ISSUE26 [spining sep] 高频！

veinardUID: 2195006

ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
WORDS: 542                 

With the development of human society and economy, the conflict between the old architectures and modern buildings has attracted attention and controversy of more and more people. As the historic buildings and contemporary architectures serve different functions for people, the better solution of the controversy, as I see it, is to construct a balance between the preservation of old buildings and the development of modern world.

To begin with, not a sensible person will deny the significance of the historic architectures at least for their historic value. As the witness of historic events, the old architectures serve the records of human history and help us to maintain our culture and civilization in a long run. Not only does Notre Dame Cathedral of Paris reflect the glorious time of Renaissance, but it also shows the wisdom of French. The Red Square in Moscow is another example, its special function in the World War Two as the place of parade under the severe threat of Nazi, strongly proves the great courage and unyielding spirit of Russia. The analogous examples are countless, and from them, we can discover that giving the inferior statues of these invaluable architectures under the modern development, if any, equals to gainsay the remarkable history and outstanding attributes of human.

Still, in today's era of high production and efficiency leading to increasing pragmatism, historic architectures also have their modern values. First, some distinguished architectures such as Great Wall and Pyramids -- the pride and wealth of human being, have become the symbols of the countries in which they locate. Second, most of the famous old buildings can be used as tour recourses, and consequently, significantly contribute to the economy development. Every year, hundreds of thousands of tourists come to visit the historic architectures in Rome, Athens, London, and Beijing and so forth, create considerable profit to the relevant countries. In this case, the important old buildings still have vigor nowadays after the trial through long history. Therefore, seem from this aspect, besides the great historic and aesthetic value of those outstanding old architectures, the culture and economic significance of them is also considerable.

Yet, since of the primary task of contemporaries is promoting technology and economy to develop our life standards, balance the preservation of old buildings and current needs is the prior problem people should solve. On the one hand, pursuing modern development does not mean that it should be given priority over the preservation of historic buildings, after all, our ancestors' architectures reflect human history, and of course, we should not meet the contemporary desires at the cost of history. On the other hand, preserving all old buildings is actually beyond our ability and meanwhile it is not necessary to do so, for the number of old building is enormous and still increasing as the time goes by, furthermore, the important and valuable architectures take a little percentage of all old buildings in fact.

In sum, since human is advancing enduringly, the conflict between the historic buildings and modern needs is inevitable. The most provident way, in my opinion, to balance these two crucial aspects of society is preserving the architectures which have historic, aesthetic or economic values, as well as utilize most land to serve the contemporary needs.

zeelichUID: 2194744

ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
WORDS: 542                 

With the development of human society and economy, the conflict between the old architectures and modern buildings has attracted attention and controversy of more and more people. As the historic buildings and contemporary architectures serve different functions for people, the better solution of the controversy, as I see it, is to construct a balance between the preservation of old buildings and the development of modern world.

To begin with, not a (no)sensible person will deny the significance of the historic architectures at least for their historic value. As the witness of historic events, the old architectures serve (as)the records of human history and help us to maintain our culture and civilization in a long run. Not only does Notre Dame Cathedral of Paris reflect the glorious time of Renaissance, but it also shows the wisdom of French. The Red Square in Moscow is another example, its(whose) special function in the World War Two (serves) as the place of parade under the severe threat of Nazi, strongly proves the great courage and unyielding spirit of Russia. The analogous examples are countless, and from them, we can discover that giving the inferior statues of these invaluable architectures under the modern development, if any, equals to gainsay the remarkable history and outstanding attributes of human.

Still, in today's era of high production and efficiency leading to increasing pragmatism, historic architectures also have their modern values. First, some distinguished architectures such as Great Wall and Pyramids -- the pride and wealth of human being, have become the symbols of the countries in which they locate. Second, most of the famous old buildings can be used as tour recourses, and consequently, significantly contribute to the economy development. Every year, hundreds of thousands of tourists come to visit the historic architectures in Rome, Athens, London, and Beijing and so forth, create considerable profit to the relevant countries. In this case, the important old buildings still have vigor nowadays after the trial through long history. Therefore, seem from this aspect, besides the great historic and aesthetic value of those outstanding old architectures, the culture and economic significance of them is also considerable.

