issue 208 dganggang （kito）超时1min 一定要拍 多拍多得 拍得仔细积攒rp

dganggangUID: 2125101

208"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."

提纲：
穿着言行等外在因素容易受到外界影响
穿着言行的多样化导致不能全面深入了解一个相应的社会
穿着言行一直在变，但是文化价值等相对稳定

"I look good, I feel good." This advertising word has become a very vivid description of the feelings of modern people especially young people. People intend to express their unique attitudes or their personalities through dress, speaking tones or their gestures. Nevertheless, this trend has no necessary relation with the judgment that we can clearly and completely get what a society's ideas and values are by just observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

In my opinion, appearance and behavior may be a quite complex dimension that it can not tell the characteristics of a society by itself, particularly in the modern society.

In the first place, the way in which people choose to make them up and present themselves have become more and more influenced even dominated by the fashions, commercials and media, which means people may lose their own rational judgment on how to mould their appearances. Tmac encourages you to wear ADIDAS shoes while Lebron James shows that cool guys love NIKE. The only element that stimulates you to make your own choice may depend on which NBA star you prefer. It doesn't matter which brand you can choose and whether you have tried to fit you palates with the equipment they provide you. There so many such examples in our world, white people may learn to speak the way black people speak English just for they like Hip Hop or simply it looks cool. People may be too easily transformed into different shapes by the outside pressure because all the fashions and commercials have moved them into the positions that they will look more attractive or gorgeous if they buy their products to make up their appearance. Thus, this turgid trend becomes prevailing but it lend no support to look into the real ideas and values of a society.

In the second place, the diversity of the numerous kinds or styles of the appearance and behavior of the people has made it quite hasty to make any conclusion or definition of a society's ideas and values. For a instance of U.S., the fact that black people love wearing Hip Hop trousers, T shirts does not prove that the American values have switched to more casual and relaxing style. Similarly, the truth that  jeans has been extremely popular for the many years in America and many people enjoying wearing like cow boys has no credibility that America is a society of Western Spirit, which is always exciting and romantic. We have untold ways in our world, particularly the modern world, about different schools or styles different people like to show and present themselves to the outside, however, it can not tell you a true world only by observing the appearance and behavior of the people.

Last but not the least, appearance and behavior are changing or transmuting constantly but it's not warranted to consider that the ideas and values of the society are on the same pace. The world is developing so rapidly and it is even accelerating its steps after entering the Information times. The way people dress, act and look is also transposing like a sewing machine, which will never remain the same for a long time and it may totally changes after one year or sooner. Nonetheless, the ideas and values will still be relatively consolidate and stable because these things are underlined by many other factors besides how people dress or look. For example, people do not wear old dress called Chang Shan any more in China nowadays but the whole educational system encourage students to learn ancient Chinese literature and cultures by what the traditional methods of action and thoughts are woven into the modern values of the Chinese society, more or less, no one can neglect its existence.

In sum, we may get to know some aspects of the changes and  pulses of our society by looking into the way people look, dress and act, however, we may add more elements in to the discussion and try to explore the variety of other references to understand a society’s values and ideas more profoundly, extensively and systematically.

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

issue 208 dganggang （kito）超时1min 一定要拍 多拍多得 拍得仔细积攒rp

208"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."

提纲：是disagree吗？
穿着言行等外在因素容易受到外界影响 这个和了解社会理念和价值有什么关系？
穿着言行的多样化导致不能全面深入了解一个相应的社会
穿着言行一直在变，但是文化价值等相对稳定 提纲虽简单但很概括，且看正文

"I look good, I feel good." This advertising word has become a very vivid description of the feelings of modern people especially young people.记得东方老师说过不要用格言或广告词做背景开头，不过我挺喜欢这样的开头:) People intend to express their unique attitudes or their personalities through dress, speaking tones or their gestures. Nevertheless, this trend has no necessary relation with the judgment that we can clearly and completely get what a society's ideas and values are by just observing the appearance and behavior of its people.后面这句显得有些多余，因为你前面说了through dress, speaking tones or their gestures.

