issue10 jingjing【限时+修改＝临考前的最后奋战】

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

TOPIC: ISSUE10 - "Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."
WORDS: 594          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-2-19
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With the process of globalization and cultural homogeneity, some people believe that government should primarily consider their major cities for financial support in consideration of the big cities are the origin of national culture and tradition. However, I am inclined to disagree with the statement and as my point of view, government should account for the development of both rural areas and large cities on balance.

To begin with, with the development of modern science and technology, the diversified cultures tend to the orientation of interaction and interdependence, thus, the big cities such as New York, London, Beijing and etc. become the important stage for various cultures congregated there. And different cultures by distinct races or nations are synthesizing in these international cities, with their interlacing and influencing by each other, the mainstream culture, or the multi-culture was formulated. Therefore, although as the economic or political centers of one nation or the world, big cities become less powerful and evident for identifying a unique culture of one nation or a special group of people. For the supporting example one needs to look no further than New York. Nobody would deny that New York is the center of economy and politics in America or even the world, nevertheless, it cannot be the original place as American culture and traditions one more again for obtaining the federal government financial support, because the multi-culture which it stands for cannot be equivalent to the aged American culture. Therefore, it is ridiculous for government to support big cities financially for the pale reason that they are the origin of one nation's cultural traditions.

Apparently, as my opinion, some small cities or villages in the rural areas have more advantages than urban cities for the preservation of an identity of a nation--the cultural traditions. It goes without saying that one nation’s specific and significant traditions could be well preserved in the rural areas. Without the sharply impacts of outer economy and politics, the local residents live a life which their ancients lived before. Therefore, especially lacking the broaden communications with the outside, numerous traditions and cultures including the old ceremonies and customs, the diet habits or the style of architectures have been handed down from generation to generation. So one nation's traditional culture, in other words, its identity could be preserved integrally with the fleeting time. Due to the recession of the economy in the rural regions and its distinct and clear cultures, I believe that government should pay more efforts on the improvement of its economy and protection of its unique culture.

On balance, to the large cities which symbolized one nation's power and dignity, government should finance them on the development of economy and politics without reservation. However, when it comes to the rural areas, I insist that the government should invest the local business, instigate the process of native economy, ameliorate the poor traffic condition, improve the accessibility of the high education, and most importantly, preserve the indigenous culture as an important and indispensable identity for the whole country. Consider the great measures by governments of European countries for the purpose of preserving the countryside cultures and traditions. The beautiful landscape is the best proof to this view point.

In summary, I concede that government should pay their efforts to facilitate the development of the economy of their major cities, nonetheless, when it comes to the preservation of a nation's unique culture and tradition, I hold that government has responsibility to finance the rural areas, which stand for the merely and currently existing culture of one nation.

virginia730UID: 208873

好勤奋的jingjing~!!
膜拜字数.........

占位~

virginia730UID: 208873

With the process of globalization and cultural homogeneity, some people believe that government should primarily consider their major cities for financial support in consideration of the big cities are the origin of national culture and tradition. However, I am inclined to 开头表这样犹豫忧郁的~~语气肯定一点disagree with the statement and as my point of view, government should account for the development of both rural areas and large cities on balance.

To begin with, with the development of modern science and technology, the diversified cultures tend tobe?? the orientation 用result那? 总觉得这个词不是很对头~of interaction and interdependence, thus, the big cities such as New York, London, Beijing and去掉 etc. become the important stage for various cultures congregated there. And different cultures by distinct races or nations are synthesizing in these international cities, with their interlacing and influencing by each other, the mainstream culture, or the multi-culture was formulated. Therefore, although as the economic or political centers of one nation or the world, big cities become less powerful and evident for identifying a unique culture of one nation or a special group of people. For the supporting example one needs to look no further than New York. Nobody would deny that New York is the center of economy and politics in America or even the world, nevertheless, it cannot be the original place as American culture and traditions one more again for obtaining the federal government financial support, because the multi-culture which it stands for cannot be equivalent to the aged American culture. Therefore, it is ridiculous for government to support big cities financially for the pale reason that they are the origin of one nation's cultural traditions.jingjing的结构很好~! 观点也是. 但是觉得前面的表达, 即multi-cuture的由来有点不是很清楚~~

