issue136 同主题写作 大家也帮我看看吧

nsuhUID: 2119132

感觉没有楼下的136有力度啊， 第二篇issue， 大家多给我提提意见吧，有拍必回

I strongly agree with the opinion that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is vary very rare. Especially nowadays our society's science and technology are extremely advanced and it gives us divers of the choices. The world we live in advocates more and more democracy, fair and equity which make each people has the same choices whatever women or children they are and whatever skin colors they have.

How could I say that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very very rare with the development of the science and technology? Trace back to the past centuries, many epochal invention changed our life and make us so many choices that we should not be narrowed in a predicament without any choices .For example, the invention of the train and airplane let us have not only walk. The applications of the electric cooker and micro-wave oven make us do not have only to use fire to make dinner. Till recent years the human even can choose the way we are born ,by sexual reproduction or asexual reproduction ,and the human being also can choose live in the earth or the other planet of which because we now have space-shuttle. Such examples are countless. Anyway , the enormously advancement of our human's science and technology creates the choice's diversty and availability. Such improvement and development of our human's science  guarantees us materially to have more and more choices and most of those are so unbelievable and amazing that we even can not imagine ever before.

Ever since the human society entering modern cultural society, our living environment is becoming more and more democracy and fair. In the past days, most women can not have the equal right with the men even though the women play an important role in the social life. Nowadays, with the rising advocation for the women's rights and the women's right  have been improved enormously. The modern women can have the same work chances with men and they can do any kinds of work as men. So do the black people. Our society are advocating that we should eliminate all kinds of discrimination whatever skin color people have or whichever race they are. All the person living in the world have the same living conditions. It does not exist any artificial deprives of right of choices .What above substantially guarantee that the absence of choice is very rare.

However ，under some special conditions we might find us have no other choices to some circumstances, which does not mean we really have no choices but we need time and knowledge to seek and consider the choice hidden. We should exclude the psychological factors and treat the  circumstance from another angle. sometimes to make a opposite choice is difficult and you should spend much time and energy but it does not mean there are rare choice to have.

To sum up, we live in such a society which is full of lure and choice. While some people may still remain unconvinced, the reasons that I have analyzed in above argument should at least make them aware of the discussion. There is little doubt that more and more people will come to realize that the absence of choice in our society is very rare. Even you happen to the circumstance that you think have no choice, you should carefully consider and find the new opportunity hidden. The absence of choice is very rare from the social angle。

nsuhUID: 2119132

急啊，菜鸟一个，有没有人帮我看看哪

staralwaysUID: 193479

I strongly agree with the opinion that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare. Especially nowadays our society's science and technology are extremely advanced and it gives [they give] us diverse of the choices. The world we live in advocates more and more democracy, fair and equity which make each people has the same choices whatever women or children they are and whatever skin colors they have. [开头的内容感觉联系地不够紧密。]

How could I say that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare with the development of the science and technology? Trace back to the past centuries, many epochal inventions changed our life and make [made] us so many choices that we should not be narrowed in a predicament without any choices. For example, the invention of the train and airplane let us have not only walk. [此句不通。] The applications of the electric cooker and micro-wave oven make us do not have only to use fire to make dinner. Till recent years the human even can choose the way we are born, by sexual reproduction or asexual reproduction, and the human being also can choose live in the earth or the other planet of which because we now have space-shuttle. [觉得这两个说地过头了点。] Such examples are countless. Anyway, the enormously advancement of our human's science and technology creates the choice's diversity and availability. Such improvement and development of our human's science guarantees us materially to have more and more choices and most of those are so unbelievable and amazing that we even can not imagine ever before.

Ever since the human society entering [enters] modern cultural society, our living environment is becoming more and more democracy [democratic] and fair. In the past days, most women cannot have the equal right with the men even though the women play an important role in the social life. Nowadays, with the rising advocation for the women's rights and the women's rights have been improved enormously. The modern women can have the same work chances with men and they can do any kinds of work as men. So do the black people. Our society are [is] advocating that we should eliminate all kinds of discrimination whatever skin color people have or whichever race they are. All the persons living in the world have the same living conditions. It does not exist any artificial deprives of right of choices. What above substantially guarantee that the absence of choice is very rare.

However, under some special conditions we might find us have no other choices to some circumstances, which does not mean we really have no choices but we need time and knowledge to seek and consider the choice hidden. We should exclude the psychological factors and treat the circumstance from another angle. Sometimes to make a opposite choice is difficult and you should spend much time and energy but it does not mean there are rare choice to have.

To sum up, we live in such a society which is full of lure and choice. While some people may still remain unconvinced, the reasons that I have analyzed in above argument should at least make them aware of the discussion. There is little doubt that more and more people will come to realize that the absence of choice in our society is very rare. Even you happen to the circumstance that you think have no choice, you should carefully consider and find the new opportunity hidden. The absence of choice is very rare from the social angle.

感觉文章内容是都说在点子上了，但是组织上还有所欠缺，条理不够清晰。