第一篇

以水雕心0206UID: 2587256

Recently a problem has been brought into focus that a large factory will be built near our community, let's just imagine what should be like if it comes true.

Some people hold the opinion that the factory near our community will do some harm to us. The most important issue is pollution, or the so-called radioactive contamination, I mean. We haven't have any idea about the character of this factory and how far it will be seated near our community yet , the noise pollution or the discarded industrial water and the exhaust gas will endanger our life in what certain degree, we haven't received an official explanation involved these above. Besides, the present of this factory must results in a huge number of people's arriving, the inevitable unfamiliar faces and the soaring traffic volume will bring about some changes in rising the safety problem which must be taken it into concern by community residents. Also, whether the factory will take up the grassy area or some places for our daily use is still a question, a common sense is that we cannot ignore the effect a green place neighbour takes, so any action destroys our friend is definitely refused.

While some people think the positive factors are clear as well. They argue that the factory can provide us more jobs, opportunities and reduces the stress in job hunting which is alike a last straw in this economic depression. Otherwise, the rising of this factory can pull the development of our community, take service industry for example, increasingly people come to our place surely hope this area can supply all-around convenient service, so all kinds of community service will expand including shopping malls, hotels,catering,medical establishment and so forth. To some economic prospect extent, our community probably becomes more flourishing.

As far as I concerned, I strongly agree the former people's argument. The community we live must be a secure and quiet place, the factory's appearing might disturb the harmonious atmosphere. In sum, this topic is such a controversial one that certainly, some of us, of course, may still cast some opposite thoughts on me, but at least this attitude opposes the factory to some degree shakes the adamantly held reverse.留harmonioustopic

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

Recently a problem has been brought into focus that a large factory will be built near our community, let's just imagine what should be like if it comes true.

Some people hold (建议去掉the opinion)that the factory near our community will do some harm to us. The most important issue（建议改为the major issue） is pollution, or the so-called radioactive contamination, I mean. We haven't have any idea about the character of this factory(不太理解) and how far it will be seated near our community yet , the noise pollution or the discarded industrial water(建议改为Industrial Wastewater) and the exhaust gas will endanger our life in what certain degree, we haven't received an official explanation involved these above.

Besides, at present , this factory must（太绝对了吧） results in a huge number of people's arriving, the inevitable unfamiliar faces and the soaring traffic volume will bring about some changes in rising the safety problem which must be taken it into concern by community residents. Also, whether the factory will take up the grassy area or some places for our daily use is still (与also 重复)a question, a common sense is that we cannot ignore the effect a green place neighbour takes, so any action destroys our friend is definitely refused.

While some people think the positive factors are clear as well. They argue（state） that the factory can provide us more jobs, opportunities and reduces the stress in job hunting which is alike a last straw in this economic depression. Otherwise, the rising of this factory can pull(push) the development of our community economy, take service industry for example, increasingly people come to our place surely hope this area can supply all-around convenient service, so all kinds of community service will expand including shopping malls, hotels,catering,medical establishment and so forth. To some economic prospect extent(不理解), our community probably becomes more flourishing. As far as I concerned, I strongly agree the former people's argument. The community we live must be a secure and quiet place, 缺少连接词the factory's appearing might disturb the harmonious atmosphere. In sum, this topic is such a controversial one that certainly, some of us, of course, may still cast some opposite thoughts（doubt） on my indicates, but at least this attitude opposes the factory to some degree shakes the adamantly held reverse

以水整体写得很好用词广泛，词汇多样性

ffm4UID: 2254622

你的语法错误也太多了吧，有些词和短语用得也不很准确。

angeloolUID: 166036

写得很好。:)