Issue51 [5f 11_19作业]求砖

shuwenyingUID: 2233183

Issue51 努力赶上进度！
提纲：不同意，有让步
1 首先这种教育方式基本不可能实现，更不用说有效了。
2 真正有效的教育还应当考虑社会的需要，要将社会的价值观、传统、道德等教授给学生。
3 在当今发展迅速的时代，真正有效的教育不在于单纯满足需要和兴趣，而是应该教给学生学会自己学习的技能来满足自己的需要和兴趣
4 让步，当然适当的兼顾学生兴趣可以提高积极性，提高教学效果。
------题目------
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
------正文------
I generally disagree with the speaker that the true effectiveness of education can only be fulfilled by satisfying needs and interest of each student. It seems implausible to achieve such goal. Instead, I maintain that an educational system lies in a series of factors including taking advantage of the resources available, instilling the basic skills and inquiries required and consideration of individual needs as well as interest.

To begin with, the speaker's effective education seems implausible on several aspects. Firstly, each student should obtain unambiguous aims, requires or interest in their studies before the educators could arrange the individualized curriculum for each student. However, as common sense informs me, the majority of students form merely vague ideas pertaining to their needs or interest until late in their high school, undergraduate education or even later thus without definite purposes or requires of the students, it is hardly possible for the educators to figure out a specific plans for education. Nor could they achieve effective education in such education. Secondly, the interests or needs of the student are capricious and vary from individuals, resulting in frequently changing plans, non-systematic educational programs or fragmented syllabus. Had a professor been kept interrupting by students' claiming their currently formed ideas and interest, the class would have ended up in altering the contents or controversy among students with various personal needs. To certain extent, compromising to the individual needs or interest of the students is likely to make concession in education quality and efficacy. Thirdly, with limited resources and funds, it is unrealistic to carter every interest or desires of the students. For instance, the common high schools could hardly provide training programs or equipment for students who are interested to become astronauts. In a word, it is almost impossible to satiate individual interest or needs of the students, without mentioning the goal of effective education.

Furthermore, effectiveness of education serves the requirement of society, containing far wider-ranging content than developing individual interest and fulfilling personal needs. Besides instilling information and experience of various disciplines, education shoulders the task of imparting the moral rules, tradition and values of certain society, fostering low-abiding social members and culturing a generation of responsible citizens that actively involve in civic participation to contribute positively to the nation as a whole. On the other hand, an education only focusing the personal needs and interesting without attaching importance to social needs functions as incubator for selfishness, egoism and irresponsibility. Effective education not only stretches a helping hand to realizing the dream of the students but also captures the children's attention to the sociological concepts required to become eligible citizens for health society. In short, education covering only personal needs or interest could hardly achieve true effectiveness.

Finally, effective education attempts to develop the skills so that the students could fulfill their interest and needs by themselves via searching information, self-study and expanding knowledge by experiments or research. The philosophers put it this way, ' there is no end for learning.' In an era when science and technology are constantly changing with each passing day, when Internet detonates information explosion with a myriad of novel ideas, various values or evanescent fashionable stuff, people have to continue learning without cessation in perpetuity for the ever-changing interest and needs. Education has expanded its span from limited years of schooling to a whole lifetime. Therefore, traditional one-direction education pattern with teachers as transmitters and students as passive receivers aiming at current individual needs have definitely become obsolete while truly effective education fosters basic skills for searching, filtering and arranging information and keen mind of curiosity ready for absorbing novel ideas.

Admittedly, education could by no means achieve effectiveness without consideration of the personal needs and interest of the students. Faced with fierce competition of today’s society, students have to explore their potential and competence to the maximum through education to stand out from their peers in the job market thus an individualized education in tune with the times is a pressing need. Besides, arousing the interest and meeting personal needs seems especially effective in crystallizing an alert mind and motive for learning, multiplying the effectiveness of education. Natural and true is that students tend to be highly concerned on the classes or contents which could arouse their interest or pertain to their needs. On the contrary, the enthusiasm is likely to fade in classes irrelevant to the students’ interest.

In sum, truly effective education comprises wider range of content rather than merely aiming at individual needs or interest of students with consideration of the social needs and developing skills for self-study so that the students could achieve their personal aims or develop interest independently. Moreover, the poles of the paradox, either solely individual-centered or total ignorance of personal needs could compromise the effectiveness of education.

[ 本帖最后由 shuwenying 于 2007-11-20 11:23 编辑 ]

lestouUID: 2260126

The argument is well presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By making a comparison of the specie of salamander, a kind of animal可以不用这个短语 whose eggs are damaged by the increasing ultraviolet radiation there for will no doubt decrease its population首先这是文中的语法错误，你这样写就变成是一个支持性的论据了。而且也有语法错误，therefore是一个副词，不能作连词使用, with the other species whose population will also declined due to the increasing ultraviolet radiation in the same reason, the arguer believed the same phenomenon will occurred on other species seems logical.这段话有点意思不够清晰，可以明白楼主想说什么，但是没有说清楚。翻译成中文就可以看出来了：“通过比较两种动物，一种动物的蛋被增强的紫外线射伤，另一种动物将会因同样的原因数量下降，作者认为同样的现象将会发生在其他物种上。”看出意思重复了吗？而且这些都是错误的推理过程，你这样写的语气让读者认为它们都没有错。然后是一个语法错误,seems 和believed同时作为这个句子的谓语，而且没有连词。


