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Issue 196
"Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
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(573 70min)
提纲：
技术只是作为一种手段，本身没有好坏之分。
1 技术的作用是提高生产效率，节约生产时间和成本。
2 A技术可以用在好的地方，
  B技术也可以用于毁灭性的地方。
3 总的来说，需要限制与规划的是运用技术的伦理规范。不应该因为其负面影响，限制技术本身的发展。

With the development of the high technology, modern people live a much more contented life. In the mean while, the fast changing technique also carries us lots of troublesome. In some certain stances, we have to say, with the evolution technology, new invention bring us more threat and further damage in our quality of life. Someone even draw to an absolutely conclusion that we should restrain the attempt on new technology. However, in my point of view, I have to say it is the human ethic rather than the technique that should be limited. I totally promote the technical achievement for the following reasons:

The technology itself is a tool that should be used for the promotion of production, the saving of time, and the decrease of cost. We create new technology for the desire of the most effective way of life in the good fields, or some times, in the bad fields. We might laugh at someone who complains a dictionary for the reason that it provides us some bad information. As one should be objective and see the good information a dictionary contented also. For the same reason, we have to say it might be not so wise if a person have the similar complain on the technology. As a tool, technology itself works exactly like a dictionary as its main function is not for "good" or "bad" but for the most efficiency.  

In history, technology does help a lot in the development of human life. Such example can be seen everywhere: the technical skill of the fire helps man processing the cooked food, which greatly deduced the gastrointestinal disease and prolonged the expected living time. The smelt of metal and give us a chance that we can conquer the surrounding harder than our bone and fresh by using manmade material. The industry revolution, with numerous invitation it carried to us, greatly reduced our and stimulated the development of technology itself. The bulb give us light in family life in every evening; the TV as well as other radiocasting shows us a exciting world; the camera records our wonderful memory; and the computer connect our privet life to the whole world by internet.

It is undeniable that the technical invention also brings us lots of disadvantage. Death always carries with the invention of power. The cold weapon with the usage of metal is record with the injury, tear and blood. In industry revolution, we created the gun and other weapons, which wildly used in the world war. We use candle bomb illumes the war field and our evening time have to be filled up with nonsense soup shows or junky advertisements. The camera records the poverty of Africa and picture down the terrify attack on 9.11. A new kind of crime--- internet or credit card cheating with its typical concealment trouble the modern people greatly.           

All in all, it is hard to say if a technology can be simply called as good or bad. As we can't judge an effective tool if it should be promoted or banned without using. In my opinion, it is the way, which we use those technologies and the people who use them that should be limited. The technology gives us a chance that we can create things by machine rather than our bare hands. It will be much wiser if we criticize the person who attempts to create the nuclear boom than inhabit the nuclear power.

[ 本帖最后由 zhangheng1020 于 2006-1-18 21:45 编辑 ]

dinddind2003UID: 196353

我改:)

dinddind2003UID: 196353

With the development of the high technology, modern people live a much more contented(有内涵？) life. In the mean time, the fast changing technique also carries us lots of troublesome（trouble）. In some（certain就行了） certain stances（cases吧）, we have to say, with the evolution（of） technology, new invention bring（brings） us more threat and further（删further） damage in our quality of life. Someone even draw to an absolutely conclusion that we should restrain the attempt on new technology. However, in my point of view, I have to say it is the human ethic rather than the technique that should be limited. I totally promote the technical achievement for the following reasons: （这一段语法错误多了点，下次要注意啊，不过我认为你的主题句很像倒数第二句，和提纲不符）

The technology itself is a tool that should be used for the promotion of production, the （the删）saving of time, and the（the删） decrease of cost. We create new technology for（to meet ）the desire of the most effective way of life in the（the删） good fields, or some times, in the（the删） bad fields. We might laugh at someone who complains a dictionary for the reason that it provides us some bad information. As one should be objective and see the good information a dictionary contented also. For the same reason, we have to say it might be so wise if a person have the similar complain on the technology. （不好意思，这个字典的类比没看明白怎么说明了技术的作用是提高生产效率，节约生产时间和成本） As a tool, technology itself works like a dictionary as its main function is not for "good" or "bad" but for the most efficiency exactly. （因为没看懂你的例子，所以觉得本段的论证不到位，尽快改改）

