argument174 (sally小组作业，新手上路，希望大家多多指点)

zhaohaozhenUID: 143511

这篇Argument写的很好，值得我学习。

sallyxinduUID: 2131253

非常好，忍不住先赞了再说～～～！！
74. The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumni who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially."


提纲：
1、调查问题。样本是否足够大；调查的人是否具有代表性。
2、improve morale?文中并没有提供具体的解释
3、校友的资助？ 影响资助的原因有很多
不错的驳斥点，面面具到
正文：
In this argument, the author reaches the conclusion that the Grove College should preserve its traditional education admitting only women. To substantiate the conclusion, the author cites the student government's survey in which 80% student responders and half of the alumni responders appeared to content with the present确定现在还是全女制度吗？可能已经开始吸收男生了，建议改为appear to be attatched to the conventional recruiting system of admitting female students only situation. Moreover, the author reasons that all-female students would lead to morale improvement and financial assistance form alumni. It might be sound and convinced at first sight, however, a careful examination of this argument would reveal several hidden flaws and unwarranted claims.
很好，表达也没什么错误，不过建议阿狗的首段可以稍微短一点，因为在ＥＴＳ看来，首段都是废话（肯定有错误，要不然怎么叫argument )把时间多给给后面分析的段落，那才是检查critical thingking的重点．

In the first place, the validity of the survey is doubtful. Without the information about the number of students who responded to the survey and the mount of the whole students in the college, the 80% or half means noting except a serial numeric figure.漂亮！ If there were five thousands students but only a few of them-one hundred-involved in the survey, the result of the survey would distort the body's opinion as a group. Also, we have no idea that去掉 whether the responders were representative enough to reflect the major voice of the college. If the survey only conducted among the fresh students, or if the questionnaire were answered by the students limited in certain disciplines, in either condition, the conclusion rested on the reason that 80% students favored the statue status quo education would be highly suspected. The problem is much the same with respect to the alumni survey.
禁不住要说：非常精彩～！！！！

In the second place, the author hastily assumes that keeping the all-female policy in Grove College necessarily results in the morale improvement. However he does not exhibit the evidence to reveal the causal relationship between the only women education and morale, nor how the former influences the latter. And, we have no idea about why coeducation approach would not reach the same consequence, since the author did not provide any evidence to support this claim.

Third, the reason that presenting the statue pro situation would confident alumni to denote money to the college guarentee alumni's donation for school is not firmly granted, as the author holds. It is equally possible that Grove’s alumni who provide finial donation only indicate to express their appreciation to the school in which they got the sufficient knowledge and were equipped with proper skills to reach the present success, and they completely don't care whether the college is co-education or all-female education. Additionally, there are many other factors that might effect the alumni donation. For example, Grove College is in the process of constructing a new campus requiring many financial supporting, which calls for alumni's support. Without exclude such possibility, we are not convinced by this reason.

To sum up, the conclusion in this argument lacks credibility because the evidence cited here does not strongly support to what the author maintains. To make it accepted,acceptable the author has to give more detail detailed information about the survey recited here. Additionally, more evidence is needed to make the claim that all-female education would improve the moral among students and donation by alumni more acceptable, thus lending strength to the recommendation made by the author.

的确是篇好文章，很巧，我的这篇的思路和你好象啊，呵呵，也从你这里学到了些东西．msell加油，很看好你的！！:victory:

zhaohaozhenUID: 143511

Originally posted by msell at 2005-12-30 00:09


唉！

我看了一下，确实没有什么可以改的阿

智恩UID: 2160717

In this argument, the author reaches the conclusion that the Grove College should preserve its traditional education admitting only women. To substantiate the conclusion, the author cites the student government's survey in which 80% student responders and half of the alumni responders appeared to content with the present situation. Moreover, the author reasons that all-female students would lead to morale improvement and financial assistance form alumni. It might be sound and convinced(好像一般都用convincing） at first sight, however, a careful examination of this argument would reveal several hidden flaws and unwarranted claims.

In the first place, the validity of the survey is doubtful. Without the information about the number of students who responded to the survey and the mount of the whole students in the college, the 80% or half means noting except a serial numeric figure. If there were five thousands（去掉s，几千后还是用原型，不用家s） students but only a few of them-one hundred-involved in the survey, the result of the survey would distort the body's opinion as a group. Also, we have no idea that whether the responders were representative enough to reflect the major voice of the college. If the survey only conducted among the fresh students, or if the questionnaire（用得好！） were answered by the students limited in certain disciplines, in either condition, the conclusion rested on the reason that 80% students favored the statue quo education would be highly suspected. The problem is much the same with respect to the alumni survey.

In the second place, the author hastily assumes that keeping the all-female policy in Grove College necessarily results in the morale improvement. However he does not exhibit the evidence to reveal the causal relationship between the only women education and morale, nor how the former influences the latter. And, we have no idea about why coeducation approach would not reach the same consequence, since the author did not provide any evidence to support this claim.

Third, the reason that presenting the statue pro situation would confident alumni to denote money to the college is not firmly granted, as the author holds. It is equally possible that Grove’s alumni who provide finial donation only indicate to express their appreciation to the school in which they got the sufficient knowledge and were equipped（with） proper skills to reach the present success, and they completely don't care whether the college is co-education or all-female education. Additionally, there are many other factors that might effect the alumni donation. For example, Grove College is in the process of constructing a new campus requiring many financial supporting, which calls for alumni's support. Without exclude（excluding） such possibility, we are not convinced by this reason.

To sum up, the conclusion in this argument lacks credibility because the evidence cited here does not strongly support to what the author maintains. To make it accepted, the author has to give more detail information   （details）about the survey recited here. Additionally, more evidence is needed to make the claim that all-female education would improve the moral among students and donation by alumni more acceptable, thus lending strength to the recommendation made by the author.

不错，相信到考试的时候你一定没问题！