In my opinion, appearance and behavior may be a quite complex dimension这样有歧异的，你可以查一下complex dimension我查了是复维数的意思 that it去掉 can not tell the characteristics of a society by itself, particularly in the modern society.你把这段单独列出来说，是想避免你的重复论证吗?很明显你前面已经表明了自己的观点的，其实完全可以并作一段的

In the first place, the way in which people choose to make them up and present themselves have has become more and more influenced even dominated by the fashions, commercials 个人认为没有必要用复数 and media, which means people may lose their own rational judgment on how to mould这个词是要表达choose, cover,conceal,还是formulate的意思，不解？ their appearances. Tmac是麦克各拉帝吗？ encourages you to wear ADIDAS shoes while Lebron James是“小皇帝”吗？你的例子让我想到NBA，还是换个大众型的例子吧，你觉得呢？ shows that cool guys love NIKE. The only element that stimulates you to make your own choice may depend on which NBA star you prefer果然，看了这句话我觉得我们应该有共同爱好. It doesn't matter which brand you can choose and whether you have tried to fit you palates appetite? with the equipment they provide you. There so many such examples in our world, white people may learn to speak the way black people speak English just for they like Hip Hop 呵呵，又是一个共同话题or simply it looks cool. People may be too easily transformed into different shapes by the outside pressure because all the fashions and commercials have moved them into the positions that they will look more attractive or gorgeous好词！ if they buy their products to make up their appearance. Thus, this turgid好词！ trend becomes prevailing but it lend no support to look into the real ideas and values of a society.感觉你的思路有点发散，感觉有点argument的味道，不过正是按时写出来的文章才有这种非chinglish的思维

In the second place, the diversity of the numerous kinds or styles of the appearance and behavior of the people has made it quite hasty to make any conclusion or definition 又感觉到argument的味道了 of a society's ideas and values. For a instance of U.S., the fact that black people love wearing Hip Hop trousers, T shirts does not prove that the American values have switched to more casual and relaxing style为什么？我觉得正好能反映啊？. Similarly, the truth that  jeans has have been extremely popular for the去掉 many years in America and many people enjoying wearing like cow boys has no credibility that又看到argument的影子！ America is a society of Western Spirit, which is always exciting and romantic. We have untold ways in our world, particularly the modern world, about different schools or styles different people like to show and present themselves to the outside, however, it can not tell you a true world only by observing the appearance and behavior of the people.感觉前面的例子不能有力支持你最后一句的结论

Last but not the least argument, appearance and behavior are changing or transmuting好词，不过和前面的changing重复了 constantly but it's not warranted to consider that argument the ideas and values of the society are on the same pace. The world is developing so rapidly and it is even accelerating its steps after entering the Information times. The way people dress, act and look is also transposing好词！ like a sewing machine, which will never remain the same for a long time and it may totally changes after one year or sooner. Nonetheless, the ideas and values will still be relatively consolidate consolidated and stable because these things are underlined by many other factors besides how people dress or look. For example, people do not wear old dress called Chang Shan any more in China nowadays but the whole educational system encourage students to learn ancient Chinese literature and cultures by what the traditional methods of action and thoughts are woven into the modern values of the Chinese society, more or less, no one can neglect its existence.介意不要用带有中国背景的例子，还有，你的长句我要好好学习，毕竟是按时写的

In sum, we may get to know some aspects of the changes and  pulses of our society by looking into the way people look, dress and act, however, we may add more elements in to into the discussion and try to explore the variety of other references怎么没见你提到？ to understand a society’s values and ideas more profoundly, extensively and systematically.

dganggang，首先我想问问你如何能在规定的时间内写出这样一篇作文，你的语言功底让我佩服，但是带有太多argument的色彩，而且你的长句有些语法结构上的错误，不过总的来说值得我好好学习。我想在我达到限时之前还是不改你的文章为好，压力太大:L

[ 本帖最后由 jingjingtous 于 2006-1-15 22:39 编辑 ]

dganggangUID: 2125101

多谢jingjing！Tmac LBJ估计美国人耳熟能详 哈哈
你还是恭维太多了 应该再多点痛批 不过你的认真令人感佩！

至于如何控制时间 我反正一开始就是限时写 也许经验就是开头尽量简短
一开始我开头写很多所以造成超时很多 后来吸取经验 就好很多了
还有就是写的时候一定要流畅吧

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

thank your for your sharing!
Tmac is Tracy MacGrady so my first guess is right!
LBj, obviously is Lebron James, the talent and young player, so I am right the second time! hehe:victory: