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TOPIC: ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
WORDS: 596          TIME: 0:44:21          DATE: 2006-8-16
提纲:
大多数人都同意一个社会的建筑物代表了它有价值的历史纪录，但是当现代规划者们觉得这些以前的建筑物所占据的土地可以被更有价值的使用于新目的时，就产生了争议，现代发展应该比保留历史建筑物更受重视以便于满足眼下的需求。
题目分析：
题意不难理解，没有难词，应该很难理解．属于建议对策类问题，所以准备从三个方面入手：
１．        改建议是否可行：不可行．历史遗留建筑物可以提供人们研究历史的资料，提供人们个人的定位――――总之联系研究历史的作用就可以．
２．        若实施该方案，是否会有新问题产生：有，将一些旧建筑拆除花费很大，同时失去收入来源，破坏原有的布局等等．
３．        有无替代或折中方案：有，完全可以并行发展，旧的保留，新的扩建．


Throughout history, people are always emphasizing the importance of preserving historical relics and obviously valuable buildings included. These old buildings are precious enough to be maintained and no other modern development could replace them on the long run.

As we know, the primary goal of investigating into history is to find a proper position of us in history and also to provide us with certain personal and national identities. These identities are mainly gained through study their building style of respective cultures. More importantly, these old buildings might be the best materials to study since other relics are easy to fade away and difficult to excavate. Our precedents' constructional techniques are preeminent enough to let these buildings stand for years and later people can still live in them, therefore, these buildings are preserved well and kept till today, which offer us invaluable measures. By studying great walls in China, for example, Chinese people become familiar with wars and battles in ancient China and consequently understand their relationships with their neighbours. The great wall still stands there today, to give a trust in their strength to Chinese people and encourage them to move forward and conquer difficulties they face. This goes to show how historical relics, especially old buildings provide personal identities as well as national spirit. It has become an indispensable part of people's life.

Therefore, people nowadays make great efforts to protect the Great Wall from natural and human destroy, and this action should be encouraged and continued regardless of modern development. And so are other old buildings. It is clear that people are unable to fill all the land on earth with construction works in a long time, then, it might be unwise to replace those old ones with newly built buildings. Modern development can be done in other places and still create something new and great. Actually, many cities and counties are doing their work in the right way, as they expand their city and county boundaries and build new buildings outside the center. These newly built factories, schools; supermarkets as well as living department do not only trigger the economy in the skirts and also keep themselves away from destroying old buildings in the inner space. These old buildings can still attract people from all places and give them pleasure and leave us money and historical pride.

Moreover, it is harmful and expensive to destroy the old buildings, as is reported by some constructional firms and governments. Since historical relics are built with old techniques and some parts of them are much more difficult to transport to other places or destroyed. When experts are wondering how those huge boulders are moved together to form the pyramids, workers are worrying about how to remove them. Of course it is a hard work and cost much. Instead of wasting money on demolishing these precious relics, why don't spend these money on preserving them and make the best use of these old buildings?

It is true that as our society are developing fast; new things will conflict with old ones. Not in all cases should we replace the old with the new. After careful consideration, it would be wiser to protect the historical buildings rather than destroy them. When barren lands are not enough to do new development, people then can come back to this issue again and work out a better plan than simply replacement. In the contemporary society when lands are far from rare, we have to keep on protecting historical relics, not only for ourselves but for our children and their futures.

[ 本帖最后由 pewcg8 于 2006-8-16 17:13 编辑 ]

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下午吧，先去睡个觉，呵呵．

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主要修改内容:
1.用错的词汇,或者用的不恰当的.
2.语法错误两处.
3.笔误两处.
4.罗嗦的地方.
5.说的过于绝对的地方.
6.整体结构没有变化,觉得原文写的结构和思路还是清晰的.

Throughout history, people are always emphasizing the importance／significance改用高级词汇比较好 of preserving historical relics and obviously valuable buildings included. These old buildings are precious enough to be maintained and no other modern development could replace them on （用错，＂用长远的观点看＂应该是in the long run）the long run.

As we know, the primary goal (主要目标)of investigating into history is to find a proper position of us in history and also to （并列部分，可以去掉不用）provide us with certain personal and national identities. These identities are mainly gained through study their building style of respective cultures.（本句说的有点牵强，改为：One way to get these identities is the study of historical buildings.） More importantly, these old buildings might be the best materials to study since other relics are easy to fade away and difficult to excavate.(这个并列用的好！) Our precedents' constructional techniques are preeminent enough to let these buildings stand for years and later people can still live in them, therefore, these buildings are preserved well and kept till today, which offer us invaluable measures.（笔误：treasures） By studying great walls in China, for example, Chinese people become familiar with wars and battles in ancient China and consequently understand their relationships with their neighbours. The great wall still stands there today, to give a trust in their strength to Chinese people and encourage them to move forward and conquer difficulties they face. This goes to show how historical relics, especially old buildings provide personal identities as well as national spirit. It has become an indispensable part of people's life.

Therefore, people nowadays make great efforts to protect the Great Wall from natural and human destroy, and this action should be encouraged and continued regardless of modern development.(转折到了modern development上面，因此微调提纲的顺序，为的是更好的衔接) And so are other old buildings. It is clear that people are unable to fill all the land on earth with construction works in a long time, then, it might be unwise to replace those old ones with newly built buildings. Modern development can be done in other places and still create something new and great. Actually, many cities and counties are doing their work in the right way, as they expand their city and county boundaries／borders and build new buildings outside the center. These newly built factories, schools, supermarkets as well as living department(生造词汇，改为apartment buildings／apartment house) do not only trigger the economy in the skirts(笔误，改为outskirts) and also keep themselves away from destroying old buildings in the inner space. These old buildings can still attract people from all places and give them pleasure and leave us money and historical pride.

Moreover, it is harmful and expensive to destroy the old buildings, as is reported by some constructional firms and governments. Since historical relics are built with old techniques and some parts of them are much more difficult to transport to other places or to be destroyed. When experts are wondering how those huge boulders are (时态，改为were)moved together to form the pyramids, workers are worrying about how to remove them. Of course it is a hard work and cost much. Instead of wasting money on demolishing these precious relics, why don't we spend the money on preserving them and make the best use of these old buildings?

It is true that as our society are developing fast; new things will conflict with old ones. Not in all cases should we replace the old with the new. After careful consideration, it would be wiser to protect the historical buildings rather than destroy them. When barren lands are not enough to do new development, people then can come back to this issue again and work out a better plan than simple replacement. In the contemporary society when lands are far from rare, we have to keep on protecting historical relics, not only for ourselves but for our children and their futures.

[ 本帖最后由 pewcg8 于 2006-8-16 17:48 编辑 ]

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留链吧.

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hoho
怎么跟 argu似的
思维倒挺全
可没提与现代需要的冲突阿

我可能认识肤浅了

pewcg8UID: 2143213

恩,这个冲突我没有说明白,但是这个replace和conflict大概就是你说的冲突吧??
PS:哪里像A,具体说说.