In history, technology does help a lot in the development of human life. Such example can be seen everywhere: the technical skill of the（the删） fire helps man processing（prepare） the（the删） cooked food, which greatly deduced the gastrointestinal disease and prolonged the expected living time. The smelt of metal and（and删） give（gives） us a chance that we can conquer the surrounding（which is） harder than our bone（bones） and fresh by using manmade material. The industry revolution, with numerous invitation it carried to us, greatly reduced our（our？什么意思，呵呵，笔误？） and stimulated the development of technology itself. The bulb give us light in family life in every evening; the TV as well as other radiocasting shows us a exciting world; the camera records our wonderful memory; and the computer connect our privet life to the whole world by internet. （很充分的例子说明了科技的优势，但是注意一下语法和表达，就算用简单句也要让别人容易理解，考官可没时间仔细琢磨）

It is undeniable that the technical invention also brings us lots of disadvantage. Death always carries with （carries with 是什么意思阿，请教。）the invention of power. The cold weapon with the usage of metal is record with the injury（汉语上讲这是很好的修辞，可是英语也是吗？record with？请给我例句看看好吗？）, tear and blood. In industry revolution, we created the gun and other weapons, which wildly used in the world war. We use candle bomb illumes the war field and our evening time have to be filled up with nonsense soup shows or junky advertisements（战争的例子太多了吧，呵呵，你是战争狂人吗？：）危害的例子很多，你总结的那链接里可以参考一下）. The camera records the poverty of Africa and picture down the terrify attack on 9.11. A new kind of crime--- internet or credit card cheating with its typical concealment trouble the modern people greatly. （句子感觉很乱，没有层次感，所以要把例子好好组织一下，注意关联词的运用，去看看范文吧，看它们怎么罗列例子的）           

All in all, it is hard to say if a technology can be simply called as good or bad. As we can't judge an effective tool if it should be promoted or banned without using. In my opinion, it is the way, which we use those technologies and the people who use them that（that删） should be limited. The technology gives us a chance that we can create things by machine rather than our bare hands. It will be much wiser if we criticize the person who attempts to create the nuclear boom than inhabit the nuclear power.

看完你的文章感觉就是科技有好处也有坏处所以就要因人而异吗？你可以举几个例子说明同一种科技在不同的用法下有好处也有坏处，比如基因工程。
最后文章最好重写一下，注意表达，自己把表达改好了再传上来，这对你也是锻炼。

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我看^_^

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

2段用字典是想说明科技作为一种工具，本身没有对错之分。说明科技的作用本身是客观的。

其实我的3 4 两段例子是相互对应的。火器的运用，金属，工业革命，照明电力，无线传媒，数字电子按照科技的发展程度分别对应利弊。3段说利益，4段说弊病。可能水平不行，没有组织起来~~~


引用一下我的修改意见：

其实我觉得作文主要是一种思维的表达，所以aw说到底就是英语思维的训练。一两个句式可以运用，三四个例子可以背诵。但是根本上是一种融入英文思维的过程。.....在写作的时候第一反应出最自然的单词出来。对于细节的把握，这本身就是仁者见仁，智者见智的过程。

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因为修改的意见，自己又查了查字典。希望可以和大家一起复习一下一些小词的用法：
contented
con.tent.ed
AHD:[k…n-tµn“t¹d]
D.J.[k*n6tentid]
K.K.[k*n6tWnt!d]
adj.（形容词）
Satisfied with things as they are; content:
满足的：对事物现状满意的；满足的：
a contented expression on the child's face.
孩子脸上心满意足的表情



carry
[5kArI]
vt,vi.
-ried, -rying
携带；背着
These bags carry easily.
这些包便于携带。
This wonderful plane can carry seven passengers.
这架奇妙的飞机能载七名乘客。
Yesterday, a pigeon carried the first message from Pinhurst to Silbury.
昨天,一只鸽子把第一封信从平赫斯特带到锡尔伯里。
运送；搬运
Steam boats carried thousands of visitors across the channel from Europe.
轮船把成千上万的人从欧洲大陆送过英吉利海峡。
This freighter can carry a 50000-ton cargo direct to any port along the coast of the Pacific.
这艘货轮能够装载五万吨货物直接航行到太平洋沿岸的任何一个港口。
That pipe carries water.
那管子是送水用的。
Pipes carry oil across the desert.
管道将石油输送过沙漠。
Pipes carry oil across the desert to the east.
输油管把石油经过沙漠运送到东部。
He carried the food to the table.
他把食物端到桌上。
维持不动；支撑；支持
This pillar carries the whole roof.
这根柱子支撑着整个屋顶。
带有；穿着
How many kilogrammes of luggage can I carry with me for a flight?
我一次航班可以随身携带多少公斤行李?
In Britain Police do not carry guns.
在英国警察不带枪。
Nowadays kidnappers usually carry guns.
现在绑架的匪徒通常都带枪。
举止
伸延； 延续
carry a road into the mountains
使路延伸至山地
达；及
Her voice does not carry far.
她的声音传得不远。
How far does this new pistol carry?
这种新式手枪能射多远?
My voice doesn't carry well.
我的声音传不远。
有（某种商品）出售；备货销售
Do you carry stationery?
你们有文具出售吗？
（加法）进位
9+5=? Write 4 and carry 1.
9+5吗?得四进一。
包含；可容纳
This suitcase will carry enough clothes for a week.
这只衣箱可装足够一个星期穿用的衣服。
具有；连带着产生； 招致必然结果
His opinion carries authority.他的意见具有权威性。
胜；获胜；采纳；赢得
The chairman tried to carry his point.
主席企图使他的观点获得赞成。
The Social Demogratic Party carried the country and won the election.
社会民主党得到国民的支持,赢得了大选的胜利。
carry an election
选举获胜
获得…赞同；通过
Her exceptional ability of management carried her to the top of her profession. (喻)
她出众管理才能使她成为她那一行的佼佼者。
The resolution was carried.
决议获得通过。
The law was carried by 310 votes to 306 in Congress.
这项法令以三百一十票对三百零六票在议会获得通过。
The speaker carried the audience with him.
演讲者赢得了听众的赞同。



