Issue51 从社会学角度写的，不知道合适否？

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提纲：
1兴趣是最好的老师，对学习有激励作用
2尊重每个个体的教育有利于民族文化多远性（时间不够没有写玩，呵呵）
3个人兴趣和需要只有符合社会要求才能真正具有推动力，并对社会有益



TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
The recent history of education witness a controversy over the ultimate goal of education, those who considered as idealist argued that education is for individual's sake and emphasize the motivation of personal interests and needs. While those who considered as realists put that education is for society's sake and focus on the social demands which may suppress individual characteristic to some extent. My own view diverges from both of the foregoing thought. I assert that a more rational education approach should tread its way between the idealists’ individualized teaching and the realists' generalized education. Construction of modern education system should take both micro and macro situation into consideration so as to accomplish a appropriate individual socialization.
I begin by recalling a famous saying that "interest is the best teacher"-a description of the significant role played by personal interests and needs in education. As is shown by social psychologists, one with positive attitudes toward a certain subject will behave in more concentration and higher efficiency. Moreover, despite the motivation brought by interests and personal needs, those so-called characteristic of success including ambition, persistence, courage, creativity, imagination and critical spirit may also engendered from individual preference. No one could seriously believe that the absence of interests leads to the achievement of Foucault who resisted to become a surgeon as his father's anticipation and chose to live as a non-traditional philosopher -absorbed in the experience of limit which lead to the extension of  the academic range and emphasis shifts to the little-mentioned subject: crime, prison, madness ,sexuality and punishment; the experience of limit also resulted in the abandonment of traditional love morality, despite of the risk engendered by homosexuality which consequently caused whose early death of AIDS. Foucault came up with his rand new theory of the history of sexuality on techniques of self and morality. Thus, education according with individuality contributes to develop student’s potential to the full.
Moreover, individual development in a macro situation contributes to cultural diversity and nourishment consistent with individual differences. The great harmony of international cultural is constructed by the overall efforts of each ethnic group for its own purpose and the consensus of other cultural groups’ contribution to men and women.
However, the interests and demand must be worthwhile to pursue, that is to say the personal goal must be rational and available. Individual behavior is embedded in the ongoing social environment. One should take two social constraints into consideration on action. As is shown in the rational choice theory, the first constraints is the “scarcity of resources” and the second is “the institutional constraints” .In other words, the two constraints adjust the personal goal of one individual according to the social condition. Those antisocial interests often illustrated as violent, disposition, criminal minds or even war hysteria is detrimental to the survival of society. The rising rate of juvenile crimes in the USA may in part because of the overemphasize on individualized education which suggests that some extent of constraints be put on individuality, for one should educated to be a social member but rather an atomized subject. One’s behavior considered to be rational when one makes a decision by combining one’s own rational choice with sociability, approval, status and power etc.
All in all, the true value of education is to cultivate individual to be the one he or she wants to be and meanwhile the role one plays is also according to other person’s anticipation. In short, education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student on the precondition that the personal demands is both rational and available.                                                

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The recent history of education witness a controversy over the ultimate goal of education, those who (are) considered as idealist argued that education is for individual's sake and emphasize(d) the motivation of personal interests and needs. While those who (are) considered as realists put that education is for society's sake and focus(ed) on the social demands which may suppress individual characteristic to some extent. My own view diverges from both of the foregoing thought. I assert that a more rational education approach should tread its way between the idealists’ individualized teaching and the realists' generalized education. Construction of modern education system should take both micro and macro situation into consideration so as to accomplish a (an) appropriate individual socialization.
I begin by recalling a famous saying (很好的引出主题句的方式，赞一个!)that "interest is the best teacher"-a description of the significant role played by personal interests and needs in education. As is shown by social psychologists, one with positive attitudes toward a certain subject will behave in (是否应该是with?) more concentration and higher efficiency. Moreover, despite the motivation brought by interests and personal needs, those so-called characteristic of success including ambition, persistence, courage, creativity, imagination and critical spirit may (be) also engendered from individual preference. No one could seriously believe that the absence of interests leads to the achievement of Foucault who resisted to become a surgeon as his father's anticipation and chose to live as a non-traditional philosopher -absorbed in the experience of limit which lead to the extension of  the academic range and emphasis shifts to the little-mentioned subject: crime, prison, madness ,sexuality and punishment; the experience of limit also resulted in the abandonment of traditional love morality, despite of the risk engendered by homosexuality which consequently caused whose early death of AIDS. Foucault came up with his rand new theory of the history of sexuality on techniques of self and morality. Thus, education according with individuality contributes to develop student’s potential to the full (总结句很简练!).
Moreover, individual development in a macro situation contributes to cultural diversity and nourishment consistent with individual differences. The great harmony of international cultural (culture?) is constructed by the overall efforts of each ethnic group for its own purpose and the consensus of other cultural groups’ contribution to men and women.
However, the interests and demand must be worthwhile to pursue, that is to say the personal goal must be rational and available (attainable?). Individual behavior is embedded in the ongoing social environment. (很好的句子，学习！) One should take two social constraints into consideration on action (建议改为before he/she carries out an action，原句读起来似乎有一点点头重脚轻.) As is shown in the rational choice theory, the first constraints (constraint) is the “scarcity of resources” and the second is “the institutional constraints” .In other words, the two constraints adjust the personal goal of one individual according to the social condition. Those antisocial interests often illustrated as violent (violence?), disposition, criminal minds or even war hysteria is (are) detrimental to the survival of society (好句子). The rising rate of juvenile crimes in the USA may in part because of the overemphasize on individualized education which suggests that some extent of constraints be put on individuality, for one should educated to be a social member but rather an atomized subject. One’s behavior (is/will be) considered to be rational when one makes a decision by combining one’s own rational choice with sociability, approval, status and power etc. (个人觉得这最后一句有些显得跑题了?)
All in all, the true value of education is to cultivate individual to be the one he or she wants to be and meanwhile the role one plays is also according to other person’s anticipation. In short, education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student on the precondition that the personal demands is both rational and available.

1.总的来说，我觉得全文的观点很新颖，从“兴趣和需要的前提特征”谈起，而不是分析“教育的导向”。非常受启发。
2.此外，文章的语言功底很好，词汇用得也很恰当。3.例子很丰富，用的也很恰当。

有一个问题：我不知道这样的开头是不是太长了？
此外：如果有空的话，希望能批判批判我的作文，十分感谢：
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