is for your neighbor to be considerate, polite and kind-hearted.
is the main concern of most people when talking of a neighbor. We don not want our family lifei think sth else ...(i cant come up with it now) is better^_^ to be destroyed only due to our neighbor’ inconsideration. If your neighbor always uses noisy equipment like vacuum cleaners or has parties during the night, you can hardly do you  things unaffected and can not go to sleep early. Especially when there are school kids at home, it is unlikely for them to study well and have good grades at school. So a good neighbor means showing consideration to others.|
While people always first think of consideration ,politeness is also a significant quality of a good neighbor. People are emotive and can be easily affected by others’ reaction to them. Imagine every morning when walking out the door , you meet your neighbor who just gives you a cold glance and turns away quickly. What is your feeling at that moment? For me , I would feel as if I was attacked by a hostile person. Undoubtedly, a neighbor with good politeness can make you feel sorrowedi am not sure if sorrow can be a verb...... with kind people and warmth.
Except consideration and politeness, kind-heart is equally important. There is an old saying” better good neighbors near than relations far away.” 赞！！我怎么想不出来呢。。。。Inter-help between neighbors can form a cozy and kind atmosphere in the neighborhood. When you catch cold or have some other diseases, kind neighbor would be willing to take care of you, and equally, you like to help your neighbor to overcome tough occasions too. having kind-hearted neighbors around, loneliness and helplessness can rarely attack you.
In conclusion, according to all the statements above, I therefore reinforce my standpoint that consideration, politeness and kind-heart are the most important qualities for a good neighbor.


建议不要完全照ZHANGHONGYAN的摸版， 楼主不觉得T考生有很多都买了他那本小书吗。。。
我主张思路的新颖。摸版嘛，自己写顺了最好。
我的很多先前的ESSAY都是照张的说的去办的，结果，一看就是大八股。。。。

不过排比我觉得是一个能用就用的东西，
have you ever seen the beautiful scenery of west lake?..........
呵呵。

midiyangUID: 2203266

surrowed是错误的,应当是surounded才对.
担忧啊,经常这种简单的单词都写不出来,或是写错.