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[ 本帖最后由 zhangheng1020 于 2006-1-19 11:09 编辑 ]

dinddind2003UID: 196353

恩，看来3 4段只是表达的问题了，改改就行了，可是2段主题不是The technology itself is a tool that should be used for the promotion of production, the saving of time, and the decrease of cost。吗，那么是不是应该换个例子呢？

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终于交作文了= =

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

原帖由 yogurt4 于 2006-1-18 22:54 发表
终于交作文了= =

昨夜登陆不上来，看不到这里的修改意见，只是放下来冷了冷又仔细看了看，确实细节上面问题很多很多 = =，所以让人看的费解= = ，所以自己修改了修改，今天看见了，正在修改ing.....

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

With the development of the high technology, modern people live a much more contented life. In the mean time, the fast changing technique also carries us lots of trouble. In certain cases, we have to say, with the evolution of technology, new inventions bring us more threat and damage in our quality of life. Someone even draw to an absolutely conclusion that we should restrain the attempt on new technology. However, in my point of view, it is the human ethic rather than the technique that should be limited. I heartfully promote the technical achievement for the following reasons: （技术只是作为一种手段，本身没有好坏之分。所以应该鼓励技术的发展，用伦理道德限制使用者来避免技术产物带来的危害。全文技术和技术产物是两个概念。技术的负面影响是源于技术的使用，而不是技术本身）

The technology itself is a tool that should be used for promotion of production, saving of time, and decrease of cost. We create new technology to meet这个改得好 the desire of the most effective way of life in good fields, or some times, in bad fields. We might laugh at someone who complains a dictionary for the reason that it provides us some bad information. As one should be objective and see the good information a dictionary contented also. For the same reason, we have to say it might be not so wise if a person have the similar complain on the technology. As a tool, technology itself works exactly like a dictionary as its main function is hard to be judged as "good" or "bad" as it is for the objective efficiency.  (我们不应该因为字典提供不好的信息就抱怨字典，同样作为一种工具，技术本身是客观中性的，没有好坏之分)

In history, technology does help a lot in the development of human life. Such example can be seen everywhere: the technical skill of the fire helps man prepare cooked food, which greatly deduced the gastrointestinal disease and prolonged the expected living time. The metallurgy give us a chance that we can conquer the surrounding which have a harder density than human bones and fresh by using manmade material. The industry revolution, with numerous invitations it carried to us, greatly reduced labor force and stimulated the development of technology itself. The bulb give us light in family life in every evening; the TV as well as other radiocasting shows us a exciting world; the camera records our wonderful memory; and the computer connect our privet life to the whole world by internet. 火器的运用，金属，工业革命，照明电力，无线传媒，数字电子按照科技的发展程度分别对应利。

It is undeniable that the technical inventions also bring us lots of disadvantages. Death always carries with the invention of power. The cold weapon with the usage of metal is with the record of injury, tear and blood in history. In industry revolution, we created the gun and other weapons, which are wildly used in the world war. We use candle bomb illumes the war field and our evening time have to be filled up with nonsense soup shows or junky advertisements. The camera records the poverty of Africa and picture down the terrify attack on 9.11. A new kind of crime--- internet or credit card cheating with its typical concealment trouble the modern people greatly.火器的运用，金属，工业革命，照明电力，无线传媒，数字电子按照科技的发展程度分别对应弊。   

