Argument200 SISONG2003-Harmming小组第四周作业

sisong2003UID: 2154005

TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
WORDS: 475        TIME:  1:40:00          DATE: 2006-12-12
提纲：
1.       统计数据是否具有代表性？
2.       男性昏厥并不表示他们容易distressed，女性不晕不表示他们不distressed
3.       草率概括，定位男性顾客和宣称麻醉技术和员工对痛苦敏感
From the statistics collected from dentists that more men than women faint while visiting dentist, the arguer claims that men are more likely to faint about having dental work done than women are. Also the arguer recommends targeting the male consumer in advertising to attract patients. However, there are several logical flaws in this argument.

To begin with, the statistics collected from dentists lacks concrete information of the number of sample, ratio of men and women, which render it unrepresentative of the general condition. For example, it is entirely possible that people lived there seldom visit the dentist, and the total number of the statistics is too small to draw this conclusion. Or perhaps more men than women suffer from dental disease and the ratio that men faint during visiting the dentist is actually very small. Without providing more information about the problem mentioned above, as it stands the statistics is not reliable.

In addition, the argument claims that the statistics suggests men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. However, men faint in the dental work does not indicate that they are more distressed. It is very possible that they are so sick of the smell of the medicine using during the dental work that they can not help fainting. In other words, it is entirely possible that more women than men while visiting the dentist are distressed. Perhaps there are some other symptoms of the women distress, such as the psychological displacement disquiets, red in face, etc.

Finally, the argument has a hasty generalization that dentists who advertise to attract patients should aim at male consumer rather than the female. Even if the statistics is effective the argument can not simply conclude that the male patients are the predominant consumers. Three times more men than women faint do not indicate there are three times more men than women visiting the dentist. Perhaps there are more women suffering dental disease and they are more serious in their dental health. To the contrary, men might often ignore dental problems and they are unwilling to visit the dentists. Moreover, the argument hastily generalizes that the advertisement should emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. Without complete information that the male’s faint is caused by poor anesthetics, and the sensitivity of their staff can release the tension or pain of the patients, the recommendation about the advertisement is unwarranted.

To sum up, this argument is sound presented but not well reasoned. To better evaluate it, the arguer should provide more information of the validity of the statistics collected from dentists. Additionally, the arguer must provide more evidence that the male patients are the predominant consumers and they care about the anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff.

graduate06UID: 2223299

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rt860113UID: 2256886

From the statistics collected from dentists that more men than women faint while visiting dentist, the arguer claims thatmen are more likely to faint about having dental work done than women are. Also the arguer recommends targeting the male consumer in advertising to attractpatients. However, there are several logical flaws in this argument.(很正统的开篇，不错)

To begin with, the statisticscollected from dentists lacks concrete information of the number of sample,ratio of men and women, which render it unrepresentative of the generalcondition. For example, it is entirely possible that people lived there seldomvisit the dentist, and the total number of the statistics is too small to drawthis conclusion. Or perhaps more men than women suffer from dental disease andthe ratio that men faint during visiting the dentist is actually very small.Without providing more information about the problem mentioned above, as itstands the statistics is not reliable.

In addition, the argumentclaims that the statistics suggests（此词后面的从句应该是跟should be句型吧，后面的are改为be是不是好一些）men are more likely to be distressed about havingdental work done than women are. However, men faint in the dental work do not indicate that they are more distressed. It is very possible that they are so sick of the smell of the medicine using duringthe dental work that they can not help fainting. In other words, it is entirelypossible that more women than men while visiting the dentist are distressed.Perhaps there are some other symptoms of the women distress, such as the psychological displacement disquiets, red in face, etc.

Finally, the argument has ahasty generalization that dentists who advertise to attract patients should aimat male consumer rather than the female. Even if the statistics is effectivethe argument can not simply conclude that the male patients are the predominantconsumers. Three times more men than women faint do not indicate that there are three times more men than womenvisiting the dentist. Perhaps there are more women suffering dental disease andthey are more serious in their dental health. On the contrary, men might often ignore dental problems and they are unwilling to visit the dentists. Moreover, the argument hastily generalizes that the advertisement should emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.Without complete information that the male’s faint is caused by poor anesthetics, and the sensitivity of their staff can release the tension or(and是不是好一些) pain ofthe patients, the recommendation about the advertisement is unwarranted.

To sum up, this argument is sound presented but not well reasoned. To better evaluate it, the arguer should provide more information of the validity of the statistics collected from dentists. Additionally, the arguer must provide more evidence that the male patients are the predominant consumers and they care about the anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff.（最后一句论述，如果加强一下程度可能更好一些，比如quite care）

总体来说，这篇文章还是很不错的，模板看起来运用的已经比较熟练了，希望作者继续努力，再把打字速度练上去，那将会更加优秀！一起努力吧~

[ 本帖最后由 rt860113 于 2006-12-15 15:32 编辑 ]

sisong2003UID: 2154005

thank u very much~~~^^