issue47 ★无敌拍场★第十一期作业

rosewmUID: 2183870

47"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
提纲：
同意题目观点
[1]经济：购物是否理智－－通常商家打出打折出售的字样，就会吸引很多顾客。其实，这只是商家的一种诡计，有时打折后的价格远远高于未开始促销活动的定价。这种消费的不理智源于没有经过认真的思考、合理的评估商品的价格。另外，很多人追求品牌，其实一些新出的小品牌物美价廉，这也说明我们购物并不足够理智。

[2]在最需要理性思维的科学界是否有足够的理智呢？答案也是否定的。很多科学家一窝蜂的研究热点话题。论文成果严重撞车。还有，对著名科学家的盲从。例如法国的n射线事件，本来无中生有的东西，竟得到众多科研人员的追捧，一时间关于n射线的文章竟达上百篇。最后幸而由Wood[British physicist]提出合理的怀疑，通过严谨的论证，才得以将事实真相召告天下。这也说明，我们对于理性思维的强调还是不够的。

[3]但是，过分强调理性而忽略感性也是不可取的。

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I strongly agree with assertion that our contemporary society needs emphasis on reasoning and other cognitive skills much more. The world around us presents a series of reasonless activities which do harm to well-balanced development of our society. Two examples that aptly illustrate this point involve the fields of economics and science.

In the business realm, consumers generally pay little attention on the intellect during shopping. Consider a not egregious example, due to the city's rapid development and prosperity, dealers find all sorts of means to sale surplus commodities. For instance, rebating is an efficient tactic in competition with the peers and catering for consumer's interests in purchasing. Attracted by the price of the commodities in rebate which is seemly lower than it is ever before, people would buy a good deal of needless goods. However, what shocks us most is the price of commodities at a discount is far higher than the gross price before. In fact, it is only a trick of the trade. There can be no doubt that phenomenon of shopping blandness owning to lack of intellect in evaluating the prince and demand of goods. Besides, a group of people are fond of name brand products but the general ones which are not only as good as the former but also have a reasonable level of price. Accordingly, our modern society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect, especially on reasoning and other cognitive skills by trade.

In the scientific realm, intellect is strongly desired. Do the scientists place enough emphasis on the intellect? No. On the one hand, numerous scientists over the world are engaged in research in a narrow field which is hot and easy to get prize and honour. Vicious competition, which aims to publish paper, is no benefit individually and scientifically. On the other hand, many researchers and students are prone to trust in the key professor's assertion, even a obviously wrong one. For supporting examples one need look no further than N ray event. Blondlot, a distinguished professor of physics in France, claimed that a new ray has been observed and named it N ray. This assertion is so exciting in physics after discovered X ray that more than a hundred papers published in one year about this new ray. Nevertheless, a British physicist, Wood doubted that the strange ray can't be seen in other laboratories except Blondlot's. Through precise reasoning and rigorous experiments, Wood overthrew the fashionable assertion. Thereby, the end result is that we do not place enough rational thoughts and cognitive skills in science.

Admittedly, we should emphasis the importance of intellect. In some aspects, however, emphasizing intellect excessively and de-emphasizing emotions can carry negative consequences for our society. Positive emotions can stimulate imagination and creativity, and promote growth of our society. Negative emotions will make people avoid the bad news.

In sum, we should pay more attention to reasoning and cognitive skills.  Emphasizing on the intellect and emotion properly leads to a healthy society. Accordingly, on balance the speaker is fundamentally correct.

好难写啊～审题就审了半天～欢迎狂拍啊！^_^

dudujasperUID: 2180289

同意题目观点
[1]经济：购物是否理智－－通常商家打出打折出售的字样，就会吸引很多顾客。其实，这只是商家的一种诡计，有时打折后的价格远远高于未开始促销活动的定价。这种消费的不理智源于没有经过认真的思考、合理的评估商品的价格。另外，很多人追求品牌，其实一些新出的小品牌物美价廉，这也说明我们购物并不足够理智。

[2]在最需要理性思维的科学界是否有足够的理智呢？答案也是否定的。很多科学家一窝蜂的研究热点话题。论文成果严重撞车。还有，对著名科学家的盲从。例如法国的n射线事件，本来无中生有的东西，竟得到众多科研人员的追捧，一时间关于n射线的文章竟达上百篇。最后幸而由Wood[British physicist]提出合理的怀疑，通过严谨的论证，才得以将事实真相召告天下。这也说明，我们对于理性思维的强调还是不够的。

[3]但是，过分强调理性而忽略感性也是不可取的。

首先说说思路~是不是受dzhb644同学作文的影响把作文第三论证段分成感性和理性两部分了呢？其实我觉得若是特别的强调将感性和理性分开不是很好，而且光看你的思路只是笼统的在说理性，然而题目中强调的reasoning 和cognition并没有突出~这是篇有关社会是否重视逻辑和认识的题，而不是在讲理性与否的问题，总觉得你这样的思路有点欠妥，不知道这样讲对还是不对~
我也把握不好，说出看法，不对的话讨论一下啦嘿嘿~
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I strongly agree with （the) assertion that our contemporary society needs emphasis on reasoning and other cognitive skills much more. The world around us presents a series of reasonless activities which do harm to well-balanced development of our society. Two examples that aptly illustrate this point involve the fields of economics and science.
开头不错，就是第一句话的strongly这个词程度太大了，很主观的感觉~

