issue7 交晚了kito

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【题目】Issue7 "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
【翻译】摄像机可以通过如此精确而有力的记录手段来再现当代生活，因此它已经代替书面记录成为了一种更重要的记录手段。
【提纲】Position：balance，两者配合使用
1. 摄像机优点：准确、生动、真实、能够记录瞬间、移动物体，而文字则容易出错
2. 摄像机缺点：首先是时间广度不够，不能记录时间跨度很大的事件。其次是概括性不强。只能记录下具体的画面，不具概括性。三，成本过高。与纸笔纪录比起来，而且不灵活。
3、纸笔纪录的优点：经过思考、提炼、加工；随时记录；大众方式-摄像机没普及
4、总结
【正文】（450words）
Written records, a kind of documentation, has long been used from ancient time of human-being. With the development of society, electric technology becomes more and more flourishing and video camera which can provides accurate and convincing record comes up instead of written records to some extent. However, does it play a more important role than written records? To my point of view, written records will never be substituted thoroughly as I talked below.

It is true that video camera holds lots of advantageous not belonged to written records. Such as accuracy, convenience and so on. It can make the things it records much vivid, and even records the moving things. In the course of  recording, never will a mistake be made. For those merits, video camera is use in the examination room to record the course of exam in order to avoid cheating; and also, it could be used in legal proceeding as evidence of crimes; besides, traffic polices use it to see who has violate the traffic rule. And all of these talked above cannot be substituted by written records.

But, everything has two points. Video camera also includes several disadvantageous. First of all, long time recording can’t be guaranteed. For video camera memories is limited, if you want to records for a long time, you should change its memory time to time; second, while using paper to records may add to some thinking to the records, video camera records things so actual that no abstract or thinking is included; third, video camera does not cost more than written records, but also seems less convenient and lacking flexible. The instrument is always large to carry, and calls for care.

Still, a series of advantageous which video camera does not have is being held by written records. The things being recorded by paper always added in the thinking of the recorder, and therefore sometimes it is more valuable. For example, students make written records in class, which provides not only what the teacher has talked, but also what they thought of the class. In addition, written record is more convenient to record at any time and at any places, and this cannot be realized by heavy and large video camera equipments. Furthermore, as the cost is too high, video camera is not as popular as written records being used. Common people still uses written records a lot.

To sum up, video camera indeed has some advantageous which written records do not have. Nevertheless, to tell which is more significant is still a difficult problem at least in nowadays. The best way to record is to find a balance for using the two kinds recording form, and combine them.

好久不写了，写得太烂了，谢谢拍砖！

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不好意思，因为周六有考试，晚上回来一定帮你改！

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【题目】Issue7 "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
【翻译】摄像机可以通过如此精确而有力的记录手段来再现当代生活，因此它已经代替书面记录成为了一种更重要的记录手段。
【提纲】Position：balance，两者配合使用
1. 摄像机优点：准确、生动、真实、能够记录瞬间、移动物体，而文字则容易出错
2. 摄像机缺点：首先是时间广度不够，不能记录时间跨度很大的事件。其次是概括性不强。只能记录下具体的画面，不具概括性。三，成本过高。与纸笔纪录比起来，而且不灵活。
3、纸笔纪录的优点：经过思考、提炼、加工；随时记录；大众方式-摄像机没普及
4、总结
【正文】（450words）
Written records, a kind of documentation, has long been used from ancient time of human-being. With the development of society, electric(用electronic怎么样？) technology becomes more and more flourishing and the video camera which can provides provide accurate and convincing record comes up instead of written records to some extent. However, does it play a more important role than written records? To my point of view, written records will never be substituted thoroughly as I talked below.(开头写的很好，先让步然后再表明立场）

It is true that the video camera holds lots of advantageouszhe这个词是形容词，不能作名词使的，上次好像跟你说过了呀？ not belonged to written records. Such as accuracy, convenience and so on. It can make the things scenes? it records much vivid, and even records the moving things.(这句话不大理解？难道written records就不可以吗？还是说itcan also convey informations by moving imageries?你再斟酌一下？ In the course of  recording, never will a mistake be made. For those merits, video camera is use used in the examination room to record the course of exam in order to avoid cheating;这句表达有点问题，你看看这样写怎样：....to supervise the examination in order to prevent cheating and also, it could be used in legal proceeding as evidence of crimes; besides, traffic polices use it to see who has violate violated the traffic rule. And all of these talked above cannot be substituted by written records.

But, everything has two points.呵呵这句话真是久别了:p The Video camera also includes several disadvantageous. First of all, long time recording can’t cannot be guaranteed. For video camera memories is limited, if you want to records record for a long time, you should change its memory time to time; second, while using paper to records record  may add to some thinking thought to the records, video camera records things so actual that no abstract or thinking thought is included; third, video camera does not cost more than written records,这句好像说反了吧？ but also seems less convenient and lacking flexible. The instrument is always large to carry, and calls for care.这段从三个角度分别论证了video camera的不足之处，非常好）

Still, a series of advantageous advantages which video camera does not have is being held holden by written records. The things being recorded by paper always added in the thinking thought of the recorder, and therefore sometimes it is more valuable. For example, students make written records in class, which provides not only what the teacher has talked, but also what they thought of the class.换成theme你看如何 In addition, written record is more convenient to record at any time and at any places, and this cannot be realized by heavy and large video camera equipments.这句论证跟上面末句的论证好像重复了，你再看看? Furthermore, as the cost is too high, video camera is not as popular as written records being used. Common people still uses written records a lot.

To sum up, video camera indeed has some advantageous disadvantages which written records do not have. Nevertheless, to tell which is more significant is still a difficult problem at least in去掉 nowadays. The best way to record is to find a balance for using the two kinds recording form, and combine them.重复上半句

文章总的来说写得不错，不过kito还是犯了些小错误，比如上次提到的advantageous，还有通篇用record太多，可以适当用document, medium, media, 替换一下。YEAH YEAH YEAH FIGHTING!