ARGUMENT33 [Smile-A] 第三次作业，求拍！

monica98UID: 2124796

TOPIC: ARGUMENT33 - The following report appeared in an archaeology journal.

"The discovery of distinctively shaped ceramic pots at various prehistoric sites scattered over a wide area has led archaeologists to ask how the pots were spread. Some believe the pot makers migrated to the various sites and carried the pots along with them; others believe the pots were spread by trade and their makers remained in one place. Now, analysis of the bones of prehistoric human skeletons can settle the debate: high levels of a certain metallic element contained in various foods are strongly associated with people who migrated to a new place after childhood. Many of the bones found near the pots at a few sites showed high levels of the metallic element. Therefore, it must be that the pots were spread by migration, not trade."

难写啊^_^，一个小时才搞完，求拍必回拍

The arguer concludes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots were brought by immigration instead of trade. To support this claim, the arguer cites the association between the metallic element of food and immigration and reasons that the high levels of the metallic element in bones found near the pots is the indicator of the pots makers as immigration. Careful examination of this report, however, reveals that none of these lend credible support to this conclusion.

First, the arguer unfairly assumes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots at various sites were produced by the makers living in one place. No credible evidence to support this assumption, it is equally possible that the techniques of making the distinctively shapes ceramic pots might be very special but popular in that times, these ceramic pots makers in various places could create them in their home place. Without ruling out other possible reasons for the discovery of such pots in scattered sites, the arguer cannot draw any firm conclusion.

Second, the arguer falsely equates the high levels of a certain metallic element in food with that in bones, thus the association between the immigration and high levels of the metallic element in bones is unwarranted. Lacking such evidence to support that correlation, it is entirely possible that the high levels of the metallic element in bones was caused by other reasons, such as drinking water in same river containing the metallic element or professional characters of general ceramic pots makers. Any of these cases, if true, would serve to undermine the conclusion.

Third, even if the bones found near the pots belong to the immigration, the report is based on a groundless assumption that the immigration is necessarily the ceramic pots maker. Perhaps, the bones just from the average people immigrating from certain irrelevant region. No solid information concerning the specific identity of this immigration is provided in this report, the arguer fails to convince us that the bones containing high levels of the metallic element is that of the ceramic pots maker.

In sum, the report is logically unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should take into other possibility of the existence of such pots in various sites. And better evidence should be provided to establish the correlation between the metallic element in food and that in bones. The professional information of the bones found near the pots should be further investigated.

EmmanuelleUID: 2231740

The arguer concludes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots were brought by immigration instead of trade. To support this claim, the arguer cites the association between the metallic element of food and immigration and reasons that the high levels of the metallic element in bones found near the pots is the indicator of the pots makers as immigration. Careful examination of this report, however, reveals that none of these lend(该词为何意？) credible support to this conclusion.

First, the arguer unfairly assumes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots at various sites were produced by the makers living in one place. No credible evidence to support this assumption, it is equally possible that the techniques of making the distinctively shapes ceramic pots might be very special but popular in that times, these ceramic pots makers in various places could create them in their home place. Without ruling out other possible reasons for the discovery of such pots in scattered sites, the arguer cannot draw any firm conclusion.

Second, the arguer falsely equates（这个词不太确切） the high levels of a certain metallic element in food with that in bones, thus the association between the immigration and high levels of the metallic element in bones is unwarranted. Lacking such evidence to support that correlation, it is entirely possible that the high levels of the metallic element in bones was caused by other reasons, such as drinking water in same river containing the metallic element or professional characters of general ceramic pots makers. Any of these cases, if true, would serve to undermine the conclusion.

Third, even if the bones found near the pots belong to the immigration, the report is based on a groundless assumption that the immigration is necessarily the ceramic pots maker. Perhaps, the bones just from the average people immigrating from certain irrelevant region. No solid information concerning the specific identity of this immigration is provided in this report, the arguer fails to convince us that the bones containing high levels of the metallic element is that of the ceramic pots maker.

In sum, the report is logically unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should take into other possibility of the existence of such pots in various sites. And better evidence should be provided to establish the correlation between the metallic element in food and that in bones. The professional information of the bones found near the pots should be further investigated.

说实话，我觉得这次题目挺绕的，自己也写了好长时间，写不清楚。
总体来说，问题点找对了，语言上也还好。就是感觉每一点都不深入，可能是每个错误都很小（我就这么觉得）。个人观点，仅供参考。我自己写得还不如你呢。:L

xinxinwUID: 2144273

The arguer concludes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots were brought by immigration instead of trade. To support this claim, the arguer cites the association between the metallic element of food and immigration and reasons that the high levels of the metallic element in bones found near the pots is the indicator of the pots makers不是maker as immigration. Careful examination of this report, however, reveals that none of these lend credible support to this conclusion.

First, the arguer unfairly assumes that the distinctively shapes ceramic pots at various sites were produced by the makers living in one place. No credible evidence to support this assumption, it is equally possible that the techniques of making the distinctively shapes ceramic pots might be very special but popular in that times, these ceramic pots makers in various places could create them in their home place. Without ruling out other possible reasons for the discovery of such pots in scattered sites, the arguer cannot draw any firm conclusion.重点是在spread,所以所有的攻击最后都要落在spread上，这段最后再加一句话就好了

Second, the arguer falsely equates the high levels of a certain metallic element in food with that in bones, thus the association between the immigration and high levels of the metallic element in bones is unwarranted. Lacking such evidence to support that correlation, it is entirely possible that the high levels of the metallic element in bones was caused by other reasons, such as drinking water in same river containing the metallic element or professional characters of general ceramic pots makers. Any of these cases, if true, would serve to undermine the conclusion.作者的原论据是food，最好在文中明确提到。

Third, even if the bones found near the pots belong to the immigration, the report is based on a groundless assumption that the immigration is necessarily the ceramic pots maker. Perhaps, the bones just from the average people immigrating from certain irrelevant region. No solid information concerning the specific identity of this immigration is provided in this report, the arguer fails to convince us that the bones containing high levels of the metallic element is that of the ceramic pots maker.

In sum, the report is logically unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should take into other possibility of the existence of such pots in various sites. And better evidence should be provided to establish the correlation between the metallic element in food and that in bones. The professional information of the bones found near the pots should be further investigated.

攻击点差了一点点，总是打擦边球。应该认真分析作者举证的目的