In the business realm, consumers generally pay little attention on the intellect during shopping（这个应该是在一个shopping过程中貌似好点~）. Consider（ing?) a not egregious example[你就说举个平凡的例子就好了，不必要这么说，感觉好怪]due to the city's rapid development and prosperity, dealers find all sorts of means to sale surplus commodities. For instance, rebating is an efficient tactic in competition with the peers and catering for consumer's interests in purchasing. Attracted by the price of the commodities in rebate which is seemly lower than it is ever（delete) before, people would buy a good(great) deal of needless goods. However, what shocks us most is the price of commodities at a discount is far higher than the gross price before. In fact, it is only a trick of the trade. There can be no doubt that (this) phenomenon of shopping blandness(这个词是温柔爽快的意思~blindness) owning to lack of intellect in evaluating the prince and demand of goods. Besides, a group of people are fond of name brand products but the general ones which are not only as good as the former but also have a reasonable level of price. Accordingly, our modern society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect, especially on reasoning and other cognitive skills by trade.
用这个例子导出社会不重视逻辑个认识实在是很牵强，首先：讲价促削是种商业化的手段，对于顾客来说，买降价的商品总归是比买不降价的便宜，那么对于他们这到底是理智还是不理智呢？而且顾客疯买降价商品也许是他们真的有需要，即使是象文中你所说的是一种疯狂的行为，也不能说明这是一种普遍的现象，有这种疯狂行为的顾客说不顶只占小部分。第二，从商家，这种促销可以很好的脱手他们的积存货品，那他们是reasoning还是不呢？还有喜欢名牌的那个问题，或许是个人喜好呢，而且喜欢名牌的人是不是也是小部分的呢？罗罗索索了半天，也不知道你同意不同意，要是说的不对请指正哦
In the scientific realm, intellect is strongly desired. Do the scientists place enough emphasis on the intellect? No.（回答的真是肯定，一点让步的意思都没有） On the one hand, numerous scientists over the world are engaged in research in a narrow field which is hot and easy to get prize and honour. Vicious competition, which aims to publish paper, is no benefit individually and scientifically. （如果他们不在小范围内的深入研究能有机会出成果么？如果他们什么都考虑的话精力将会被分散）On the other hand, many researchers and students are prone to trust in the key professor's assertion, even a（an) obviously wrong one. For supporting examples one need look no further than N ray event. Blondlot, a distinguished professor of physics in France, claimed that a new ray has been observed and named it N ray.(这个放这里有点小错误的感觉） This assertion is so exciting in physics after discovered X ray that(and) more than a hundred papers （were) qpublished in one year about this new ray( delete). Nevertheless, a British physicist, Wood doubted that the strange ray can't be seen in other laboratories except Blondlot's. Through (the) precise reasoning and (the)rigorous experiments, Wood overthrew the fashionable assertion. Thereby, the end result is that we do not place enough rational thoughts and cognitive skills in science.
还是不太同意你举的例子，这么一个很专业很深的问题被广泛的接受的原因是人们不了解它，有的人更是没有能力去了解它，因此有能力推翻它的人本来就很少，而且需要一个过程，况且不是有人推翻它了么？单凭这点很难说明社会不重视reasoning和cognition，而且在科学领域这种从错误中进步的事例我觉得刚刚好可以用来证明reasoning的不断的提高~而且社会上设的许多奖项，例如NOBEL PRIZE,不正是促进人们不段的提高的么？又是罗嗦了一堆55555
Admittedly, we should emphasis the importance of intellect. In some aspects, however, emphasizing intellect excessively and de-emphasizing emotions can carry negative consequences for our society. Positive emotions can stimulate [the abilities on] imagination and creativity, and promote [the] growth of our society. Negative emotions will make people avoid the bad news.
这段~~~不知道怎么说了~~觉得跑题了,是不是想扩展深入呢？还是觉得不搭边的感觉


In sum, we should pay more attention to[on] reasoning and cognitive skills.  Emphasizing on the intellect and emotion properly leads to a healthy society. Accordingly, on balance the speaker is fundamentally correct.

语言：比上次好，还是注意下细节的方面
思路：~~~~正正正吧，觉得你的思路不是很好，我觉得可以从reasoning和cognition这两方面入手，或同意或反对或中立，而楼主你的论证是一种比较笼统的 intellect的感觉
论证：上面婆婆妈妈说了一堆，这里就不说了

我也不是很会写这个题，P的有点厉害+罗嗦，8对的地方请指正

[ 本帖最后由 dudujasper 于 2006-2-25 01:06 编辑 ]

SayyesUID: 2186610

47"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."

Words: 506

I strongly agree with assertion that our contemporary society needs emphasis on reasoning and other cognitive skills much more. The world around us presents a series of reasonless activities which do harm to well-balanced development of our society. Two examples that aptly illustrate this point involve the fields of economics and science.

