Issue11 [Flamy July]作文互改第一次作业

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Issue 11
Syllabus
Disagree
1.        随着全球化的发展，越来越多的社会问题具有国际性，需要各个国家联合解决
2.        世界上最顽固头疼的问题往往是地区问题，不具有国际性，需要地区有关的国家解决
a)        人口问题
b)        恐怖主义
c)        贫困问题
3.        现有的大学已经比较国际化，研究力量不一定比全球性大学弱
a)        许多大学都有国际问题研究
b)        培养解决国际问题不一定需要全球性的大学，需要全球性的合作

TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."

The notion asserts that a global university should be set up in order to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. Although I concede that a global university may contribute to the solution of certain global problems, I can not agree with the assertion.

In this era of rapid social and technological progress increasing life complexity and globalization, many international problems have been formed. For instance, terrorism has become an urgent threat to all nations in the world so that all countries should unite to study on how to solve the problem. In that way, a global university in which anti-terrorism can be studied is a best choice in that every country can contribute to it.

However, the notion overestimates the effect of the global university. There are mainly two aspects from which I disagree with the assertion. On the first hand, a global university can not guarantee to solve the world's most persistent social problems because of the property of certain problem. It should be admitted that many threatening problems in contemporary world are regional, which involve with only a small group of countries. For example, poverty has become a vital problem only in certain region, such as most countries in Africa, or some countries belonging to what so-called the third world. People should consider how to increase the development of these countries and there can not be seen the need to set up a particular university by every country in the world while that only countries in relation participated in is enough. Another example involves with the population problem. As we all know, the population in today’s world are so large that the earth can not afford. However, a large part of population concentrates in some countries, such as India, China and so forth while in some country of north Europe the population is very small. So that it is unnecessary to set up such university in the assertion.

        On the second hand, universities already existing which take excellent study programs on social problems in today’s world are enough to engage students from all over the world in the process of solving problems. One example is that in Harvard University many studies on social problems are in good effect and already achieve much in solving some parts of these problems. What’s more, which is most effective is the cooperation among countries in the world other than studies in university which is more global. For example, governments should cooperate in anti-terrorist activities both in defending and striking. More, they should share experience in solving public health crisis and economical crisis.

In sum, only a global university can not help much in solving the most persistent social problems because many problems are regional and it is unnecessary to enroll every country in. However, in order to solve problems more effectively, every nation should cooperate in many more realms besides education or study, and share both duty and success with others.

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The notion asserts that a global university should be set up in order to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. Although I concede that a global university may contribute to the solution of certain global problems, I can not agree with the assertion. 开头有些单薄，可以简述一下不统一的要点。

In this era of rapid social and technological progress increasing life complexity and globalization（有点怪）, many international problems have been formed. （generated)For instance, terrorism has become an urgent threat to all nations in the world so that all countries should unite to study on how to solve the problem. In that way, a global university in which anti-terrorism can be studied is a best choice in that every country can contribute to it.并没有指出世界性的大学是怎样帮助解决恐怖问题


However, the notion overestimates the effect of the global university. There are mainly two aspects from which I disagree with the assertion. On the first hand, a global university can not guarantee to solve the world's most persistent social problems because of the property of certain problem. It should be admitted that many threatening problems in contemporary world are regional, which involve with only a small group of countries. For example, poverty has become a vital problem only in certain region, such as most countries in Africa, or some countries belonging to what so-called the third world. People should consider how to increase the development of these countries and there can not be seen the need to set up a particular university by every country in the world while that only countries in relation participated in is enough. Another example involves with the population problem. As we all know, the population in today’s world are so large that the earth can not afford. However, a large part of population concentrates in some countries, such as India, China and so forth while in some country of north Europe the population is very small. So that it is unnecessary to set up such university in the assertion.
论点不错，但应该注意论证的角度，应该强调的是世界性的大学并不能解决所有的当前社会问题。在说贫困问题的时候，要注意一下，贫困问题是每个国家都面临的。

        On the second hand, universities already existing which take excellent study programs on social problems in today’s world are enough to engage students from all over the world in the process of solving problems. One example is that in Harvard University many studies on social problems are in good effect and already achieve much in solving some parts of these problems. What’s more, which is most effective is the cooperation among countries in the world other than studies in university which is more global. For example, governments should cooperate in anti-terrorist activities both in defending and striking. More, they should share experience in solving public health crisis and economical crisis.
这一段有两个论点：一是现有的大学能够完成世界性大学的功能，不一定要建一个新的。个人认为这个论点很不错，可以在展开一下，自成一段。二是，解决社会问题不仅要学术合作还要其他方面的合作。这点应该自成一段展开写。

In sum, only a global university can not help much in solving the most persistent social problems because many problems are regional and it is unnecessary to enroll every country in. However, in order to solve problems more effectively, every nation should cooperate in many more realms besides education or study, and share both duty and success with others.


字数少了点。队长大人的想法挺多，但个人觉得取个三四个，一个让步支持，剩下的从不方面削弱论点，逐个展开写。感觉写法是自成一派阿，呵呵~~

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