本来重写了一遍的,时间久了,搞掉了,昏
确实十分仔细，特别是词性和语法方面，以前一直没太关注，以为别人的句子可以随意模仿,结果四不象.
十分感谢你这段精彩评论，虽然以后不准备用这个结构开头了.特别看了IMONG关于ARGU的几张贴后给我感触很深，确实没必要在开头复述这么多，这个部分只能算是INTRODUCTION MATERIAL
还有就是it doesn’t follow 不能这样用，为什么呢？

兰子UID: 2404184

I generally disagree with the speaker that the true effectiveness of education can only be fulfilled by satisfying needs and interest of each student. It seems implausible to achieve such goal. Instead, I maintain that an educational system lies in a series of factors including taking advantage of the resources available, instilling the basic skills and inquiries required (把required放在skills前面是不是更易理解一些)and consideration of individual needs as well as interest.

To begin with, the speaker's effective education seems implausible on several aspects. Firstly, each student should obtain unambiguous aims, requires or interest in their studies before the educators could arrange the individualized curriculum for each student. However, as common sense informs me, the majority of students form merely vague ideas pertaining to their needs or interest until late in their high school, undergraduate education or even later thus without definite purposes or requires of the students, it is hardly possible for the educators to figure out a specific plans for education. Nor could they achieve effective education in such education(两个education放在一起,感觉用词有些重复). Secondly, the interests or needs of the student are capricious and vary from individuals, resulting in frequently changing plans, non-systematic educational programs or fragmented syllabus(个人意见,因为你整篇文章的字数已经挺多的了,这些表示相同意思的单词是不是可以省略). Had a professor been kept interrupting by students' claiming their currently formed ideas and interest, the class would have ended up in altering the contents or controversy among students with various personal needs. To certain extent, compromising to the individual needs or interest of the students is likely to make concession in education quality and efficacy.(很有个性的句子,很好!) Thirdly, with limited resources and funds, it is unrealistic to carter every interest or desires of the students. For instance, the common high schools could hardly provide training programs or equipment for students who are interested to become astronauts. In a word, it is almost impossible to satiate individual interest or needs of the students, without mentioning the goal of effective education.

Furthermore, effectiveness of education serves the requirement of society, containing far wider-ranging content than developing individual interest and fulfilling personal needs. Besides instilling information and experience of various disciplines, education shoulders the task of imparting the moral rules, tradition and values of certain society, fostering low-abiding social members and culturing a generation of responsible citizens that actively involve (involved)in civic participation to contribute positively to the nation as a whole. On the other hand, an education only focusing (on)the personal needs and interesting without attaching importance to social needs functions as incubator for selfishness, egoism and irresponsibility. Effective education not only stretches a helping hand to realizing the dream of the students but also captures the children's attention to the sociological concepts required to become eligible citizens for health (healthy)society. In short, education covering only personal needs or interest could hardly achieve true effectiveness.

Finally, effective education attempts to develop the skills so that the students could fulfill their interest and needs by themselves via searching information, self-study and expanding knowledge by experiments or research. (从这句话开始意思有转折,加上一个过渡的词语或词组应该更好)The philosophers put it this way, ' there is no end for learning.' In an era when science and technology are constantly changing with(是不是应该用in) each passing day, when (可以省略when直接用and连接)Internet detonates information explosion with a myriad of novel ideas, various values or evanescent fashionable stuff, people have to continue learning without cessation in perpetuity for the ever-changing interest and needs. Education has expanded its span from limited years of schooling to a whole lifetime. Therefore, traditional one-direction education pattern with teachers as transmitters and students as passive receivers aiming at current individual needs have definitely become obsolete while truly effective education fosters basic skills for searching, filtering and arranging information and keen mind of curiosity ready for absorbing novel ideas.

Admittedly, education could by no means achieve effectiveness without consideration of the personal needs and interest of the students. Faced with fierce competition of today’s society, students have to explore their potential and competence to the maximum through education to stand out from their peers in the job market thus an individualized education in tune with the times is a pressing need. Besides, arousing the interest and meeting personal needs seems especially effective in crystallizing an alert mind and motive for learning, multiplying the effectiveness of education. Natural and true is that students tend to be highly concerned on the classes or contents which could arouse their interest or pertain to their needs. On the contrary, the enthusiasm is likely to fade in classes irrelevant to the students’ interest.

In sum, truly effective education comprises wider range of content rather than merely aiming at individual needs or interest of students with consideration of the social needs and developing skills for self-study so that the students could achieve their personal aims or develop interest independently(总结得很好,这句话!). Moreover, the poles of the paradox, either solely individual-centered or total ignorance of personal needs could compromise the effectiveness of education

我觉得你写的很好,驳斥的前三条理由很充分,很有证明性,让人信服!(比我想到的理由好多了)
感觉比我的文章好多了,有些小郁闷,呵呵!
我改动得都是一些小的地方,因为我也没有看出有什么大的语法错误!但对作者的文章有两个总体感觉,一是篇幅很长,作者将同一概念用不同的词组表达,例如the moral rules, tradition and values of certain society /   changing plans, non-systematic educational programs or fragmented syllabus我觉得在字数足够的前提下,某些地方适当简略一些是不是更好!二是作者习惯用动名词,但记得我们英语老师说过,地道的外语中动名词的使用频率不是很高的!

个人看法,仅供参考,呵呵!