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飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

Issue51:
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

提纲:
1承认优点: 学生感兴趣，学习主动
2．缺点：如果学生不知道自己的兴趣，将浪费人才
3．特别教育并不唯一有效，广度教育也有其好处。
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I fundamentally disagree with the author's assertion that only when education is specifically designed to meet each student's needs and interests can it be truly effective, since this assertion is based on an assumption that every student know exactly what he or she needs and interests are. Moreover, specifically designed education for students is not the only way to be an effective one, because it cannot satisfy the purpose of true education.

The author may claim that because the education is designed specifically for each student, thus students would be incline to going to classes, take part in the classes actively and do well in their works. Common sense tells us "interest is the best teacher." If do so, students will learn well in this atmosphere and such education will be an effective one.

However, the author ignores that this assertion is based on an assumption that students well know what they need and interests are. In fact, few students, especially students in colleges or younger, understand themselves well, and their interests are changing as they grow. Thus it is almost impossible to determine which kind of educational way they will take. In addition, some students find their interests on the way of study. In other words, someone may not know what their interests are before studying, while after taking the relative classes, they begin to like those disciplines. For example, when I was in middle school, my chemistry was poor, and I did not like it at all. After winning a chemistry competition, I began to love it and now chemistry is my major in the college. If the education were designed to my interest, I would never know that I could be a researcher in chemistry. By this means, it is hard to say that the education designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is truly [不是truely！] effective.

Moreover, besides this kind of education, the one that includes a series of disciplines also meet the purpose of education, thus is effective. In most people's eyes, purposes of education are to replace an empty mind into an open one and to prepare students for the future social life. That is to say, by study in school, students should gain the ability to learn new things and to communicate with others in order to learn from others. If education is designed only to meet students' need and interests, then what they learn is limited. For instance, if a student liked math, and he took only the relative classes at school, when he meets problems beyond math in his later jobs, the education he received could not prepare him for his job and he would deal with it with difficulty. Similarly, effective education should also prepare us the ability to communicate with others and learn from others. Yet, common sense informs us that if two have something in common, they will communicate with ease. In this case, education designed specifically to meet students’ need and interests and thus informs students with limited knowledge may no longer be suitable. To the contrast, education in various fields provides students promise to communicate with others successfully. Thus education following students’ need and interests is not the only effective one.

In sum, although students may study well at school if they accept education designed to meet their needs and interests, it has drawbacks: if students do not know their needs and interests at first, the education that the author advocates cannot be taken. To the contrast, education in broad field may suit for students’ future jobs in complex society. Meanwhile, it also prepares students to communicate with us and then learn from others, hence is effective.

Chloroplast923UID: 207486

I fundamentally disagree with the author's assertion that only when education is specifically designed to meet each student's needs and interests can it be truly effective, since this assertion is based on an assumption that every student know exactly what he or she needs and interests are. Moreover, specifically designed education for students is not the only way to be an effective one, because it cannot satisfy the purpose of true education.

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However, the author ignores that this assertion is based on an assumption that students well know what they need and interests are. In fact, few students, especially students in colleges or younger, understand themselves well, and their interests are changing as they grow. Thus it is almost impossible to determine which kind of educational way they will我觉得改成should比较好 take. In addition, some students find their interests on the way of study. In other words, someone may not know what their interests are before studying, while after taking the relative classes, they begin to like those disciplines. For example, when I was in middle school, my chemistry was poor, and I did not like it at all. After winning a chemistry competition, I began to love it and now chemistry is my major in the college. If the education were designed to my interest, I would never know that I could be a researcher in chemistry. By this means, it is hard to say that the education designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is truly [不是truely！] effective.

Moreover, besides this kind of education, the one that includes a series of disciplines also meet the purpose of education, thus is effective. In most people's eyes, purposes of education are to replace an empty mind into an open one and to prepare students for the future social life. That is to say, by study><studying in school, students should gain the ability to learn new things and to communicate with others in order to learn from others. If education is designed only to meet students' need and interests, then what they learn is limited. For instance, if a student liked math, and he took only the relative classes at school, when he meets problems beyond math in his later jobs, the education he received could not prepare him for his job and he would deal with it with difficulty. Similarly, effective education should also prepare us the ability to communicate with others and learn from others. Yet, common sense informs us that if two have something in common, they will communicate with ease. In this case, education designed specifically to meet students’ need and interests and thus informs students with limited knowledge may no longer be suitable. To the contrast, education in various fields provides students promise to communicate with others successfully. Thus education following students’ need and interests is not the only effective one.

