issue36 Ares站队作文第四次作业

普洱茶UID: 2220388

When it comes the greatness of individuals , those people who jump into our mind immediately and familiar to us usually are heroes in the ancient war or leaders in the big revolution of society, and that most of them live in the different temporary from us. However, is the individuals’ greatness we admired only decided by the people who live after them like us? Actually, there are so many greatness of individuals are admitted and respected by the contemporaries, the situation is same especially in our time.
The main reason of the behaviors of individuals can’t be decided by the contemporaries but the after generation is the people who live in the same period can’t understand or don’t believe the meaning of those individuals’ behaviors, so that it is difficult to them to realize the greatness of individuals. There are tow illustrations supposing my statement.
Firstly, some individuals’ value views and worldviews usually surpass their contemporaries. Value view and worldview guide the judgment people give to everyday items and the way people see the world, they decide people’s style of solution of problem and the idea about the world., and naturally influent the behavior of people in their daily life. So people owe the different value views and worldviews hardly understand each other, let alone the individuals whose both views surpass their contemporaries. Thus, the greatness of individuals is nothing to their contemporaries since they can’t realize the value of those greatnesses.
Secondly, what some individuals do is span of age and space. The result of their assumption and prediction will turn out in a quite long time or after the transport of society.There is a good example of Rechel Carson, the famous ecologist. She was the first one who found the dangerous of using DDT—a kind of pesticide which kill the insects efficiently at the same time kill other species. According this founding , she wrote a book of Silence Spring. But at that time, there were so many contemporaries thought Rechel’s study and discover were useless and even opposite her idea, especially those. chemical industry. It is after she died people started to see the destruction of DDT, scientist even found the component of DDT in the South Pole，and it is the after generation who decided the greatness of Rechel Carson. Furthermore, according this example also told us that great individuals’ contemporaries usually judge the behavior of great individuals by their misunderstanding. Their knowledge and their realization of the world are limited, most of them only can’t see as far and as deep as those individuals, sometimes they just emphasize the economic profit or just want to show others his or her word are powerful and decidable no matter the words is correct. That is a main reason why their contemporaries can’t decide greatness of individuals.
However, the situations are not always same. There are also so many greatness of individuals are decided by their contemporaries. From ancient time to now, Shakespeare, Beethoven, Marie Sklodowsk Curie, Martin Luther King, Bill Gates and . Those big fingers are all decided by their contemporaries. Firstly , it is because they solve the most present social problems. Like Martin Luther King help contemporary black people stand up by themselves. Secondly, another reason is that the individual bring the social and economic profit in front of their contemporaries’ eyes. Like Bill Gates, his career make the huge economic profit and the money he donate to several charity and social organizations create the social profit.
In sum, whether the greatness is decided is depends on the acceptation of people in society.. If the individuals satisfy the right people in the right time, then they will be the heroes of their time, if not , not matter either the people or the time is appropriate, if only the behavior of the individuals can’t do both of them , they will become the individuals whose greatness only decided by their after generations.

garyknightUID: 2227971

When it comes (to) the greatness of individuals, those people who jump into our mind immediately and familiar to us usually are heroes in the ancient war or leaders in the big revolution of society, and that most of them live in the different temporary from us. However, is the individuals’ greatness we admired only decided by the people who live after them like us? Actually, there are so many greatness of individuals are admitted and respected by the contemporaries, the situation is same especially in our time. （开头写得很不错！利用设问表达自己的观点很巧妙！）
The main reason of the behaviors of individuals can’t be decided by the contemporaries but the after generation is the people who live in the same period can’t understand or don’t believe the meaning of those individuals’ behaviors, so that it is difficult to them to realize the greatness of individuals. There are tow (two)  illustrations supposing my statement.（总起第一个论点，但是感觉和第一段有一些脱节，如果能在段落之间增加一些连接词会更舒服！）
Firstly, some individuals’ value views and worldviews usually surpass their contemporaries. Value view and worldview guide the judgment people give to everyday items and the way people see the world, they decide people’s style of solution of problem and the idea about the world, and naturally influent (influence) the behavior of people in their daily life. So people owe (who own) the different value views and worldviews hardly understand each other, let alone the individuals whose both views surpass their contemporaries. Thus, the greatness of individuals is nothing to their contemporaries since they can’t realize the value of those greatnesses.
Secondly, what some individuals do is span of age and space. The result of their assumption and prediction will turn out in a quite long time or after the transport (transform) of society. There is a good example of Rechel Carson, the famous ecologist. She was the first one who found the dangerous of using DDT—a kind of pesticide which kill the insects efficiently at the same time kill other species. According (to) this founding (finding), she wrote a book of (entitled) Silence Spring. But at that time, there were so many contemporaries thought Rechel’s study and discover were useless and even opposite (opposed) her idea, especially those  chemical industry. It is after she died people started to see the destruction of DDT, scientist even found the component of DDT in the South Pole，and it is the after generation who decided the greatness of Rechel Carson. Furthermore, according (to) this example (it) also told us that great individuals’ contemporaries usually judge the behavior of great individuals by their misunderstanding. Their knowledge and their realization of the world are limited, most of them only can’t see as far and as deep as those individuals, sometimes they just emphasize the economic profit or just want to show others his or her word are powerful and decidable no matter the words is correct. That is a main reason why their contemporaries can’t decide greatness of individuals. （两个论据论证充分，同时层次很清晰！）
However, the situations are not always same. There are also so many greatness of (great) individuals (who) are decided by their contemporaries. From ancient time to now, Shakespeare, Beethoven, Marie Sklodowsk Curie, Martin Luther King, Bill Gates and so on. Those big fingers (figures) are all decided by their contemporaries. (很多人名的叠加很有气势！)  Firstly, it is because they solve the most present social problems. Like Martin Luther King help contemporary black people stand up by themselves. Secondly, another reason is that the individual bring the social and economic profit in front of their contemporaries’ eyes. Like Bill Gates, his (whose) career make the huge economic profit and the money he donate to several charity and social organizations create the social profit.
In sum, whether the greatness is decided is depends on the acceptation of people in society. If the individuals satisfy the right people in the right time, then they will be the heroes of their time, if not , not matter either the people or the time is appropriate, if only the behavior of the individuals can’t do both of them , they will become the individuals whose greatness only decided by their after generations.（结尾的说法转换的比较巧妙！）

总的说来，这篇issue构思和论证都比较清楚，层次也很鲜明。美中不足在于作者的观点比重不足，大部分都在对题目的说法进行论证，如果能增加倒数第二段的篇幅，同时适当缩减第一段的篇幅，会有更好的成效。另外，还存在一些小小的笔误（我都在后面用括号标注出来了），希望能仔细一点：）