Argument140 sisong2003--Hamming小组第七次作业

sisong2003UID: 2154005

TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
WORDS: 443（302）          TIME: 上午 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-2
提纲：
1.       课堂大和带来的实验资助不代表能力
2.       教学能力不等于管理能力
3.       离开Elm大学无理假设
From the money Professor Thomas (PT) has brought to the university in research grants in each of the last two years and the scale of her classes, the author recommends that PT should be given a salary raise as well as a promotion to Department Chairperson. However, the argument has several logical fallacies which render it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the author claims that the scale of PT's classes is among the largest at university and the money she brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years which well demonstrated her teaching and research abilities. Nevertheless, the large scale of her class is entirely possible due to several factors, such as botany class is a required class in Elm City University; PT is the only professor who teaches botany. So the scale of PT's class does not indicate her well teaching abilities. Moreover, the money she brought to university in research grants exceeded her salary has little to do with her research abilities. It is likely that PT is good at communication and she knows a lot of CEOs or managers who are willing to invest money to these researches which may benefit their companies. Without take these possibilities into account, the author can not convince us of PT's good abilities in teaching and research.

In addition, even if PT has a strong teaching and research abilities, the author's recommendation of a promotion to Department Chairperson lacks of compelling evidence. It is known to all that the good abilities at teaching and research do not mean the abilities of leading and management. Perhaps PT has little abilities in address department events, so she is not suitable for this position. Thus this recommendation is unfounded.

Finally, the author claims that without such a raise and promotion PT will likely to leave Elm City University for another college. However, the author provides little evidence that PT is not satisfied with her recent salary and position, as well as the tendency to leave for another college. It is entirely likely that PT is satisfied with her working environment as well as income in Elm City University, and she is willing to work in the rest of her life in Elm City University. Therefore, the assumption of PT's leaving is unwarranted.

In sum, the argument is not as persuasive as it looks. To better evaluate it, we must know more information about PT's class and her abilities not only in teaching and research but also in communication and management. We also need more evidence on whether she is satisfied with current income and position.

liquidshileUID: 2254332

From[总觉得别扭但我也不知道该怎么用] the money Professor Thomas (PT) has brought to the university in research grants in each of the last two years and the scale of her classes, the author recommends that PT should be given a salary raise as well as a promotion to Department Chairperson. However, the argument has several logical fallacies which render it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the author claims that the scale of PT's classes is among the largest at university and the money she brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years which well demonstrated her teaching and research abilities. Nevertheless, the large scale of her class is entirely possible due to several factors, such as botany class is a required class in Elm City University; PT is the only professor who teaches botany. So the scale of PT's class does not indicate her well teaching abilities. Moreover, the money she brought to university in research grants exceeded her salary has little to do with her research abilities. It is likely that PT is good at communication and she knows a lot of CEOs or managers who are willing to invest money to these researches which may benefit their companies. Without take these possibilities into account, the author can not convince us of PT's good abilities in teaching and research.

In addition, even if PT has a strong teaching and research abilities, the author's recommendation of a promotion to Department Chairperson lacks of compelling evidence. It is known to all that the good abilities at teaching and research do not mean the abilities of leading and management. Perhaps PT has little abilities in address department events, so she is not suitable for this position. Thus this recommendation is unfounded.

Finally, the author claims that without such a raise and promotion PT will likely to leave Elm City University for another college. However, the author provides little evidence that PT is not satisfied with her recent salary and position, as well as the tendency to leave for another college. It is entirely likely that PT is satisfied with her working environment as well as income in Elm City University, and she is willing to work in the rest of her life in Elm City University. Therefore, the assumption of PT's leaving is unwarranted.
[三段论证非常好，用词造句都很流畅，太厉害了！]
In sum, the argument is not as persuasive as it looks. To better evaluate it, we must know more information about PT's class and her abilities not only in teaching and research but also in communication and management. We also need more evidence on whether she is satisfied with current income and position.
你的文章太厉害了，根本找不到什么错误，就只有开头那句话中式英语太重了
其他的地方简直没得说

sisong2003UID: 2154005

惭愧，其实自己感觉有点虎头蛇尾，而且已经改过一遍了

liquidshileUID: 2254332

我觉得你的英语句式用的相当的好，非常地道流畅，我就是写不出来