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issue208 [0806G-desperado小组]第十六次作业by jenny Issue208 The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people. 人们的外表，穿着和动作都揭示了他们的态度和兴趣。你可以通过观察一个社会中人们的外貌和举止来认识该社会的理念和价值。 提纲:在有些情况下,人们的外表,穿着和动作揭示了他们的态度和兴趣,表现了社会的理念和价值,有些情况下却不是.1 在有些情况下,人们的外表,穿着和动作揭示了他们的态度和兴趣,表现了社会的理念和价值.2 在有些情况下,人们的外表,穿着和动作使人们错误的判断他们的态度,兴趣和价值. Does the appearance and behavior of human beings reflect their attitudes, interests and values in the society? In my opinion, this is a case by case issue. In some aspects, the way people look, dress and act imply(implys) the attitudes, interests and values of the society, whereas in other aspects they do not.The certain aspect of the outward appearance and behavior of human beings reveals us their ideas, values, attitudes and the like. For one hand, appearance and performance, more or less, reveal attitudes and values of individuals and communities. For instance, individuals who are inclined to wear casual clothes are the ones place high value on comfort and practicality, and people who tend to put on bizarre dress and make up unique look might pursue a spirit of personality and ego. The women in Arab countries should not show her face to people except her husband. This accustom tells that women in these countries have a very low social position and are considered as the appendix of their husbands. For another hand, the behavior of human beings reflect what the community advocates. For example, in some eastern countries, their residents are willing to save money and spend money in plan. This phenomenon reflects that their residents have a value on the thrifty quality and an attitude of pursuit safety from money. And some western countries whose residents are likely to spend money extravagantly do inform us that they values highly on pleasure and they do not care too much about money. （这段是否可以分开两段写更好些，一段太集中了） Admittedly, I concede that appearance and behavior play an important role in judging people’s ideas, values and so on. However, in many situations the way people look, dress and act belie their attitudes, ideas and values. A community whose members choose to work long hours might appear high values on hard-working spirit, while in fact they have to do so for financial necessity. If they have chance they would prefer leisure time. And, obesity, the look of people in a community which are universal, might be attributed to fat gene, rather than the common sense of bad life attitudes: lazy, indulgence, ignorance of health, and the like.（这个理由argu可以用，借用了！）In addition, in an oppressed and autocratic society, people's performance and behaviors are not the real reflection of willing of themselves. On the contrary, the rulers in that society command people what to wear and how to act. Moreover, human mind is so complex that merely due a person’s appearance and act cannot accurate（ly） describe the person. It is possible that a person’s true thought and ideas are lying under the surface of the daily look, talk and act of the person. Thus, merely consider an individual’s attitudes, ideas and values on the person’s appearance and behavior is hast（y） in some case. In whole, although people’s attitudes and values can be judged by their performance in some certain conditions, the superficial phenomenon of a human being always mislead our truly consideration on the person. Factors, such as the background of the era, locations and the complexity of human mind, might also affect the values and ideas of human beings. 这篇文章就正文两段式，一段同意，一段反对，不知道这样的写法行不行？
就内容而言，正文第一段写既揭示了个人的态度和价值，又揭示了社会的理念。第二段只写了有时不能正确反映人的态度和价值，是不是暗含之意是观察一个人的言行和举止总是能够揭示社会的理念呢？
对题目的理解应该分为两部分，还是揭示个人和社会是一个概念呢。我觉得应该是分开的。两个分开写的话文章不至于只是在说言行仅和自身相关，可以从社会层面上加以拓宽。不知道这样想对不对？
整体而言，文章读起来很顺，读Gaojieha的文章就是感觉文章很连贯，如果把文章再深入一些会是一篇好文章的。
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