issue47 G-89-互助社-8.9日同主题写作

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Issue47
Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.

syllabus: 1.adimittedly, technologies impede out reasoning and cognitive
            2.query the purpose of more emphesis on the intellect
            3.there are other emergencies than intellect  


Nowadays, with rapid development of technology and mass accumulation of information, our lives turns out to be increasingly complex. Whether our society stop short（这个是 “突然停止”的意思吗？还是有别的什么意思呢？这个用的合适吗？） of stress on intellect in the form of reasoning and other cognitive skills becomes controvertrial. However, in my point of view, I cannot agree with the speaker's assertion that emphasis that focused on the intellect is not enough. In fact, many empirical evidence shows the opposite.

Admittedly, the progress of knowledge and technology does render us less intellect. For instance, in the post-Internet-bubble world, one tend to assimlilate more information at will; student could experience a different one-bred of method of education--the TeleEducation; people could bargin through the internet for online shopping, were it rainy or long distance to reach（虚拟，这个好！）; and telecommuting makes bussiness more efficient and time-saving. So what's lost?（这个句子感觉还可以推敲一下吧，是不是转折however呢？） Human contact, deep thought, or other cognitive skills, perhaps. We communicate each other without hostile visiting, just greedily absorb knowledge for those which have been digested by others, devour great number of information with no attention to their connotation. Such lives, be they rich, lend us only superficial minds. Thus, advocating more attention to intellect should be a problem to be rechoned（这个是？） with.

However, to draw the conclusion that our society should place more stress on the intellect has to be put through other inspectations. There should be much more questions to be answered（可否改改open to answer） . First of all, what is the purpose for humans to be more reasonaing and cognitive. If we aim at mastering more knowledge or information, then it would be needless and impossible. In each special field, there are a bundle of excellent and intellectual specialists or scientists who provide human a systemetic and in-depth results of their investagation or theories. A layman only needs to grab the headlines through the mass media, such as internet, television or magzines. Meanwhile, the task of assimilating all the information or conquering all disciplines of knowledge must be mission impossible. Given one has the number of IQ as high as Einstein, pursueing after the increasingly accelerating era would turn out to be exhaustation and futility. （感觉这段中心不是很集中呢？）

Secondly, whether gaining emphasis the intellect should be the impending problem for our society? I believe not. Starvation, envrionmental deterioration, public health and terrorism are all but critical than increasing the intellect. Last month at Maradi, Niger, infants, some near death（可否改dying的表达呢？）, and their mothers await aid provided by Doctors Without Borders. And, one child in five is dying according to the recent statistic. International officials and charity workers say that the world’s dilatory reaction to Niger’s woes is hard to excuse. Unseen on television, however, are the shrunken infants who die all but unnoticed in numbers that dwarf any other emergencies. In short, for gaining focus on the intellect is not imminent than other social problems, our society should put them for a long-lerm plan.（这点扩展比较我没有想到）

In sum, it is arguably that technologies surely take us some side effects which counter the intellect and society should pay much attention on it. However, through the chains of analysis above, we could be hard-pressed to put this problem the first-place to solve, for somewhere on the earth, there still are people suffering from tearing anguishes.

写的挺好的，特别是用词上面很有G的气势

[ Last edited by nancy1213 on 2005-8-10 at 00:05 ]

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47．Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.

Syllabus:
start
1.        media show
2.        scientific corruption
3.        the other factors have also being ignored
conclusion


With the development of the science and technology, the immediate access for communication has come into reality. Sometimes too fast to think for the modern individuals and people are increasingly used to the talking head in the television program. However, when it comes to whether the society undergoes ignorance of reasoning and other cognitive skills, the answer depends on the concrete situations such as the media show, the educational institution and the daily life in the modern society.

First of all, in the area of overwhelming influence of the media shows in television, it is common that the easier way to get massages makes people to give up the basic critical think. As mentioned above, people tend to count on the subtle gadget to a great degree, even the mere recreation in the spear life. In fact, people indulging themselves in the processes of listening to the broadcast headline on news channel, watching the funny play show channel, or get acknowledge of the new discovery in the science world. However, all these information seems to turn out to be entertainment. Additionally, the quick pace on the TV show leaves no or little time for reflection.