Yet, since of the primary task of contemporaries is promoting technology and economy to develop our life standards, balance the preservation of old buildings and current needs is the prior problem people should solve. On the one hand, pursuing modern development does not mean that it should be given priority over the preservation of historic buildings, after all, our ancestors' architectures reflect human history, and of course, we should not meet the contemporary desires at the cost of history. On the other hand, preserving all old buildings is actually beyond our ability and meanwhile it is not necessary to do so, for the number of old building is enormous and still increasing as the time goes by, furthermore, the important and valuable architectures take a little percentage of all old buildings in fact.

In sum, since human is advancing enduringly, the conflict between the historic buildings and modern needs is inevitable. The most provident way, in my opinion, to balance these two crucial aspects of society is preserving the architectures which have historic, aesthetic or economic values, as well as utilize most land to serve the contemporary needs.

呵呵，逻辑很好,例子也很好.要多多学习了啊

jinzhemingUID: 2224073

开头改的时候突然死机，所以都没有了。不好意思
一个结构上的问题：
观点是平衡，但文章两端都讲第一个观点， 后一段讲第二个观点，是不是有些不平衡？

jinzhemingUID: 2224073

A 我还没来得及该，明天再改。

jinzhemingUID: 2224073

每次写i 我都用了很长时间写，不知到如何提高速度

这篇文章都用中国的例子，我还是很高兴的！！
With the rapid economical and technological development, a variety of modern buildings have mushroomed in metropolis such as Beijing, Shanghai. As they witness modernity of new China, some old buildings strewn under the shadow of new buildings seem to pale in comparison. However, history and reality has shown us that some old ones should be taken place of by the new, while others are always given precedence.

On the one hand, a few ancient and old buildings have irreversible values that people must try their best to prevent these treasures from being destroyed and let their beauty and historical values live and spread forever. The Forbidden City, the world's largest palace complex, once served as the seat of imperial power during the Ming and Qing dynasties. It now has become a famous place of interests. It not only is the protecting project of Chinese government, but also gains a firm position in the hearts of Chinese people as a symbol of grandeur, solemnness, profundity. Another example in case is preservation of The Memorial Hall of the First National Congress Site of the CPC which is located at the city of Shanghai. The buildings of the memorial hall are two rows of nine Shikumen, has collected near 40,000 items of historical relics, of which some are those precious historical relics such as the English typewriters once used by Chinese Revolution precursors Sun Yat-sen and Li Dazhao and the first full text of "the Manifesto of the Communist Party" translated into Chinese. From the two examples above, most people would agree that these old buildings represent a valuable record of Chinese history.


On the other hand, old buildings, like old huts in the history of Shanghai, were not only of no historic values but also a sign of poverty, sordidness and disorder. With the development of economy and the rise of people's living standard, the very places where these huts stood have been replaced by the new row houses, shopping malls, supermarkets, skyscrapers, etc. This new appearance of the city of Shanghai is popular with the ordinary citizens as they would no longer live in the dark, dirty, dilapidated, humid and humble small houses. New life has begun. Through public and private investment, modern planners have been achieving the unprecedented and lasting enterprise of constructing new buildings for modern purposes, the significance of which lie in both the increasing quality of all aspects of people's lives, and precedence of modern needs over the preservation of old buildings of no historic value.

As we are immersed in the debate between preservation of old buildings and construction of modern edifices, there comes a eclectic way between modernity and tradition.  Shanghai seems like a real city, with an interesting past and a vibrant present. In Pudong, we saw the old and the new confronting each other across the river. The old city with its neo-classical British buildings and the new, arrogant towers of Pudong all sang the economic might of the new superpower, China. In addition, if you are asked where The Memorial Hall of the First National Congress Site of the CPC is specifically situated, you would not think of its location in a wonderful place called Xintiandi District where the nice-look buildings, bars, and restaurants were built. Every night, many local people and tourists from all over the world come and enjoy the charming, diverse and unending nightlife. The sharp contrast between the old and the new is so fancy, but Xintiandi reflects the history of the city, where many people lived there for generations.


In sum, we should treasure the gem of our historic buildings, and at the same time, pull down the old and sordid buildings of no historic values. However, it would be optimal to combine modernity and tradition together for their reciprocal lights.

jinzhemingUID: 2224073

In this argument, the arguer concludes that implementing electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their work could improve their productivity. To support his conclusion, the arguer points out that to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, employees who use the Internet need to be identified and punished. In addition, the arguer reasons the benefits of  installing detection software. However, the argument is flawed in three major aspects.

