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【题目】174
The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumna who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students and convince alumna to keep supporting the college financially."

【提纲】
1、调查样本的代表性和样本容量
2、只有女生也未必会改善士气和赢得校友支持，男女同校未必不会
3、没有考虑男女同校的其他好处和只有女生的坏处

【正文】（441words）
In the recommendation, the arguer asserts that it is better for Grove College to preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs based on two surveys. One is taken by students in school, with eighty percent respondences wanting the school to remain all female. The other is taken by alumnae also opposing coeducation. Besides, the arguer considers keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students and convince alumna to keep supporting the college financially. However, the conclusion mentioned neglecting other possible alternatives seems not so compelling, while some assumptions and evidence also prove to be unwarranted and dubious after a fully scrutiny.

First of all, the major problem with this argument is that the result of the survey lacks credibility, because it is highly possible that the sample is too limited, and therefore could not lend strong support to the arguer’s conclusion. The arguer claims that eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, nevertheless what is the total number of students who take the survey? Are the surveyors is representative? Unless the arguer provides us with the detail information about the survey, we cannot judge whether the survey is valid. It is the same as the survey taken by alumnae, for the reason that we cannot rule out the possibility only the ones who oppose coeducation answer the survey.

Second, another fault that weakens the argument is that the arguer fails to establish a causal relationship between keeping the college all-female and improving morale among students as well as convincing alumna to keep supporting the college financially. Perhaps, coeducation will improve morale rather than keeping the college all-female. If students don’t like all females in the school, still keeping all- female may bring a decrease of morale. Besides, no evidence indicates that the alumnae will not continue to support the college financially after the coeducation. They support may because they love their school, and no matter their college coeducation or keeping all-female, they will always do the help.

Finally, before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that the arguer ignores other advantageous of coeducation and disadvantageous of keeping the college all-female. For example, coeducation may provide a better circumstance for the students to communicate while only female is not likely to be good for the development of students.

To sum up, the argument is not reasoned as it stands. To make it logically accepted, the arguer would firstly make the surveys valid and also have to take other relative factors into account.

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In the recommendation, the arguer asserts that it is better for Grove College to preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs based on two surveys. One is taken by students in school, with eighty percent respondences wanting the school to remain all female. The other is taken by alumnae also opposing coeducation. Besides, the arguer considers keeping the college all-female, therefore,（这里用therefore，我觉得不是很通顺） will improve morale among students and convince alumna to keep supporting the college financially. However, the conclusion mentioned neglecting other possible alternatives seems not so compelling, while some assumptions and evidence also prove to be unwarranted and dubious after a fully scrutiny.

First of all, the major problem with this argument is that the result of the survey lacks credibility, because it is highly possible that the sample is too limited, and therefore could not lend strong support to the arguer’s conclusion. The arguer claims that eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, nevertheless what is the total number of students who take the survey（is unknown.） Are the surveyors is representative? （妈牙，这是什么句子？？ 居然又是are，又是is；而且surveyors是测量员的意思，测量员也需要有代表性？？kito该挨打了） Unless the arguer provides us with the detailed information about the survey, we cannot judge whether the survey is valid. It is the same as the survey taken by alumnae, for the reason that we cannot rule out the possibility only the ones who oppose coeducation answer the survey.其实这句话，我觉得也没说清楚，我是这样写的：Second the separate survey answered by alumnae could not reflect the view of whole alumnae because it is entirely possible that the alumnae who opposed coeducation are inclined to response this survey

Second, another fault that weakens the argument is that the arguer fails to establish a causal relationship between keeping the college all-female and improving morale among students as well as convincing alumnae to keep supporting the college financially. Perhaps, coeducation will improve morale rather than keeping（去掉ing，rather than 后跟原型） the college all-female. If students don’t（do not） like all females in the school, still keeping all- female may bring a decrease of（undermine） morale. Besides, no evidence indicates that the alumnae will not continue to support the college financially after the coeducation. They support may because they love their school, and no matter their college coeducation or keeping all-female, they will always do the help（keep donation）.

Finally, before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that the arguer ignores other advantageous（用名词形式） of coeducation and disadvantageous of keeping the college all-female. For example, coeducation may provide a better circumstance for the students to communicate while only female is not likely to be good for the development of students.

To sum up, the argument is not reasoned as it stands. To make it logically accepted, the arguer would firstly make the surveys valid and also have to take other relative factors into account.（结尾也太简单了点）
还有一点你没想到的就是：Grove alumna 不会仅仅因为coeducation这一问题而减少资助。（而且作者也没有调查那些反对coeducation的alumna所提供的资助数额，很有可能支持coeducation的alumna所提供的资助数额高于反对coeducation的alumna，所以coeducation会影响资助的观点是untenable。）

的确和你以往的水平差得较远！

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