In the business realm, consumers generally pay little attention on the intellect during shopping. Consider a not egregious example, due to the city's rapid development and prosperity, dealers find all sorts of means to sale surplus commodities. For instance, rebating is an efficient tactic in competition with the peers and catering for consumer's interests in purchasing. Attracted by the price of the commodities in rebate which is seemly lower than it is ever before, people would buy a good deal of needless goods. However, what shocks us most is the price of commodities at a discount [加个which]is far higher than the gross price before. In fact, it is only a trick of the trade. There can be no doubt that phenomenon of shopping blandness[少谓语] owning to lack of intellect in evaluating the price and demand of goods. Besides, a group of people are fond of name brand products but[rather than] the general ones which are not only as good as the former but also have a reasonable level of price.[消费确实是一种冲动的释放，少有理智的思考，作者也身有体会吗？呵呵~。从小处入手谈抽象问题，生动形象，又直切要害，值得学习。] Accordingly, our modern society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect, especially on reasoning and other cognitive skills by trade.[我感觉这个结论下得太仓促了， 开头不是说reasonless activities which do harm to well-balanced development of our society吗？而这里只是交代了不理性使消费很不划算，充其量是个人经济蒙受损失，如何达到损害社会平衡发展的效果？建议作一下引申，由小及大，以偏概全。如说商家利用顾客不理性的消费牟取暴利，不正当竞争扰乱了市场，名牌产品不合理垄断市场等等。总之，要说严重点，否则小题大做，没有强调的必要了。 ]

In the scientific realm, intellect is strongly desired. Do the scientists place enough emphasis on the intellect? No. [好强，振聋发聩呀，科学家们都吓得发抖了~~] On the one hand, numerous scientists over the world are engaged in research in a narrow field which is hot and easy to get prize and honor. Vicious competition, which aims to publish paper, is no benefit individually and scientifically[评得在点！]. On the other hand, many researchers and students are prone to trust in the key professor's assertion, even a obviously wrong one. For supporting examples one need look no further than N ray event. Blondlot, a distinguished professor of physics in France, claimed that a new ray has been observed and named it N ray. This assertion is so exciting in physics after discovered X ray that more than a hundred papers [were] published in one year about this new ray. Nevertheless, a British physicist, Wood doubted that the strange ray can't [could not] be seen in other laboratories except Blondlot's. Through precise reasoning and rigorous experiments, Wood overthrew the fashionable assertion.[这个例子选得很成功，将理性奉为圭臬的科学领域，却有一帮不理性的从业者] Thereby, the end result is that we do not place enough rational thoughts and cognitive skills in science.[还是显得太快，需要一些引申和发散，至少要提到society。 还有，一个个人的小请求：不要把科学家都一棒打死好吗？绝对了点(ETS喜欢吗？)，还有点伤感情，毕竟，出去的都是吃这碗饭的，唉~~]

Admittedly, we should emphasis the importance of intellect. In some aspects, however, emphasizing intellect excessively and de-emphasizing emotions can carry negative consequences for our society. Positive emotions can stimulate imagination and creativity, and promote growth of our society. Negative emotions will make people avoid the bad news[真的？].[还可以展开一点]

In sum, we should pay more attention to reasoning and cognitive skills.  Emphasizing on the intellect and emotion properly leads to a healthy society. Accordingly, on balance the speaker is fundamentally correct.

[一直十分欣赏作者闪电般洗练的文笔，行云般流畅的衔接，这些特点在此文中也一展无余。
精准的用词和变换的句型，仅我的水平，难易一字。
只是在逻辑上还要扣的紧一些，写抽象题时，由片面到整体，有一定的发散是不是好些？]

也欢迎拍拍我的作文
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=415174&extra=page%3D1

rosewmUID: 2183870

to dudu，
  首先，我还真没看别人写的这篇，本来想只写理性的，后来想这样太绝对了，好像ets不喜欢，于是就加了一段感性，但感觉感性可写的太多，反而不知道该怎么展开了，的确那一段写的不是很好；我没有写reasoning和cognition，一方面我觉得本题强调的还是intellect，that is后面只是解释，另一方面，也是一种刻意的回避了，呵呵，应为我感觉写逻辑和认识不太好写～
  盲目消费那段，我想表达的意思是，消费者陷入了商家的骗局，打折后只是ms比以前便宜。但人们感觉东西便宜时，就会一时头脑冲动买一些非必须的东西，这是不理智的。也许是我表达不清楚吧，呵呵。
  科学那段，我就不解释了，呵呵。估计越解释越乱。那个‘No’很好玩吧？那天看篇文章，说要注意长短句的结合，短句更有力度。于是用来试试，看来效果8错～

  最后要谢谢你的仔细评改，提出很多好的建议，还有谢谢鼓励，下回一定再再再多注意细节！^_^

to sayyes，
  谢谢你的飘扬和鼓励，的确每一段都应该在例子后面多展开论证的，可惜目前语言能力有限，不懂该怎么表达了，汗。。。
  下次一定努力！^_^