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evilghostUID: 167867

136. "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

提纲:
Topic136:
Ts: Most of time you have choice, but sometimes there is no choice
1.        We make choices everyday
In modern society since the living standard is high, we can choose the favorite life style.
Evidence: Eat, Sleep time and waking time, Clothes, Commute
In modern society, the phone, computer, tax make the communion very easy, and the information is very much.
Evidence: different search engine
2.        Sometimes you think there are no choice, because the other choice have no appealing
You don’t want to make other choices
Evidence: 工作
Evidence: 学校
Evidence: 住房
3.  Our choices are restricted  
                The law
                Evidence: the ways of making money
                The moral
                Evidence: Donating , give a hand to who needs.
4.  Sometimes we did have no choice.
You can’t decide your taste of food, and what other things you love
You can’t decide when you may have disease or what disease you have  



正文


Today, in most times, we have to make choices. No matter what we want to do, no matter what job we have, there are always some choices, whether critical or not, waiting for us. So I can say that the absence of choice, maybe do exist, is no doubt a quite rare circumstance.  

We make various choices in our everyday lives. In modern society, the living standard is much higher than ever before, and we can choose the favorite life style. Every morning, we can choose when to wake up. After waking up, we should choose what to eat for breakfast. When we get everything ready, we must choose how to get our company, by bus, by taxi or by car. Maybe we do all those things following our habits, but the choice do exist no matter we recognize or not. Moreover, since the inventing of Internet, tax and phone, the communicating became more and more easy and we can get a lot of information quickly and conveniently. But too much information also causes problem called the information explosion, and that means we have to choose useful information from the sea of various information. In one word, choice exists in every aspect of our lives.


Sometimes we feel there is only one choice available, but the fact is that the other choices have no appealing and we don't want to choose them at all. For example, an undergraduate student said he has no choice but to accept a job not very suitable. It is entirely possible that the salary of other jobs is too low and he doesn't consider them at all. The student don't want to choose them don't mean there are no choice for him.


Though in most cases there are choices waiting for us, there are restrictions too. We can't make every choice you want in most times. The law is a representative restriction that prevents us from harmful deeds. If I want to earn money, robbing bank is a fast and easy way, but the law forces me to forget this method. The moral is another restriction encouraging me to do the right thing. If I am a rich man, I can choose between living in luxury and donating most of my money to society. Directed by moral, I may choose the second way.



However, there are still some circumstances that we have no choice at all. Since the human can't do anything, there are still some things are out of people's hand. Take disease for example, no one can choose when to have disease and what kind of disease to have. The taste of people is another thing which can't be chose. A person may love to eat arid food, but there is no reason for why he loves it.      


In sum, in most cases when you thought you have no choice, the fact is that you don’t want to make other choices. Whether you recognize or not, there is numerous choices waiting for you both in job and in your everyday life.


这个提纲写的有点多了

[ 本帖最后由 staralways 于 2006-3-12 10:43 编辑 ]

bellaUID: 2113519

Today, in most times, we have to make choices. No matter what we want to do, no matter what job we have, there are always some choices, whether critical or not, waiting for us. So I can say that the absence of choice, maybe do exist, is no doubt a quite rare circumstance.  

We make various choices in our everyday lives. In modern society, the living standard is much higher than ever before, and we can choose the favorite life style. Every morning, we can choose when to wake up. After waking up, we should choose what to eat for breakfast. When we get everything ready, we must choose how to get our company, by bus, by taxi or by car. Maybe we do all those things following our habits, but the choice do exist no matter we recognize or not. Moreover, since the inventing of Internet, tax and phone, the communicating became more and more easy and we can get a lot of information quickly and conveniently. But too much information also causes problem called the information explosion, and that means we have to choose useful information from the sea of various information. In one word, choice exists in every aspect of our lives.


Sometimes we feel there is only one choice available, but the fact is that the other choices have no appealing and we don't want to choose them at all. For example, an undergraduate student said he has no choice but to accept a job not very suitable. It is entirely possible that the salary of other jobs is too low and he doesn't consider them at all. The student don't want to choose them don't mean there are no choice for him.(感觉有点中式呵呵...It doesn't mean that there is no choice when the student doesn't want to choose them)

Though in most cases there are choices waiting for us, there are restrictions too. We can't make every choice you want(according to our free will) in most times. The law is a representative restriction that prevents us from harmful(illegal) deeds. If I want to earn money, robbing bank is a fast and easy way, but the law forces me to forget this method. The moral(morallity) is another restriction encouraging me to do the right thing. If I am a rich man, I can choose between living in luxury and donating most of my money to society. Directed by moral(morallity), I may choose the second way.


