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Issue185 [米国有米]第七次作业
作者：bluecathy

185 "Scandals -- whether in politics, academia, or other areas -- can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."  丑闻，不管是政治、学术还是其他领域，都是有用的。它们能吸引人们的注意力，而使我们聚焦于问题，以一种演讲者和改革家都做不到的方式。

[提纲]：
1.丑闻，在某种程度上确实能够使人们迅速而广泛地聚焦于某个问题。共和党候选人的丑闻案。使人们认识到选举背后的问题。黄禹锡的学术丑闻，使得人们思考学术腐败及学术造假的问题，尽管它可能无时无刻地存在于我们身边，但却可能并没有得到我们的重视。
2.但丑闻，往往也因为其新奇性而容易分散人们对丑闻背后的问题实质的注意力。杰克逊的娈童案，就使人只是关注杰克逊这个流行音乐巨星的个体性行为，而忽视整个事件产生的背景原因以及将来的防范措施。

[正文]：
Are the scandals useful in attracting people's attention to the important problems? To some extent, I agree with the issue that the scandals could lead a way to expose some problems which our society or government should make a point of. However, in my view, the scandals may also distract our attention from the essence of the problems sometimes.

To begin with, scandals could contribute to reveal some problems and call our attention to the social issues which are overlooked. The Mark Foley scandal which broke lately in 2006 may be an example to prove it. American politician Mark Foley, a six-term Republican congressman from Florida, who is chairman of the House Caucus on Missing and Exploited Children and championed the protection of children from sexual predators, has resigned from Congress because he sent solicitative e-mails and sexually explicit instant messages to young men who had formerly served as congressional pages for him. Every year Congress hires about 100 pages, who serve for lawmakers and improve social experiences, there may be some politician like Mark Foley, but without the scandal, people may neglect the potential problem, while the government may turn a blind eye to the very issue. The same example in academia is Hwang Woo-suk, whose great success in life science was not being doubted until his fake theses were revealed. His scandal calls people's attention on academia corruption and fake academia which may exist in our life and neglected by us all the time. Hence, what had been demonstrated is that scandals could focus our most attention on problems in the shortest time.

Moreover, scandals could call a nation's collective attention which no public speaker or reformer could ever have done. Let us still take Mark Foley scandal as example. Before the very scandal, there have been two cases like this, although some public speakers and reformers also had referred this issue, it didn't lead people's attention to the important problem. Also, before the scandal was revealed, some warnings of Foley's conduct had been conveyed to the House Republican leadership, although some Congressmen thought it must be an important problem, people's collective attention to the problem were still not called unless the scandal had surfaced. Early in the scandals it may have been tempting to be one single, isolated incidence of the official's personal morality. But when retrospecting the scandal, we will find that it may contribute a significant and lasting benefit to public officials' election. Thereby, the scandals could make people focus their attention widely and rapidly rather than what the public speaker and reformer do.

However, if we see the coin from the other side, we may find that scandals also could distract us from more essential matters because of its novelty and bizarrerie. Taking Michael Jackson means as an example. Admittedly, when this pop singer was charged of child molestation, the scandal did call some attention to certain issues of federal law, but people focus on more of his private life, his Neverland Ranch and his relationship with those children stars rather than background reasons and future defensive measure in similar cases. What call people's attention are more of what Michael Jackson as a entertainer and pop icon did and less of how and why Michael Jackson could easily gain the chance to get close to those children. It seems that for more than a year the scandal served chiefly a fancy theme to people's leisure life and distracted us from the essence of this affair and most pressing national and global problems, such as the Iraq War, the terrorism in London and 60th anniversary of the victory of Anti-Fascist War.

To sum up, scandals surely lead to uncover important problems more rapidly and effectively than any public speaker or reformer can. Whereas， they may not always take the benefit to our society.

[ 本帖最后由 bluecathy 于 2006-12-28 23:55 编辑 ]

laner023UID: 2223653

Are the scandals useful in attracting people's attention to the important problems? To some extent, I agree with the issue that the scandals could lead a way to expose some problems which our society or government should make a point of. However, in my view, the scandals may also distract our attention from the essence of the problems sometimes.