In sum, although students may study well at school if they accept education designed to meet their needs and interests, it has drawbacks: if students do not know their needs and interests at first, the education that the author advocates cannot be taken. To the contrast, education in broad field may suit for students’ future jobs in complex society. Meanwhile, it also prepares students to communicate with us and then learn from others, hence is effective.

写得不错啊~
我都挑不出什么来了…

最后提供一点个人看法: 在第四段里,我觉得”特殊教育未必就没有广泛的知识面,广度教育也与学生的沟通能力没有直接明显的因果关系”, 论述的时候好像有点太绝对了.

我也写了这篇,有空看看:
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D101

monkeydryUID: 183691

再提一点小建议: in most people's eyes--->views is better
还有用he的话一定要加she:)

superkiddUID: 2120413

楼主的观点较新颖，提出教育应当满足每个人的兴趣和要求是不合适的。而且，有较充足的论据，写的不错，继续。

飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

我的想法是因为特殊教育针对兴趣,所以范围有限,而广度教育知识面广,与人交流共同话题多,所以易于交流
没论清楚,我再改改

ouymUID: 2109118

I fundamentally disagree with the author's assertion that only when education is specifically designed to meet each student's needs and interests can it be truly effective, since this assertion is based on an assumption that every student know exactly what he or she needs and interests are（这里好像有问题！改成and what his or her interests are）. Moreover, specifically designed education for students is not the only way to be an effective one, because it cannot satisfy the purpose of true education.

The author may claim that because the education is designed specifically for each student, thus students would be incline to going（go） to classes, take part in the classes（重复！是否能换一个表达方法！） actively and do well in their works. Common sense tells us "interest is the best teacher." If do so, students will learn well in this atmosphere and such education will be an effective one.

However, the author ignores that this assertion is based on an assumption that students well know what they need and interests are(同上！). In fact, few students, especially students in colleges or younger（既然用了especially，后面又or younger,不好！）, understand themselves well, and their interests are changing as they grow. Thus it is almost impossible to determine which kind of educational way they will（should） take. In addition, some students find their interests on the way of study（这句话，意思不明，所以你后面再来一句解释！）. In other words, someone may not know what their interests are before studying, while after taking the relative classes, they begin to like those disciplines（指代不明！those 改成some particular）. For example, when I was in middle school, my chemistry was poor, and I did not like it at all. (既然poor,怎么又会有后来的win呢？需要说明！)After winning a chemistry competition, I began to love it and now chemistry is my major in the college. If the education were designed to my interest, I would never know that（改成whether） I could be a researcher in chemistry. By this means, it is hard to say that the education designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is truly [不是truely！] effective.

Moreover, besides this kind of education, the one that includes a series of disciplines also meet the purpose of education, thus is effective. In most people's eyes, purposes of education are to replace an empty mind into an open one and to prepare students for the future social life（是引用吧！但是in most people’s eyes不好！太牵强！）. That is to say, by study in school, students should gain the ability to learn new things and to communicate with others in order to learn from others（而且，既然前面已经是in most people’s eyes，为什么还需要在解释一番呢？）. If education is designed only to meet students' need and interests, then what they learn is limited. For instance, if a student liked math, and he took only the relative classes at school, when he meets problems beyond math in his later jobs, the education he received could not prepare him for his job and he would deal with it with difficulty. Similarly, effective education should also prepare us the ability to communicate with others and learn from others. Yet,（去掉！） common sense informs us that if two have something in common, they will communicate with ease（这句话用处不大，多余！）. In this case, education designed specifically to meet students’ need and interests and thus informs students with limited knowledge may no longer be suitable. To the contrast, education in various fields provides students promise to communicate with others successfully. Thus education following students’ need and interests is not the only effective one（前面说不行，而这里却又包含了说他行的意思，矛盾！）.
In sum, although students may study well at school if they accept education designed to meet their needs and interests, it has drawbacks: if students do not know their needs and interests at first, the education that the author advocates cannot be taken. To the contrast, education in broad field may suit for students’ future jobs in complex society. Meanwhile, it also prepares students to communicate with us（us 是谁？） and then learn from others（others又是谁？）, hence is effective.

这篇文章的字数挺多，所以建议将一些多余的话去掉，精简一些！
我的链接，求互改！
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... ighlight=issue%2B51

飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

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