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94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."

提纲 开头—基本同意

层次一   学习专业课外的选修课的利大于弊
学习选修课可能会耗费学生的时间，但是，通过学习选修课可以激发学生的灵感
论据—爱因斯坦相对论，达芬奇画画
同时还能消除学生的学习压力

层次二    truly education 需要不同领域的知识
理由一，当今社会各学科触类旁通，仅有一技之长无法满足社会需要
论据---数学家不懂计算机怎么办？ 专家在做专题报告的时候，不会presentation

理由二， 拥有各个领域的知识，更能有利于学者们之间的沟通和交流


          Should universities require every student to take a variety of course outside the student’s field of study, as the speaker concedes? In my view, I fundamentally agree with the statement. One –sidedness field knowledge might be too narrow for today’s society. Nevertheless, students should also control the extending of contrary position.
          In the first place, people may say it will take more extra time for the students to have a variety of course outside the student, which would give students more press and strain in the university study life. As the result, students are more likely to fail on the major course. However, my opinion is taking a variety of course might has more advantages than these above seemed disadvantages. Firstly, by taking elective, I concede that it will wake one’s inspiration in his major field, like an effective catalyst. Einstein once said music help him found his relative theory and power his brain to work faster. And, painting gives Vinci equally impetus in finding the concealed truth of other field of knowledge. Secondly, Working at one’s major course all the time will give students tiredness, boring, low-mood, especially when one meet the obstacle, and fail on working out the problem. At this condition, taking an outsides course would not stress on students but mitigate his emotion in some degree or even help them solve the problem. It is known that one will have more probability to reach a solution when he is in high mood.
          Nevertheless, it is essential for students to control the extending. Certainly, students need to firstly have their major programs done, then at the leisure time they can take the courses outsides their field. If not, they will be a dilettante at last, and not have a useful skill in the end.
          In the secondly place, truly educated need students acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines. One reason is that only obtaining a professional skill might not satisfy modern science. For example, can we image that one mathematician who worked as a professor in university can not use a computer in imparting mathematics in the class? Others like an achieved expertise can not successfully in making his presentation in public because of his poor literacy will also be a baffle for his field of career. Another reason here is that it will be convenient for different field of people to make a bridge for communication if they have something know about other field of expertise’s knowledge, thus, it will be more propitious to have cooperation in working out intercourses’ problems. This cooperation is much more important in today’s society.
          In sum, I concede the speaker’s statement. It’s reasonable our university should give students course outside their major field. However, this should just be an assistant method, students is firstly asked to have their major done and then turns to the outsides. After all, in a world in which truly educated is really needed, we should cheer on university’s giving student courses outside their major field.

[ 本帖最后由 ernest81888 于 2006-11-17 12:22 编辑 ]

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Should universities require every student to take a variety of course (复数+s) outside the student’s field of study, as the speaker concedes? In my view, I fundamentally agree with the statement. One –sidedness field knowledge might be too narrow for today’s society. Nevertheless, students should also control the extending (extent) of (+the)contrary position

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In the first place, people may say it will take more extra time for the students to have a variety of course(复数+s) outside the student(+field), which would give students more press and strain in the university study life. As the result, students are more likely to fail on the major course(复数+s). However, my opinion is (+that) taking a variety of course(复数+s) might has more advantages than these above seemed (去掉划线部分)disadvantages. Firstly, by taking elective, I concede that it will wake one’s inspiration in his major field,(不要逗号) like an effective catalyst. Einstein once said(+that) music help(时态+ed) him found(find;因为help sb do sth) his relative theory and power his brain to work faster. And,(不要逗号) painting gives Vinci equally impetus in finding the concealed truth of other field of knowledge. Secondly, Working(小写) at one’s major course all the time will give(单三+s) students tiredness, boring(boredom), low-mood, especially when one meet(单三+s) the obstacle, and fail on working out the problem(+s). At(In) this condition, taking an outsides course would not stress on students but mitigate his emotion(grip) in some degree or even help them solve the problem(由于是them所以用复数+s). It is known that one will have more probability to reach a solution when he is in high mood.

(划蓝色的地方用的不太适合)

                                                                               

Nevertheless, it is essential for students to control the extending (extent). Certainly, students need to firstly have their major programs done, then at the leisure time they can take the courses outsides their field(复数+s). If not, they will be a dilettante at last, and not have a useful skill in the end.(这里论证的不充分，当业余爱好者和没有SKILL这个例子不能让人信服)

                                          

In the secondly place, truly educated need students acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines. One reason is that only obtaining a professional skill (换为obtaining a single professional skill) might not satisfy modern science. For example, can we image that one mathematician who worked as a professor in university can not use a computer in imparting mathematics in the class? (个人觉得For example 后面+问句不太习惯，有点中国式) Others like an achieved expertise can not successfully in making (make) his presentation in public because of his poor literacy will also be a baffle for (to) his field of career. Another reason here (不要here) is that it will be convenient for different field of people (people of different fields) to make a bridge for communication if they have something know about other field of expertise’s  (expert) knowledge, thus, it will be more propitious to have cooperation in working out intercourses’ problems. This cooperation is much more important in today’s society.

                                     

In sum, I concede the speaker’s statement. It’s reasonable our university should give students course(复数+s) outside their major field. However, this should just be an assistant method, students is firstly asked to have their major(+s) done and then turns to the outsides. After all, in a world in which (好像用错了) truly educated is really needed, we should cheer on university’s giving student(+s) courses outside their major field。(个人感觉总结的力度不够啊,总结应该起着呼应主题的作用)

            

总的来说，文章不够流利清晰，摆明观点不够明确，总体结构还算完整

不过有部分例子有些牵强附会，语法小错误很多(本人也是)，看着很不舒服

~~~ANYWAY，加油~~~多练就好了

[ 本帖最后由 ntmlgsz 于 2006-11-18 16:24 编辑 ]

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阿甘改的好认真阿！大家学习他的这种精神。。。