To begin with, scandals could contribute to reveal some problems and call our attention to the social issues which are overlooked. The Mark Foley scandal which broke（没明白） lately in 2006 may be an example to prove it. American politician Mark Foley, a six-term Republican congressman from Florida, who is chairman of the House Caucus on Missing and Exploited Children and championed the protection of children from sexual predators, has resigned from Congress because he sent solicitative e-mails and sexually explicit instant messages to young men who had formerly served as congressional pages for him. Every year Congress hires about 100 pages, who serve for lawmakers and improve social experiences, there may be some politician like Mark Foley, but without the scandal, people may neglect the potential problem, while the government may turn a blind eye to the very issue. The same（用similar是不是好一些？） example in academia is Hwang Woo-suk, whose great success in life sciences was not being doubted until his fake theses(thesis or some other words?) were revealed. His scandal calls people's attention on academia corruption and fake academia(你要表达的是学术造假吗？) which may exist in our life and neglected by us all the time. Hence, what had been demonstrated is that scandals could focus our most attention on problems in the shortest time.

Moreover, scandals could call a nation's collective attention which no public speaker or reformer could ever have done. Let us still take Mark Foley scandal as example. Before the very scandal, there have been two cases like this, although some public speakers and reformers also had referred this issue, it didn't lead people's attention to the important problem. Also, before the scandal was revealed, some warnings of Foley's conduct had been conveyed to the House Republican leadership,（这里该句号了吧） although some Congressmen thought it must be an important problem, people's collective attention to the problem were still not called unless the scandal had surfaced. Early in the scandals it may have been tempting to be one single, isolated incidence of the official's personal morality. But when retrospecting the scandal, we will find that it may contribute a significant and lasting benefit to public officials' election. Thereby, the scandals could make people focus their attention widely and rapidly rather than what the public speaker and reformer do. (这句是不是有问题？改成Thereby, the scandals could make people focus their attention more widely and rapidly than the public speaker and reformer could do.)

However, if we see the coin from the other side, we may find that scandals also could distract us from more essential matters because of its novelty and bizarrerie. Taking Michael Jackson means(???) as an example. Admittedly, when this pop singer was charged of child molestation, the scandal did call some attention to certain issues of federal law, but people focus on more of his private life, his Neverland Ranch and his relationship with those children stars rather than background reasons and future defensive measure in similar cases. What call people's attention are more of what Michael Jackson as a(an) entertainer and pop icon did and less of how and why Michael Jackson could easily gain the chance to get close to those children.太中国化了，我不确定英语中有没有more…and less… 的说法，用more … than… 连接吧。 It seems that for more than a year the scandal served chiefly a fancy theme to people's leisure life and distracted us from the essence of this affair and most pressing national and global problems, such as the Iraq War, the terrorism in London and 60th anniversary of the victory of Anti-Fascist War.(这句似乎有些牵强吧，那些事情自有政府去关心，人们不关心这是也不会影响benefit)

To sum up, scandals surely lead to uncover important problems more rapidly and effectively than any public speaker or reformer can. Whereas， they may not always take the benefit to our society.

观点清晰，层次分明。语句流畅，善于变化。
个别语句不太通顺，一些用语比较中国化。（这是大家的通病）
正文第三段的最后一句感觉有些牵强。
个人意见，改得不对的地方欢迎讨论。
一起加油！！

[ 本帖最后由 laner023 于 2006-12-30 21:54 编辑 ]

bluecathyUID: 2231215

哈 正文第三段是看了范文之后拿过来，只不过换成了05年的事情，但是这些事业确实是人民应该关心的啊，个人认为啊

broke 也就是break是欧美新闻写作中经常用到的用法，表示发生了一件爆炸性新闻的意思。他们的头条一般也是breaking news。

还有，谢谢你，帮我改：）

laner023UID: 2223653

好，又学了点东西:) 。

第三段可能是个人观点的不同吧，我就不同意范文的写法。