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ostrich1986UID: 2238177

83 "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
政府应该保护那些疆域范围内的偏远地带，保持他们的原始状态，尽管这些地区一般来说非常偏僻，很少有人能够到达。



Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient that protecting is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative measures to protect wilderness areas.

To begin with, it is because nature can provide we humans a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of resources which human being must rely on. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates. Furthermore, the forests can take their functions as maintaining soil and water resources, providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining the forests are one of the essential part of the environment. Besides, the animal is one crucial role in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny. Considering these benefits and importance, government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting wilderness areas.

Besides, it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting. If we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behavior to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise, the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods. The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.

Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine social power. Take medium as an example, which has dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need to protect our environment. Education should also participate in protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting, our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.

To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we human. We must do our bit towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.

hyt0303UID: 2254178

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient (enough) that protecting (this kind of protection) is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative measures to protect wilderness areas.

To begin with, it is because nature can provide we humans a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-(用逗号吧，省略号反倒少见）which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of (various这个和前面的和在一起更顺口吧) resources which human being must rely on. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates （air）. Furthermore, the forests can take their functions (also function 这里用了一个词组function as) as maintaining soil and water resources, (while) providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining (all of which determine) the forests are one of the essential part of the environment(ecological circle). Besides, the animal is (acts) one crucial role (as well) in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes （will make) a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny(这里最好多举几个例子，一个太少了）. Considering these benefits and importance, government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting wilderness areas.

Besides, it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting.(这句的句型和上段的TS重复了。since the unique authority government held, it should make efforts on its protection.) we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behaviorso (so as) to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise (moreover) the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods.(这个例子感觉不是很现实，国外是否有这样的实例？或者最好换一个，或加一个例子）The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.
Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine （the useful) social power. Take medium as an example, which has(having/owning) dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge(knowledge) and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need (realize the urgency of protecting) protect our environment. Education should also participate in(the action of) protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for(of) our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting(protection) our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.

To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we(us) human. We must do our bit towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.


整篇结构不错，有一种层层推进的感觉：）逻辑上也比较流畅，
只是语言上要注意一些词的指向，。如，protecting，保护的是什么，文中有几处你提到了却没有指明。这个比较容易成为漏洞。

christainUID: 2200210

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient (enough) that protecting (this kind of protection) is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative measures to protect wilderness areas.

To begin with, it is because nature can provide we(us) humans a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. (这句用强调句型不通顺)For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-(用逗号吧，省略号反倒少见）which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of (various这个和前面的和在一起更顺口吧) resources which human being must rely on. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates （air）. Furthermore, the forests can take their functions (also function 这里用了一个词组function as) as maintaining soil and water resources, (while) providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining (all of which determine) the forests are one of the essential part of the environment(ecological circle). Besides, the animal is (acts) one crucial role (as well) in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes （will make) a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny(这里最好多举几个例子，一个太少了）. Considering these benefits and importance, government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting wilderness areas.

Besides, it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting.(这句的句型和上段的TS重复了。since the unique authority government held, it should make efforts on its protection.) 改的好啊，佩服we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws 好词that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behaviorso (so as)可以不加的 to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise (moreover) the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods.(这个例子感觉不是很现实，国外是否有这样的实例？或者最好换一个，或加一个例子）The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.
Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine （the useful) social power. Take medium as an example, which has(having/owning) dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge(knowledge) and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need (realize the urgency of protecting) protect our environment. Education should also participate in(the action of) protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for(of) our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting(protection) our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.

To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to解释下！ every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we(us) human. We must do our bit？？ towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.
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polymerwufanUID: 2219535

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient that protecting[protection] is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative[positive] measures to protect wilderness areas.

To begin with, it is because nature can provide we humans[us] a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of resources which human being must[can] rely on. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates[atmosphere]. Furthermore, the forests can take their functions as maintaining soil and water resources, providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining the forests are one of the essential part of the environment. Besides, the animal is one crucial role in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny. Considering these benefits and importance, government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting wilderness areas.

Besides, it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting. If we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behavior to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise[似乎不妥], the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods. The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine social power. Take medium as an example, which has dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need to protect our environment. Education should also participate in protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting, our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.