However, there are still some circumstances that we (do)have no choice at all. Since the human can't do anything, (can't do anything? 你是不是想说can't do everything?)there are still some things are out of people's hand. Take disease for example, no one can choose when to have disease and what kind of disease to have. The taste of people is another thing which can't be chose. A person may love to eat arid food, but there is no reason for why he loves it. (呵呵,因为我是读医的我很喜欢你这个例子,但是可以说得多一点的.这一段好少啊呵呵...:lol)


In sum, in most cases when you thought you have no choice, the fact is that you don’t want to make other choices. Whether you recognize or not, there is numerous choices waiting for you both in job and in your everyday life.(So?再说一次你的观点嘛.)



和刚才改的一个有一点一样的,就是说确实有些情况是没得选择的那一段,放在第二或是第三,然后用转折的语气往下说会比较强调你是赞同题目观点 的.

bellaUID: 2113519

咦,发现我觉得你写得短的那一段,呵呵,确实不需要写得多了呵呵....

改着改着自己都晕了.

evilghostUID: 167867

先说反对观点, 再转折提出自己观点, 我曾经看过别人介绍,说是中式逻辑

据说美国人习惯先提出自己观点,  最后再转折说一点反对的意见

我把发qq上,在qq上讨论一下吧

kainwilliamUID: 2135234

Today, in most times（time？）, we have to make choices. No matter what we want to do, no matter what job we have, there are always some choices, whether（去掉whether比较好） critical or not, waiting for us. So I can say that the absence of choice, maybe do exist, is no doubt a quite rare circumstance.  

We make various choices in our everyday lives（作生活讲：life好像是不可数名词）. In modern society, the living standard is much higher than ever before, and we can choose the favorite life style. Every morning, we can choose when to wake up. After waking up, we should choose what to eat for breakfast. When we get everything ready, we must choose how to get （to）our company, by bus, by taxi or by car. （看你的TS,we make choices in our...,但是这里讲的都是choices for us,我查过merriam-webster,choice的一种意思是action of choosing,对应你的TS中的choice,而后面讲的choice 是对应字典里面第二种解释：things to choose,所以感觉上对照不是很好）Maybe we do all those things following our habits, but the choice do exist no matter we recognize or not. Moreover, since the inventing（invention） of Internet, tax and phone, the communicating（communication） became more and more easy and we can get a lot of information quickly and conveniently. But too much information also causes problem called the information explosion, and that means we have to choose useful information from the sea of various information. In one word, choice exists （choices exist,没有关祠的可数名词）in every aspect of our lives.

Sometimes we feel that there is only one choice available, but the fact is that the other choices have no appealing and we don't want to choose them at all. For example, an undergraduate student said he has no choice but to accept a job not very suitable. It is entirely possible that the salary of other jobs is too low and he doesn't consider them at al（salary low 也是not very suitable啊）l. The student don't want to choose them don't mean there are no choice for him.

Though in most cases there are choices waiting for us, there are restrictions too. We can't make every choice you want in most times. The law is a representative restriction that prevents us from harmful deeds. If I want to earn money, robbing bank is a fast and easy way, but the law forces me to forget this method（这里你用了if I, 那就需要注意，也就是说你认为自己抢银行是挣钱的好方法，仅仅是法律不允许，那么考官会不会consider your moral problem 呢？）. The moral is another restriction encouraging me to do the right thing. If I am a rich man, I can choose between living in luxury and donating most of my money to society. Directed by moral, I may choose the second way.

However, there are still some circumstances that we have no choice at all. Since the human can't do anything（everything？）, there are still some things are out of people's hand. Take disease for example, no one can choose when to have disease and what kind of disease to have. The taste of people is another thing which can't be chosen. A person may love to eat arid food, but there is no reason for why he loves it（这个和choice有什么必然联系吗？love to eat,不正好就是一种choice 吗？）.      
In sum, in most cases when you thought you have no choice, the fact is that you don’t want to make other choices. Whether you recognize or not, there is numerous choices waiting for you both in job and in your everyday life.

