生如夏花第七次作业

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7.15:第七次作业

独立写作: (原因题目)
In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay
口语:
describe favorite sport of your country


It is reported that people are living longer than ancient times. What are causes of this phenomenon? I think there are three reasons to this phenomenon. Neat living environment, rational nutrition and skilled medical treatment are essential departments which propel the longevity of human being.

First of all, cleaning living environment is a fundamental solution. It includes cleaning and comfortable living environment, healthful habits and hygienic behaves. For example, the average life year of the Swiss has exceeded 78 years-old. The Swiss standard of cleanliness and hygiene is not only evident in the streets and houses, it is also found in the public toilets. It is embodied in every aspects of social life. It is easy to make a conclusion that cleaning surrounding play an important part in the longevity.

Next, balance diet plays an important role in longevity. Try to balance the diet by eating more fruit and less fat, do more exercise and eat relatively fewer calories food. In India, there are so many vegetarians, meanwhile in western world vegetarianism is booming. In developed world, balance diet always outweighs the one in developing countries.

Last, medical treatment is important either. With the development of medicine, most of diseases have not be untreated- hypertension, diabetes, cardiovascular diseases and so on, even some cancers or sarcomas. In China, the average life expectancy is only 36.6 years before 1949. After half of century, it reach 71.8 years in 2002, close to that of a medium-level developed country, advanced medical treatment contributes to progress of the longevity.

In sum, there are so many reasons contribute to the longevity of human being. As we believing, with the development of science and technology, the span of human being would become longer and longer.

Speaking:
I think ski is one of the favorite sports in my country. First, ski is a real game of brave man. Exploring, adventure, challenging spirit are extremely embodied in this game. Challenging nature, challenging limit, challenging oneself is an eternal topic to human being. Moreover, it combines strengthen and speed in an excellent way. Every turning and stopping represent the combination of strengthen and beauty. Meanwhile, keeping balance is an important skill in ski. It is advantages to make balance of body.

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独立写作: (原因题目)
In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay
口语:
describe favorite sport of your country


It is reported that people are living longer than ancient times（不太合适，因为题目说的好像是个渐进的过程，而不是与某一个时间点做比较）. What are causes of this phenomenon? I think there are three reasons to this phenomenon. Neat living environment, rational nutrition and skilled medical treatment are essential departments（确信是这个词！） which propel the longevity of human being.

First of all, cleaning living environment is a fundamental solution. It includes cleaning and comfortable living environment, healthful habits and hygienic behaves. For example, the average life year of the Swiss has exceeded 78 years-old. The Swiss standard of cleanliness and hygiene is not only evident in the streets and houses, it is also（but also） found in the public toilets. It is embodied in every aspects of social life. It is easy to make a conclusion that cleaning surrounding play an important part in the longevity. (应该加上那么1句2句的为什么干净的环境会使人长寿！)

Next, balance diet plays an important role in longevity. Try to balance the diet by eating more fruit and less fat, do more exercise and eat relatively fewer calories food. In India, there are so many vegetarians, meanwhile in western world vegetarianism is booming. In developed world, balance diet always outweighs the one in developing countries.

Last, medical treatment is important either. With the development of medicine, most of diseases have not be untreated- hypertension, diabetes, cardiovascular diseases and so on, even some cancers or sarcomas. In China, the average life expectancy is only 36.6 years before 1949. After half of century, it reach 71.8 years in 2002, close to that of a medium-level developed country, advanced medical treatment contributes to progress of the longevity.（专业术语和数字可要记住了啊，基本上都能看懂。）

In sum, there are so many reasons contribute to the longevity of human being. As we believing(Word里面这句话有绿线啊，改成believed), with the development of science and technology, the span of human being would become longer and longer.

文章里面有个毛病，就是题目要求的是the causes of this phenomenon，既然提出了Neat living environment, rational nutrition and skilled medical treatment，那么就要简单分析一下原因啊！你的文章里面只是描述了每个原因的内容。所以更像另一个题目“人类应该怎么保持长寿”，建议用1句话2句话的简单说一下原因。比如：neat environment keeps us away from bacteria; rational nutrition provide us enough nutrition and keep us healthy; medical treatment make cure easier; 大概就是这个意思。然后再加上原先文章里面的example and detail就挺好了。



Speaking:
I think ski is one of the favorite sports in my country. First, ski is a real game of brave man. Exploring, adventure, challenging spirit are extremely embodied in this game. Challenging nature, challenging limit, challenging oneself is an eternal topic to human being. Moreover, it combines strengthen and speed in an excellent way. Every turning and stopping represent the combination of strengthen and beauty. Meanwhile, keeping balance is an important skill in ski. It is advantages to make balance of body.

是模板吗？哈哈，很好啊，这么说的话应该能有不错的分数，ski的很让人振奋啊！如果能加入1句描述那个动态的滑雪场面就perfect了。