Apparently这个开头有点奇怪了, , ains my opinion, some small cities or villages in the rural areas have more advantages than urban cities foinr the preservation of an identity of a nation--the cultural traditions. It goes without saying that one nation’s specific and significant traditions could be well preserved in the rural areas. Without the sharply 这里是形容词啊impacts of outer economy and politics, the local residents live a life which their ancients lived before. Therefore, especially lacking the broaden communications with the outside, numerous traditions and cultures including the old ceremonies and customs, the diet habits or the style of architectures have been handed down from generation to generation有点重复哦~~这2个观点. So one nation's traditional culture, in other words, its identity could be preserved integrally with the fleeting time. Due to the recession of the economy in the rural regions and its distinct and clear cultures, I believe that government should pay more efforts on the improvement of its economy and protection of its unique culture.恩.....这段比起前面稍乱了点, 还有有点米说明确为什么农村需要资助, 传统文化==>但是穷==:威胁到文化==>要资助, 这样那?

On balance, to the large cities which symbolized one nation's power and dignity, government should finance them on the development of economy and politics without reservation.最好说明白, 资助城市不是因为....而是因为.... However, when it comes to the rural areas, I insist that the government should invest the local business, instigate the process of native economy, ameliorate the poor traffic condition, improve the accessibility of the high education, and most importantly, preserve the indigenous culture as an important and indispensable identity for the whole country. Consider the great measures by governments of European countries for the purpose of preserving the countryside cultures and traditions. The beautiful landscape is the best proof to this view point.

In summary, I concede that government should pay their efforts to facilitate the development of the economy of their major cities, nonetheless, when it comes to the preservation of a nation's unique culture and tradition, I hold that government has responsibility to finance the rural areas, which stand for the merely and currently existing culture of one nation.

jignjing的作文总的写的很好~~~!
时间和字数.....我膜拜啊
现在已经很不错了, 大改动不太现实, 但是要注意拼写和语法哦(写漏了?) , 我米指出来.不过每次都有哦~~
jingjing明天还写把, 继续互拍把~ 一起加油!!!

virginia730UID: 208873

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我的啊狗~~
写得有点烂了.....jingjing有时间就麻烦了狠拍了

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

感谢翼翼，真的
1  However, I am inclined to 开头表这样犹豫忧郁的~~语气肯定一点disagree with]是呀是呀，我又罗嗦了，呵呵：however, i disagree with......
2 the diversified cultures tend tobe?? the orientation 用result那? 总觉得这个词不是很对头~of interaction and interdependence,
我写完也感觉不对，你看看这样如何：diversified cultures tend to be more interlaced and interdependent.......
3 New York, London, Beijing and去掉 etc
看来我真的得注意了:L
4 jingjing的结构很好~! 观点也是. 但是觉得前面的表达, 即multi-cuture的由来有点不是很清楚~~
我想表达得是正是因为不同文化得融合所以产生了multi-culture使得大城市不再成为保留特色文化的舞台，逻辑方面没有理顺
5 Apparently这个开头有点奇怪了, , ains my opinion,
On the other hand, in my opinion,.......
6 the sharply 这里是形容词啊impacts
sharp impacts汗一个！:L
7 最好说明白, 资助城市不是因为....而是因为....
有道理，^_^
8 但是要注意拼写和语法哦(写漏了?) , 我米指出来.不过每次都有哦~~真的很惭愧，我很少顾及语法的，但是可能很致命的，真的很谢谢翼翼

virginia730UID: 208873

原帖由 jingjingtous 于 2006-2-20 10:26 发表
感谢翼翼，真的
1  However, I am inclined to 开头表这样犹豫忧郁的~~语气肯定一点disagree with]是呀是呀，我又罗嗦了，呵呵：however, i disagree with......
2 the diversif ...

><  ^ ^ jingjing好认真~!!!
加油!!