抱着狠拍的决心进来的:D，指出了不少地方，有些还想了解决办法的，但是想想我指出的未必正确啊，而且如果需要改进，也还是有个人特色的好。 反正拍错了的，你就提出来哈，我一定改正！:)

P.S： 那个关于观点逻辑的问题真的有老外是那样说吗？ 急请教！ 我在QQ上面都是一己看法，这文章毕竟是给老外看的啊……如果你找到根据，无论如何指点我好么？

kainwilliamUID: 2135234

Today, in most times（time？）, we have to make choices. No matter what we want to do, no matter what job we have, there are always some choices, whether（去掉whether比较好） critical or not, waiting for us. So I can say that the absence of choice, maybe do exist, is no doubt a quite rare circumstance.  

We make various choices in our everyday lives（作生活讲：life好像是不可数名词）. In modern society, the living standard is much higher than ever before, and we can choose the favorite life style. Every morning, we can choose when to wake up. After waking up, we should choose what to eat for breakfast. When we get everything ready, we must choose how to get （to）our company, by bus, by taxi or by car. （看你的TS,we make choices in our...,但是这里讲的都是choices for us,我查过merriam-webster,choice的一种意思是action of choosing,对应你的TS中的choice,而后面讲的choice 是对应字典里面第二种解释：things to choose,所以感觉上对照不是很好）Maybe we do all those things following our habits, but the choice do exist no matter we recognize or not. Moreover, since the inventing（invention） of Internet, tax and phone, the communicating（communication） became more and more easy and we can get a lot of information quickly and conveniently. But too much information also causes problem called the information explosion, and that means we have to choose useful information from the sea of various information. In one word, choice exists （choices exist,没有关祠的可数名词）in every aspect of our lives.

Sometimes we feel that there is only one choice available, but the fact is that the other choices have no appealing and we don't want to choose them at all. For example, an undergraduate student said he has no choice but to accept a job not very suitable. It is entirely possible that the salary of other jobs is too low and he doesn't consider them at al（salary low 也是not very suitable啊）l. The student don't want to choose them don't mean there are no choice for him.

Though in most cases there are choices waiting for us, there are restrictions too. We can't make every choice you want in most times. The law is a representative restriction that prevents us from harmful deeds. If I want to earn money, robbing bank is a fast and easy way, but the law forces me to forget this method（这里你用了if I, 那就需要注意，也就是说你认为自己抢银行是挣钱的好方法，仅仅是法律不允许，那么考官会不会consider your moral problem 呢？）. The moral is another restriction encouraging me to do the right thing. If I am a rich man, I can choose between living in luxury and donating most of my money to society. Directed by moral, I may choose the second way.

However, there are still some circumstances that we have no choice at all. Since the human can't do anything（everything？）, there are still some things are out of people's hand. Take disease for example, no one can choose when to have disease and what kind of disease to have. The taste of people is another thing which can't be chosen. A person may love to eat arid food, but there is no reason for why he loves it（这个和choice有什么必然联系吗？love to eat,不正好就是一种choice 吗？）.      
In sum, in most cases when you thought you have no choice, the fact is that you don’t want to make other choices. Whether you recognize or not, there is numerous choices waiting for you both in job and in your everyday life.

抱着狠拍的决心进来的:D，指出了不少地方，有些还想了解决办法的，但是想想我指出的未必正确啊，而且如果需要改进，也还是有个人特色的好。 反正拍错了的，你就提出来哈，我一定改正！:)

P.S： 那个关于观点逻辑的问题真的有老外是那样说吗？ 急请教！ 我在QQ上面都是一己看法，这文章毕竟是给老外看的啊……如果你找到根据，无论如何指点我好么？

evilghostUID: 167867

呵呵,收获不小,多谢:cool::cool:


逻辑的那个问题, 我也是像你一样, 听某个老师说得, 没有真正请教过老外.

[ 本帖最后由 evilghost 于 2006-3-13 09:02 编辑 ]

kainwilliamUID: 2135234

好的：），咱们只有再拿范文研究研究了