argument145 同题第六期

rosewmUID: 2183870

Argument145:
A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person—often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed—and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.

从一个医学生的角度来看这道题

1）因果倒置：study只能说明snore和overweight相关，但并不能说明是snore导致的overweight，事实是胖人的咽喉结构使之容易打鼾。
2）第二句不能批。因为目前打鼾的专业命名就是sleep apnea。
3）打鼾导致疲乏？所以锻炼少？－－错误假设，无科学依据。
4）结论充分必要性的批驳: 应该通过手术或其它手段彻底改善打鼾这种不健康的状态，而不是用少吃多锻炼的方法
    导致肥胖的原因还有很多: 遗传、偏食、生活习惯不好、抑郁、等等


In this argument the author claims that the people who snore should try to eat less and to exercise more than the average person. To support his claim the author cites the recent study that a correlation between snoring and gaining weight. Close inspection of the evidence reveals, however, I find this argument specious on several grounds.

First, the author provides no assurances that the survey on which the argument depends is statistically reliable. The argument provides no information about the number of subjects or their health problems. The fewer subjects, the less reliable the study's result. Also, perhaps the spectrum of geographic areas represented among subjects is the narrow. Unless a sufficient number of subjects from diverse geographic areas and of all ages and on a regular basis, I simply cannot accept the arguer’s conclusion.

Secondly, even if we concede the strong correlation between snoring and overweight, the speaker lack evidence to show that snoring causes weight gain. A correlation is one indication of a causal relationship, but in itself does not suffice to prove such a relationship. Perhaps some other medical condition cause both snoring and weight gain. Even if such a relationship between the two phenomena exists, the author must provide some evidence of this cause-and-effect relationship before I can accept the arguer’s final conclusion that snoring causes gaining weight. Perhaps the deviant structure throat of overweight people makes for snoring.

Thirdly, even if the people who snore are more likely to gain weight, no evidence support the auger's hypothesis that the person suffering sleep apnea would feel too tired during the day to exercise. Even if it is the tiredness cause the weight gain, what we should do first is to solve the problem of the poor health condition by surgery or other methods. In addition, the arguer fails to consider several other relevant factors that may influence gaining weight. For instance, abnormal habit of dietary is the main cause of overweight. What's more, environmental and genetic factors and depressed will affect the weight of a person.

In conclusion, the argument for snoring man eats less and exercise more is not well supported. To bolster the argument the author must show more details about the study between snoring and weight gain. To strengthen the argument the author must account for all the possible causes of snoring and of sleep apnea.

赶时间写的，比较混乱～

leedgenUID: 160823

In this argument the author claims that the people who snore should try to eat less and to exercise more than the average person. To support his claim the author cites the recent study that a correlation between snoring and gaining weight. Close inspection of the evidence reveals [reveal可以直接接从句吗？], however, I find this argument specious on several grounds.

First, the author provides no assurances that the survey on which the argument depends is statistically reliable. The argument provides no information about the number of subjects or their health problems. The fewer subjects, the less reliable the study's result. Also, perhaps the spectrum of geographic areas represented among subjects is the narrow. Unless a sufficient number of subjects from diverse geographic areas and of all ages and on a regular basis, I simply cannot accept the arguer’s conclusion.[这个survey据说是个大前提，最好承认它是对的，不过我也不确定，你可以参看同主题里这道题的一些解释说明]

Secondly, even if we concede the strong correlation between snoring and overweight, the speaker lack evidence to show that snoring causes weight gain. A correlation is one indication of a causal relationship, but in itself does not suffice to prove such a relationship. Perhaps some other medical condition cause both snoring and weight gain. Even if such a relationship between the two phenomena exists, the author must provide some evidence of this cause-and-effect relationship before I can accept the arguer’s final conclusion that snoring causes gaining weight. Perhaps the deviant structure throat of overweight people makes for snoring.

Thirdly, even if the people who snore are more likely to gain weight, no evidence support the auger's hypothesis that the person suffering sleep apnea would feel too tired during the day to exercise. Even if it is the tiredness cause the weight gain, what we should do first is to solve the problem of the poor health condition by surgery or other methods. In addition, the arguer fails to consider several other relevant factors that may influence gaining weight. For instance, abnormal habit of dietary is the main cause of overweight. What's more, environmental and genetic factors and depressed will affect the weight of a person.

In conclusion, the argument for snoring man eats less and exercise more is not well supported. To bolster the argument the author must show more details about the study between snoring and weight gain. To strengthen the argument the author must account for all the possible causes of snoring and of sleep apnea. 最后两句我觉得合成一句好


写的很好的，继续加油:victory:

rosewmUID: 2183870

谢谢你^_^
这道题真是不太好写啊～

rosewmUID: 2183870

^_^ 还有就是，reveal是可以接从句的，刚从北美范文里看见一句：Careful examination of these three arguments, however, reveals that they are specious at best.