Issue50 【CSMY作文互改小组】第二次作业

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Issue50 【CSMY作文互改小组】第二次作业
"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

提纲：
1.      教师从事与自己教学相关的工作有利于自己的提升。
2.      教师从事与自己教学相关的工作有利于学生。
3.      教师的主要职责是传道，授业，解惑。如果花太多时间在工作上将不利于教学。

The speaker concludes that all college faculty should work outside the academic world in professions related to the courses they teach. To some extent, I tend to agree with the statement. That faculty work outside benefits not only themselves but also all students.

First of all, faculty who are actively engaged in social is easier to obtain new ideas and solve practical problems in daily life. For instance, it is useless for professors in the field of animal nutrition to stay in their offices or labs, rather than pig farm. It is most likely that their mind will dry of new ideas. They have to extend the scope of people who they meet and things they experience. By changing their mind with various experts, their eyes will be open and what is most needed in the society will be clearly known. It is more likely that they can solve more practical problems. Moreover, practical experience can boost a professor’s credibility as an expert in the field.

Furthermore, students can get benefit by professors’ keeping pace with the changing world. It is entirely possible that professors will tell students their fresh experience in the class, so that students can get knowledge indirectly. Also, by involving in the society, up-to-date information about current job market will be imparted to them. They will give more practical and useful advice to students.

Nonetheless, the main duty for teachers is to initiate students’ interest in study, impart knowledge. If they spend much time on working in the field related to the course they teach, the time spent on course will be very little. It is harm to the development of students and breaches the teachers’ responsibility. After all, the faculty is not really working outside.

To sum up, only if the faculty perform very well in the school, they are allowed and encouraged to work in the field related to the course.

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The speaker concludes that all college faculty should work outside the academic world in professions related to the courses they teach. To some extent, I tend to agree with the statement. That faculty work outside benefits not only themselves but also all students.

First of all, faculty who are actively engaged in social【society】 is easier to obtain new ideas and solve practical problems in daily life. For instance, it is useless for professors in the field of animal nutrition to stay in their offices or labs, rather than pig farm. It is most likely that their mind [they?]will dry of new ideas. They have to extend the scope of people who they meet and things they experience. By changing their mind with various experts, their eyes will be open and what is most needed in the society will be clearly known. It is more likely that they can solve more practical problems. Moreover, practical experience can boost a professor’s credibility as an expert in the field.[感觉这段句式变化太单调，可否考虑用其他句式代替it is]

Furthermore, students can get benefit by professors’ keeping pace with the changing world. It is entirely possible that professors will tell students their fresh experience in the class, so that students can get knowledge indirectly. Also, by involving in the society, up-to-date information about current job market will be imparted to them. 【这句话语法有问题，应改为Involving in society, the professors tend to impart ... 】They will give more practical and useful advice to students.

Nonetheless, the main duty for teachers is to initiate students’ interest in study, impart knowledge. If they spend much time on working in the field related to the course they teach, the time spent on course will be very little. It is harm to the development of students and breaches the teachers’ responsibility. After all, the faculty is not really working outside.[这句话感觉写的不明不白的，有虎头蛇尾的感觉]

To sum up, only if the faculty perform very well in the school, they are allowed and encouraged to work in the field related to the course

总的来说，思路还是很清晰的。有些词用的也很地道。只是感觉句式变化单调，尤其第三段，全是简单句，而且不是很流畅，加些连接词会好些。 而且有些观点并为展开来说，缺乏信服度。