果小冻UID: 208370

学校网络有限制，只有固定时间可以上网，恩，今天全天有课，呵呵，占位先

果小冻UID: 208370

With the process of globalization and cultural homogeneity, some people believe that government should primarily consider their major cities for financial support in consideration of the big cities are the origin of national culture and tradition. However, I am inclined to 开头表这样犹豫忧郁的~~语气肯定一点disagree with the statement and as my point of view, government should account for the development of both rural areas and large cities on balance.[恩，开头很充实的感觉]

To begin with, with the development of modern science and technology, the diversified cultures tend tobe?? the orientation 用result那? 总觉得这个词不是很对头~of interaction and interdependence, thus, the big cities such as New York, London, Beijing and去掉 etc. become the important stage for various cultures congregated there. And different cultures by distinct races or nations are synthesizing in these international cities, with their interlacing and influencing by each other, the mainstream culture, or the multi-culture was formulated. Therefore, although as the economic or political centers of one nation or the world, big cities become less powerful and evident for identifying a unique culture of one nation or a special group of people. For the supporting example one needs to look no further than New York. Nobody would deny that New York is the center of economy and politics in America or even the world, nevertheless, it cannot be the original place as American culture and traditions one more again for obtaining the federal government financial support, because the multi-culture which it stands for cannot be equivalent to the aged American culture. Therefore, it is ridiculous for government to support big cities financially for the pale reason that they are the origin of one nation's cultural traditions.jingjing的结构很好~! 观点也是. 但是觉得前面的表达, 即multi-cuture的由来有点不是很清楚~~[我不是很同意你的看法，我觉得你不能断然的认定文化不是从大城市起源的，更不能从一个纽约来推论。我感觉既然你的开头采取的是一个平衡观点，那就不能说的这么绝对呀。不过结构是挺好的啦]

Apparently这个开头有点奇怪了, , ains my opinion, some small cities or villages in the rural areas have more advantages than urban cities foinr the preservation of an identity of a nation--the cultural traditions. It goes without saying that one nation’s specific and significant traditions could be well preserved in the rural areas. Without the sharply 这里是形容词啊impacts of outer economy and politics, the local residents live a life which their ancients lived before. Therefore, especially lacking the broaden communications with the outside, numerous traditions and cultures including the old ceremonies and customs, the diet habits or the style of architectures have been handed down from generation to generation有点重复哦~~这2个观点. So one nation's traditional culture, in other words, its identity could be preserved integrally with the fleeting time.[这个地方思维有个跳跃，要给个过度，在阐述乡村文化的纯粹性和政府应该支助之间要有铺垫和过度] Due to the recession of the economy in the rural regions and its distinct and clear cultures, I believe that government should pay more efforts on the improvement of its economy and protection of its unique culture.恩.....这段比起前面稍乱了点, 还有有点米说明确为什么农村需要资助, 传统文化==>但是穷==:威胁到文化==>要资助, 这样那?

On balance, to the large cities which symbolized one nation's power and dignity, government should finance them on the development of economy and politics without reservation.最好说明白, 资助城市不是因为....而是因为.... However, when it comes to the rural areas, I insist that the government should invest the local business, instigate the process of native economy, ameliorate the poor traffic condition, improve the accessibility of the high education, and most importantly, preserve the indigenous culture as an important and indispensable identity for the whole country. Consider the great measures by governments of European countries for the purpose of preserving the countryside cultures and traditions. The beautiful landscape is the best proof to this view point.
[看吧，这里又是平衡观点了，所以你那个第一段真是应该调整一下哈]
In summary, I concede that government should pay their efforts to facilitate the development of the economy of their major cities, nonetheless, when it comes to the preservation of a nation's unique culture and tradition, I hold that government has responsibility to finance the rural areas, which stand for the merely and currently existing culture of one nation.

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

[这个地方思维有个跳跃，要给个过度，在阐述乡村文化的纯粹性和政府应该支助之间要有铺垫和过度]
恩，是的，但是这个铺垫应该怎么叙述呢？

果小冻UID: 208370

我觉得可以在描述乡村文化的时候对于其资金方面的缺陷适当做点倾斜，要是你想突出政府应该做出资助这个点的话，而不是一味的说乡村的好处．恩．

果小冻UID: 208370

恩．俺上课去了，你有什么发消息和我说吧．不要担心我的课．呵呵