For the second place, besides the television, the same hurry requirement has also emerged in the realm of scientific research and educational institution. Since the great progress has been made out accompanied by the famous saying "Knowledge is power" prevailing in world, people realized the importance of science and technology more than any time in the past. However at the same time, all those slogans or the true developing situation push people to a state that totally focus on the productivity without any hesitation. When such hasty desire unavoidably affects the science world in return, Scholars and researchers became engaged in meeting the need of this only-productivity thesis. For example, there are always heart that some famous professor has such a great number of publications. However, most of his works will never be read by the others except the editor. Furthermore, under the great demanding for engineering, fewer and fewer people dedicated them to the nonprofit research as philosophy to pursue the truth by critical think activities.

Additionally, except the reasoning and other cognitive skills, there are many other important trait has be ignored by the quick pace of modern life. For example, there few chance to have the peaceful mind in appreciation the painting or concert under the work press. Also, the communication with relatives, friends and neighbors has decreased by the excuse of busy.

In conclusion, with the development of our modern society, people tend to be much more single minded in frank. Productivity seems conduct the activities of people. However, there are many other things in life which can not be ignored such as the reasoning abilities and the emotional communications and so on.

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nancy,多谢

不好意思，昨晚上没来，马上看

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47．Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.

Syllabus:
start
1.        media show
2.        scientific corruption
3.        the other factors have also being ignored
conclusion


With the development of the science and technology, the immediate access for/to communication has come into reality. Sometimes too fast to think for the modern individuals and people are increasingly used to the talking head in the television program. However, when it comes to whether the society undergoes ignorance of reasoning and other cognitive skills, the answer depends on the concrete situations such as the media show, the educational institution and the daily life in the modern society.

First of all, in the area of overwhelming influence of the media shows in television, it is common that the easier way to get massages makes people to give up the basic critical think. As mentioned above, people tend to count on the subtle gadget to a great degree, even the mere recreation in the spear life什么意思？. In fact, people indulging themselves in the processes of listening to the broadcast headline on news channel, watching the funny play show channel, or get acknowledge/knowledge? of the new discovery in the science world or get knowledge of the latest research on the Discovery Channel. However, all these information seems to turn out to be entertainment.science 也是entertainment? Additionally, the quick pace on the TV show leaves no or little time for reflection. 这里有点仓促了，再说一句关于additional 的吧

For the second place, besides the television, the same hurry有点中文，换换吧 requirement has also emerged in the realm of scientific research and educational institution. Since the great progress has been made out accompanied by the famous saying "Knowledge is power" prevailing in world, people realized the importance of science and technology more than any time in the past. However at the same time, all those slogans or the truereal developing situation push people to a state that totally focuses on the productivity without any hesitation. When such hasty desire unavoidably affects the science world in return, Scholars and researchers became engaged in meeting the need of this only-productivity thesis. For example, there are always heart? that some famous professor has such a great number of publications. However, most of his works will never be read by the others except the editor.这能说明什么？应该关注productivity吧 Furthermore, under the great demanding/demands for engineering, fewer and fewer people dedicated them to the nonprofit research as philosophy to pursue the truth by activities.

最好先说一句intellect和critical thinking的关系，我也有这个问题:L:L:L
Additionally, except the reasoning and other cognitive skills, there are many other important traits hashave bebeen ignored by the quick pace of modern life比喻没有用好，pace能遗忘么. For example, there few chance to have the peaceful mind in appreciation the painting or concert under the work press. 读不懂啊Also, the communication with relatives, friends and neighbors has decreased by/in the excuse of busy.

In conclusion, with the development of our modern society, people tend to be much more single minded in frank. Productivity seems conduct the activities of people. However, there are many other things in life which can not be ignored such as the reasoning abilities and the emotional communications and so on.
结尾还需要打造的好一些

大的结构没什么，但分论点的段落思想不集中:handshake:handshake

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