issue50 [Jet小组] 第四次作业～～迟到了……

leftkissUID: 2347956

50 "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
字数：470但是少一段==
迟到了～这篇只有四段啊～不是标准的五段式！是不是有问题啊？？
谢谢～

The speaker alleged that all faculties should be required to participate in the work outside academia in fields relevant to the courses they teach just in order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level; however, I disagree with the speaker to some extent, considering that some academic areas in which that outside work is either unavailable and unnecessary.

On the one hand, there are indeed many benefits in requiring some faculty spending time working outside the academic world in professions which connect their teaching course because of the relationship between the academic fields and working world. At first, the teachers' experience acquired from practice can make progress in their teaching in some extent. Take Journalism for an example, the working experience from teachers may give the students more new even knowledge not mentioned in the traditional books. Considering economics as another instance , in a not dissimilar way of many practical courses, students need teachers to tell them how to control the real markets, put their plans into reality and how to know the consumers' requires but not only read books. Moreover, the working experience can also be used to encourage the learners to practice even spur them to research deeply in the academia. Secondly, working involved the world makes people up to date, which is really important to some high-tech course such as engineer, computer science, program studying and so forth.

On the other hand, working experience does little or maybe even do harm to some professional fields. Humanities like anthropology, philosophy and so on, needs to reforming analysis system but not experience which is used a lot in working. Teachers' horizons may be definfed(confined) in the routine work, consequently, the result probably prohabits (prohibits) the progress in researching. Many Nobel-Prize winners have been studying the whole lives in their labs. Karl Marx spent 42 years in writing 'Capital'. The human’s treasure 'Capital' may be abort if Marx went to work instead of continuous researching. We would never image what the world could be if many experts used the time to work that should be used in research. The experience seems meaningless in such theoretical academia.

To sum up, I conceded the speaker's claim that the quality of instruction at college and university level would be proved by the faculty's experience drew from the work which relate to their professional fields. Admittedly, experience benefits many practical courses, whereas there are also fields only needing continuous researching. Accordingly, taking part in work has advantages and disadvantages. From another aspect, we also have other methods to prove the quality of instruction such as establish a research union to encourage students to study in team as well as research by their selves. As a result, we could mix several methods to make the biggest progress in the college and university teaching.  


[ 本帖最后由 leftkiss 于 2008-2-10 21:00 编辑 ]

xiahsoulUID: 2441730

50 "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."


The speaker alleged that all faculties should be required to participate in the work outside academia in fields relevant to the courses they teach just in order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level; however, I disagree with the speaker to some extent, considering that some academic areas in which that outside work is either unavailable and unnecessary.

On the one hand, there are indeed many benefits in requiring some faculty（不对吧， some 和 faculty不能同时用，faculty是全体教师，你不能说某些全体教师，some teachers 就好） spending time working outside the academic world in professions which connect their teaching course（connect 什么和什么?只说了connect teaching course， 但是with什么呢个，不清楚） because of the relationship between the academic fields and working world. At first, the teachers' experience acquired from practice can make progress in their teaching in（to) some extent. Take Journalism for an example(没这种说法哦，要么是take ``for example， 要么是take ``as an example,) the working experience from teachers may give the students more new even knowledge not mentioned in the traditional books. Considering(Consider) economics as another instance , in a not dissimilar way of many practical courses, students need teachers to tell them how to control the real markets, put their plans into reality and how to know the consumers' requires but not only read books. Moreover, the working experience can also be used to encourage the learners to practice (+and)even spur them to research deeply in the academia. Secondly, working involved the world makes people up to date, which is really important to some high-tech course such as engineer, computer science, program studying and so forth.

On the other hand, working experience does little or maybe even do harm to some professional fields. Humanities like anthropology, philosophy and so on, needs to reforming analysis system but not experience which is used a lot in working. Teachers' horizons may be definfed(confined) in the routine work, consequently, the result probably prohabits (prohibits) the progress in researching. Many Nobel-Prize winners have been studying the whole lives in their labs. Karl Marx spent 42 years in writing 'Capital'. The human’s treasure 'Capital' may be abort if Marx went to work instead of continuous researching. We would never image what the world could be if many experts used the time to work that should be used in research. The experience seems meaningless in such theoretical academia.

To sum up, I conceded（concede) the speaker's claim that the quality of instruction at college and university level would be proved by the faculty's experience drew from the work which relate to their professional fields. Admittedly, experience benefits many practical courses, whereas there are also fields only needing continuous researching. Accordingly, taking part in work has advantages and disadvantages. From another aspect, we also have other methods to prove the quality of instruction such as establish a research union to encourage students to study in team as well as research by their selves. As a result, we could mix several methods to make the biggest progress in the college and university teaching.
我觉得几段没这么严格，你的最后一段也综合的说了 应该没问题

yimengshanUID: 2392100

Thespeaker alleged that all faculties should be required to participate in the work outside academiain fields relevant to the courses they teach just in order to improve thequality of instruction at the college and university level; however,I disagree with the speaker to someextent, consideringthat some academic areas in which that outside work is either unavailable andunnecessary.（你的态度句子就是I disagree with…但是你的让步段落也就是第一段太多了，似乎压过了disagree…to some extent）On the onehand, there are indeed many benefits in requiring some faculty spending timeworking outside the academic world in professions which connect their teachingcourse because of the relationship between the academic fields and workingworld.（中心句过长！！拆开最好，否则看起来会很累---站在阅卷人的立场） At first, the teachers' experience acquired from practice canmake progress in their teaching in some extent. Take Journalism for an example,the working experience from(of)teachers may give(enable) the students(+obtain) more new even(删) knowledge even not mentioned in the traditionalbooks. Considering economics as another instance , in a not dissimilar way ofmany practical courses, students need teachers to tell them how to control thereal markets, put their plans into reality and how to know the（删）consumers' requires but not only read books. Moreover, the working experiencecan also be used to encourage the learners to practice even spur them toresearch deeply in the academia. Secondly, working involved the world makespeople up to date, which is really important to some high-tech course such asengineer, computer science, program studying and so forth.（看来你很喜欢用“考虑到…”考虑还可以是take into account…）On the otherhand, working experience does little or maybe even do harm to some professionalfields. Humanities like anthropology, philosophy and so on, needs to reforminganalysis system but not experience which is used a lot in working. Teachers'horizons may be definfed(confined) in the routine work, consequently, the result probably prohabits(prohibits) the progress inresearching. Many Nobel-Prize winners have been studying the whole lives intheir labs. Karl Marx spent 42 years in writing 'Capital'. The human’s treasure'Capital' may be abort if Marx went to workinstead of continuous researching. We would never image what the world could beif many experts used the time to work that should be used(spent) in research. The experience seems meaningless in such theoreticalacademia.(最后一句还是不要说“看起来怎样怎样”，最后一句如要议论，需紧扣中心句，再次重申，递进。。。。。我只是秀一下，原话不是我)To sum up, Iconceded the speaker's claim that the quality of instruction at college anduniversity level would be proved by the faculty's experience drew from the workwhich relate to their professional fields. Admittedly, experience benefits manypractical courses, whereas there are also fields only needing continuousresearching. Accordingly, taking part in work（outside practice）has(+both) advantages anddisadvantages. From another aspect, we also have other methods to prove (enhance)the quality of instructionsuch as establish a research union to encourage students to study in team aswell as research by their selves. As a result, we could mix several methods tomake the biggest progress in the college and university teaching.  

嗯，分开看每一段的论述是不错的，但是全文还要紧扣你的论点啊。加油！

[ 本帖最后由 yimengshan 于 2008-2-14 15:55 编辑 ]