All in all, it is hard to say if a technology can be simply called as good or bad. As we can't judge an effective tool if it should be promoted or banned without using. In my opinion, it is the way, which we use those technologies and the people who use them should be limited. The technology gives us a chance that we can create things by machine rather than our bare hands. It will be much wiser if we criticize the person who attempts to create the nuclear boom than inhabit the nuclear power. With the critical ethic limitation, the technical achievement should be fully promoted.

dinddind2003UID: 196353

先发表一些个人意见，在你下次写的时候，把一些你觉得我们看起来可能费解但是又是你查到的词用汉语注释一下（一定要是你查到的而不是凭空想的），不然我一看到费解的词就怀疑你是不是用错了，即使是很地道的American用法，水平有限，呵呵;P

现在看看你的修改

dinddind2003UID: 196353

With the development of the high technology, modern people live a much more contented life. In the mean time, the fast changing technique also carries us lots of trouble. In certain cases, we have to say, with the evolution of technology, new inventions bring us more threat and damage in(to) our quality of life. Someone even draw to an absolutely conclusion that we should restrain the attempt on new technology. However, in my point of view, it is the human ethic rather than the technique that should be limited. I heartfully promote the technical achievement for the following reasons: （技术只是作为一种手段，本身没有好坏之分。所以应该鼓励技术的发展，用伦理道德限制使用者来避免技术产物带来的危害。全文技术和技术产物是两个概念。技术的负面影响是源于技术的使用，而不是技术本身）(I heartfully promote the technical achievement for the following reasons:这句话的出现就意味着后面大段都是讲技术的优点了，这是不是你的本意呢？)

The technology itself is a tool that should be used for promotion of production, saving of time, and decrease of cost. We create new technology to meet the desire of the most effective way of life in good fields, or some times, in bad fields. We might laugh at someone who complains a dictionary for the reason that it provides us some bad information. As one should be objective and see the good information a dictionary contented also. For the same reason, we have to say it might be not so wise if a person have the similar complain on the technology. As a tool, technology itself works exactly like a dictionary as its main function is hard to be judged as "good" or "bad" as it is for the objective efficiency.  (我们不应该因为字典提供不好的信息就抱怨字典，同样作为一种工具，技术本身是客观中性的，没有好坏之分) (字典的例子还是不符合中心句啊，虽然语言感觉可以了，这么说吧，看了字典的例子我觉得你的逻辑就是：因为科技是一种工具，没有好坏之分，所以I heartfully promote the technical achievement，你觉得这样很合理吗？这么说世上所有不分好坏的东西我们都可以支持了？)

In history, technology does help a lot in the development of human life. Such example can be seen everywhere: the technical skill of the fire helps man prepare cooked food, which greatly deduced the gastrointestinal disease and prolonged the expected living time. The metallurgy give us a chance that we can conquer the surrounding which have a harder density than human bones and fresh by using manmade material. The industry revolution, with numerous invitations it carried to us, greatly reduced labor force and stimulated the development of technology itself. The bulb give us light in family life in every evening; the TV as well as other radiocasting shows us a exciting world; the camera records our wonderful memory; and the computer connect our privet life to the whole world by internet. 火器的运用，金属，工业革命，照明电力，无线传媒，数字电子按照科技的发展程度分别对应利。

It is undeniable that the technical inventions also bring us lots of disadvantages. Death always carries with the invention of power. The cold weapon with the usage of metal is with the record of injury, tear and blood in history. In industry revolution, we created the gun and other weapons, which are wildly used in the world war. We use candle bomb illumes the war field and our evening time have to be filled up with nonsense soup shows or junky advertisements. The camera records the poverty of Africa and picture down the terrify attack on 9.11. A new kind of crime--- internet or credit card cheating with its typical concealment trouble the modern people greatly.火器的运用，金属，工业革命，照明电力，无线传媒，数字电子按照科技的发展程度分别对应弊。  
(这两段通过，觉得不错了，论证有说服力)

All in all, it is hard to say if a technology can be simply called as good or bad. As we can't judge an effective tool if it should be promoted or banned without using. In my opinion, it is the way, (by) which we use those technologies and the people who use them should be limited. The technology gives us a chance that we can create things by machine rather than our bare hands. It will be much wiser if we criticize the person who attempts to create the nuclear boom than inhabit the nuclear power. With the critical ethic limitation, the technical achievement should be fully promoted.

我觉得最后的总结应该对应题目，题目问你是不是危害生活，而不是应该追究谁的责任，虽然最后这段语言不错，可是和题目关系密切些更好吧。

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

谢谢！！
非常感谢！！