To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we human. We must do our bit towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient （在这里想问一下这两个词有什么区别阿）that protecting is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative measures to protect wilderness areas.To begin with, it is because nature can provide we humans a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of resources which human being must rely on（可以去掉这个which，读起来更顺口）. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates(air). Furthermore, the forests can take their functions (function)as maintaining soil and water resources, providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining the forests are one of the essential part of the environment. (病句，可以改为demonstrate that forests are one of the essential part of the environment ).Besides, the animal is one crucial role in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny. Considering these benefits and importance(前面是不是要加定冠词，因为these不能用来修饰importance), government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting (protect)wilderness areas.

Besides(In addition是不是好些，因为前面已经用过besides), it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting.(同意楼上的，而且感觉此句作为TS不完整，没有说到底在protect什么)If we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding（有没有这个词啊？我在快译通里没找到）to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behavior to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise, the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods.（同意楼上的，比如说可以对一部分农民减税，鼓励他们不要继续开荒种田导致土地的荒漠化） The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.

Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine social power. Take medium as an example, which has dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need to protect our environment. Education should also participate in protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting, our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we human. We must do our bit towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.

觉得写的很好啊，很流畅，立意新颖，逻辑也很清楚

只是你全文只是开头用了preserve,在后文中全部用的protect,我想是不是在结尾或者文中也应适当提到这个词呢，否则感觉上有悖开头的观点呢？

个人意见，仅供参考哈

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even in those remote areas, in their natural state? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker, however, under some circumstances, it is not effective and efficient （在这里想问一下这两个词有什么区别阿）that protecting is carried out only by government. In my opinion, we humans all have a duty to take affirmative measures to protect wilderness areas.

To begin with, it is because nature can provide we humans a lot of benefits that governments should protect wilderness areas carefully. For instance, Brazil's tropical rainforest-which is in remote areas of South America-possesses rich and a variety of resources which human being must rely on（可以去掉这个which，读起来更顺口）. The rainforest-called" the lung of the world"-can provide a great amount of oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide by photosynthesis, in which way it can purify our climates(air). Furthermore, the forests can take their functions (function)as maintaining soil and water resources, providing habitats for animals, and adjusting balance of the ecological environment, which determining the forests are one of the essential part of the environment. (病句，可以改为demonstrate that forests are one of the essential part of the environment ).Besides, the animal is one crucial role in the biological chain and is significant to the integrality of biosphere. The survival of various and prosperous animals makes a valuable contribution to scientific researches such as anthropogeny. Considering these benefits and importance(前面是不是要加定冠词，因为these不能用来修饰importance), government should take the tremendous and hard task to protecting (protect)wilderness areas.

Besides(In addition是不是好些，因为前面已经用过besides), it is because of the unique authority governments held that governments should make efforts on protecting.( 同意楼上的，而且感觉此句作为TS不完整，没有说到底在protect什么)If we cast a look back at the human history, it is undemanding （有没有这个词啊？我在快译通里没找到）to discover the development of human being, more often than not, are at the cost of damage of the environment. Still now, this phenomenon can be found in many counties without difficulty. Obviously, there are so many loopholes in laws that governments should pass some effective laws to rectify human behavior to protect our plants, animals, lands, and even our human. Otherwise, the government should also inspire people to care for the environment. For example, the government could reduce tax for those individuals who live in houses without woods.（同意楼上的，比如说可以对一部分农民减税，鼓励他们不要继续开荒种田导致土地的荒漠化） The authorities of governments are efficient measures to achieve the aim of protecting and these measures are additional senses for human being.

Under some circumstance, it is not effective that the government merely carries out protection and neglects to combine social power. Take medium as an example, which has dramatic pattern of spread and extensive coverage, it should publicize more acknowledge and measures to public in order to awaken people to the need to protect our environment. Education should also participate in protecting. All schools, colleges, and even universities should cultivate the consciousness of students to take care for our environment. If every one in our society takes part in the action of protecting, our environment, including those wild areas, will be in natural state.

To sum up, in the period of rapid technological change and a great deal of resources consumption leading to increasing environment jeopardy, it falls to every individual in society to take care of our environment which makes a myriad of contributions to we human. We must do our bit towards protecting the environment, but not simply and purely depend on the hard-working of the government.
觉得写的很好啊，很流畅，立意新颖，逻辑也很清楚
只是你全文只是开头用了preserve,在后文中全部用的protect,我想是不是在结尾或者文中也应适当提到这个词呢，否则感觉上有悖开头的观点呢？
个人意见，仅供参考哈

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

上面的帖子的格式不对,后来重发了一遍

ostrich1986UID: 2238177

感谢大家 谢谢谢谢 我好好改改 然后回复你们