Firstly, the arguer relies on an unproven cause-and-effect relationship between identification and punishment of employees who use the Internet, and reducing the number of work hours spent not for work. Other factors could be responsible for increasing the number of hours for work. It is possible that the access to the Internet is only allowed at lunch in the noon when employees can deal with their personal and recreational activities on the computer. Except this period of time, only local access network can be accessed. If this the case, the employees could only spend their private time at a particular period, effectively reducing the number of hours irrelevant with the work.

Secondly, the arguer assumes that the benefits of installing detection software are obtained without sacrifices. In fact, when employees know that their privacy are not secured, they may show distrust and disloyalty toward the company and passively respond to the company's policy by idling away time or refusing to use Internet to  do the jobs. The employees' reaction  would, on the contrary, delay the time of finishing works and weaken the work ethic, causing great loss of productivity of the  company.

Thirdly, the arguer's conclusion relies on the assumption that no other alternatives would achieve the improvement of productivity. However, the arguer provides no evidence to substantiate this assumption. It is possible that the wage increase or improvement of working environment and facilities contribute to the morale of the employees and the overall profits. It is also possible that the limitation of using internet would impede the gathering of information, and thus, the opportunities of improving the profits.

In sum, the argument is not well reasoned as it stands. To strengthen the recommendation the arguer should make a survey about the advantage and disadvantage of installing detection software and provide a reasonable and effective measure on decreasing the number of hours spent on personal or recreational activities to improve employees' productivity

jinzhemingUID: 2224073

In this recommendation, the vice president for human resources at Climpson Industries claims that the company should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations to improve the employees' productivity. To support this advice, the arguer points out those employees who use the Internet from their workstations to spend their work hours on personal or recreational activities need to be identified and punished, and though//through// detecting the Internet use on company computers they can benefit a lot. Through scrutiny I find the argument suffers from several logical flaws which prevent it from convincing.

First, the vise president unfairly assumes that the through implement electronic monitoring to detect employees' Internet use from their workstations, the work hours spent on personal or recreational activities can be remarkably reduced and thus the work hours can be assured. However, no evidence can prove these two matters have any cause-and-effect relationship. After shopping on line is prohibited, the employees are probably leave the company to do shopping on the supermarkets during the work hours if the company does not have strict system to prevent the absence in the work time.//角度挺好的// In a ward//word//, besides shopping or playing games on line, the employees may have alternative ways to spend the wok hours on personal or recreational activities. Without ruling out this possibility, the arguer cannot convince me that the electronic monitoring can effectively reduce the number of work hours spent on other activities.

Second, even if implementing the electronic monitoring can truly reduce personal and recreational time during work hours, the arguer fails to prove that decreasing other activities which irrelevant to work will necessarily prevent employees from wasting time or fostering a better work ethic at Climpson. It is entirely possible that the skill or efficiency of the employees is not very satisfactory and then causes them still wasting time. Or perhaps the detection may generate a negative effect on the morale of the employees and consequently, result in diminishing the work ethic at Climpson. If so, the arguer cannot infer that by//by 不要吧// instilling the software to detect Internet use can prevent employees from wasting time and improve the work ethic at the company.

Third, even assuming that the software can really avoid wasting time and then foster a better work ethic, the arguer provide no evidence to prove that the final result of installing the software is the improvement on the overall profits. It is very likely that the cost of the software is high and cannot be offset by the increasing profits benefit from the time-saving and the better work ethic. Moreover, whether the costs of the software can be afforded by budgets of the company is also open to doubt. // 软件费用高的角度不错 //

In sum, this argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should provide more evidence to demonstrate that the implement ?? can effectively reduce the personal and recreational time during the work hour. To better assess the argument, I need to know the prospective employees' response of the detecting software and the information of the profit of the company and the cost of the software.

学习你的三层逻辑攻击,一环扣一环。
我的文章有一层是cause-and-effect, 第二层是one-sidedness, 第三层hints from conclusion. 从你的角度看，这样是不是没有三层逻辑攻击那样有力？
请看一下我的文章。那篇issue 也请给点意见。谢谢:)