Issue130 【CSMY作文互改小组】第三次作业 有改必复

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Issue130
How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
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1、how children are scoialized is a factor of affecting destiny of scoiety,also easily neglected one, but not the determining factor.
2、fortunately, we have learned some things to learn to raise children, not merely socialization, can help bring about a better society, it is still far for everyone to master the skills.
3、 so we still have some work to do.

It is too extreme for the auger to say that how children are socialized determined the destiny of society, though it is an important affecting factor. I concede that what we have done is not insufficient to raise children who can help bring about a better society, however it is fortunate that we have realized the importance. I will explain why I cannot accept the passive standpoint as follows.

As we know, how a society is determined by a lot of factors, and not merely determined by socialization of the children, though it is an important factor. First of all, let us see what dose the socialization mean. It is commonly believed that socialization is a process by which children or young animals and, occasionally, adults adopt the behavior patterns of the culture that surrounds them. The function of it is mainly for people to adjust the environment and live with each other with more harmony. We cannot neglect the effect of socialization, but we will discover it is not as vital as the issue said, if we broaden our mind to see other factors. Technology can be a appropriate example. Western countries gained its best chance to develop its society when the first Industrial revolution taken place. By the invention of steam engine, invented by Watt, these countries thoroughly changed their social life, not only the life style, but also the thinking style. Socialization can never bring about such great chances, so, in my opinion, it is a subsidiary factor.

Regarding to the second sentence that "we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society", it is an injustice claim, especially for educators and psychologists, who have worked on it for such a long time and attain so much fruits. We have already know that if we want our children to bring about a better society, we should let them manage the basic knowledge and skills, which help them live on their own. Additionally, socialization is also an important part, including how to cooperate with others, how to express your idea efficiently, how to let other accept your opinion. Nowadays, educators and psychologists find that creativity also play an indispensable role in bring about a better society, since it can bring our society new things which may prompt our quality of life. So they are studying how the creative activities take place and how to make students more creative without restrains to their mind. Luckily, some remarkable measures have applied in the school, such as lessons of teaching invention skills and arrange some extracurricular activities to stimulate creativity of children. In brief, human beings are never born with wisdom, but we are on our way to reveal the answer to the question.

Nevertheless, what we have done can not make us over positive, we must be aware that there are still a lot of work to do. An ideal society in our mind is a peaceful society that everyone lives together like brothers and sisters, and there is no poverty, no ignorant and no continuous wars. A large numbers of obstacles are in our way to a better society which are waiting to be removed by our children. They should know what human paid for the greedy in the history, how important for us to live peacefully, and which science and technology can decrease the number of the poor people. It is not only depend on the educators but every parent and people who live an example for the children.

In short, my main opinion is that the destiny of society is determined by many factors, which are needed to be learned by the parents and society, because the children determine the future of the society. Fortunately, we are working on it.

花了两个小时第一次把文章写上了600，虽然我一直认为字数=！质量，但是第一次写出那么多，还是有点惊喜地。
本来这两天考得太多了，想休息一下，看到lyuzhe 在网上给我留言，顿时觉得很感动阿，本来以为消失几天没什么关系的，可是组员如此的热心，心中一激动于是不顾疲惫，写了这么多。

写完后，感觉我的问题还是很多，感觉这篇文章主要还是句式单调，再就是想例子的时候，不记得英文名字，我决定在期末考完后，恶补一下。
感谢gter温暖的大家庭，让我坚持继续写下去，也希望大家写作水平突飞猛进！！

[ 本帖最后由 yiran27 于 2007-1-12 23:09 编辑 ]