Issue51 【CSMY作文互改小组】第二次作业 对不起，迟到了

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Issue51
"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣，教育才真正的有效率的

观点 有保留的反对
提纲  1 兴趣对学生的重要性,bill gates的例子
        2 however,兴趣的缺点，有兴趣就代表学好吗，而其兴趣很可能导致偏科
        3 moreover,教育的目的，是培养能够独立思考、独立行动，承担社会责任的人，是为了使学生走向社会
正文
Will education only catering to the individual needs and interests of each student be fairly effective? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that interests are the best friends for us human beings, which will arouse one's eager to study. However, the speaker overlooks some other aspects involved in effective education, more importantly ignoring the ultimate purpose of education.

Interests play a crucial role for students in learning effectively. Suppose in an insipid class, students being spoon-fed with an indigestible mass of materials and somewhat hidebound doctrines, what on earth they could take in effectively. Personal interests irritate students' thirst for knowledge, introducing them into a new academic subject, and giving them impetus to persist. Can students with interests in certain fields actually be the talented scientists in disguise? If we look to history to answer this question, we see compelling evidence that giants such Thomas Edison, Sir Isaac Newton, and Leonardo da Vinci might have been students like this. In contemporary society, the case of Bill Gates adds great weight to this reasoning. When he studied in Likeside where he was first introduced to computers, he found himself inseparable from the computers. He stayed in the computer room day by day, learning computer literature, writing computer programs, and doing anything else associated with computers, which afterward has considerable influence upon his success in IT business. It is human nature that people can do things better when they love to do. Learning without interests is quite like making friends without sincerity, which will soon make both boring.

However, educators should adopt effective measures for helping students deal positively with their needs and interests which might have opposite effects of what was intended or hoped for. In the first place, while a student is interested in a certain subject, dose that mean he or she can study it well to the extent that our educators require. Maybe he is struggling with certain aspects of his learning, which amounts to low efficiency. A compelling example is that if educators can provide the student who prefers to computer science, with corresponding courses such as data structure, theory of compiling, algorithm designing, and computer, then the student can skip some secondary issues which cause the study to stagnate. Secondly, a student addicted in certain subject he loves might ignore other disciplines that would be helpful to his later life. Without the context of a variety of disciplines, one inclines to dive into one specific field. It is thus of necessity for education experts to make elaborate and systematic curriculums for those students including natural sciences, social sciences, humanities and other disciplines students need to know.

Moreover, there are more requirements for the education nowadays. Education should furnish our students with correct and healthy values, and positive perspectives and thoughts of one's self and the outside world. Education must also train one for quick, resolute and effective thinking. Legions of half truths, prejudice, and propaganda are prone to interfere with our minds. It is the responsibility of education to teach one to sift and weigh evidence, to discern the true from false, the real from the unreal, and the facts from the fiction. The most dangerous criminal may be the man gifted with reason, but with no morals. These all can not depend on the very education the speaker asserts.

In the final analysis, education should meet personal needs and interests due to impetus and motivation it brings about, and educators should take practical measures to guide these needs and interests. However, the ultimate goal of education should not be neglected which transmits to one not only the accumulated knowledge of the race but also the accumulated experience of social living.

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同主题写作第六期Issue51

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Will education only catering to the individual needs and interests of each student be fairly effective? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that interests are the best friends for us human beings, which will arouse one's eager to study. However, the speaker overlooks some other aspects involved in effective education, more importantly ignoring the ultimate purpose of education.

Interests play a crucial role for students in learning effectively. Suppose in an insipid class, students being spoon-fed with an indigestible mass of materials and somewhat hidebound doctrines, what on earth they could take in effectively. Personal interests irritate students' thirst for knowledge, introducing them into a new academic subject, and giving them impetus to persist. Can students with interests in certain fields actually be the talented scientists in disguise?(对某学科有兴趣的学生会成为伪装的有天赋的科学家？这句意思我猜得到，但是觉得这里用in disguise不太合适) If we look to history to answer this question, we see compelling evidence that giants such (as)Thomas Edison, Sir Isaac Newton, and Leonardo da Vinci might have been students like this. In contemporary society, the case of Bill Gates adds great weight to this reasoning. When he studied in Likeside where he was first introduced to computers, he found himself inseparable from the computers. He stayed in the computer room day by day, learning computer literature, writing computer programs, and doing anything else associated with computers, which afterward has considerable influence upon his success in IT business. It is human nature that people can do things better when they love to do. Learning without interests is quite like making friends without sincerity, which will soon make both boring.

However, educators should adopt effective measures for helping students deal positively with their needs and interests which might have opposite effects of what was intended or hoped for.(这句我个人觉得把后半部分用otherwise引出, 可能读起来更流畅) In the first place, while a student is interested in a certain subject, dose that mean he or she can study it well to the extent that our educators require.(疑问句) Maybe he is struggling with certain aspects of his learning, which amounts to low efficiency. A compelling example is that if educators can provide the student who prefers to computer science, with corresponding courses such as data structure, theory of compiling, algorithm designing, and computer, then the student can skip some secondary issues(什么是secondary issues?是不是指他学的不得要领?) which cause the study to stagnate. Secondly, a student addicted in certain subject he loves might ignore other disciplines that would be helpful to his later life. Without the context of a variety of disciplines, one inclines to dive into one specific field. It is thus of necessity for education experts to make elaborate and systematic curriculums(curricula) for those students including natural sciences, social sciences, humanities and other disciplines students need to know.

Moreover, there are more requirements for the education nowadays. Education should furnish our students with correct and healthy values, and positive perspectives and thoughts of one's self and the outside world. Education must also train one for quick, resolute and effective thinking. Legions of half truths, prejudice, and propaganda are prone to interfere with our minds. It is the responsibility of education to teach one to sift and weigh evidence, to discern the true from false, the real from the unreal, and the facts from the fiction. The most dangerous criminal may be the man gifted with reason, but with no morals. These all(All these) can not depend on the very education the speaker asserts.

In the final analysis, education should meet personal needs and interests due to impetus and motivation it brings about, and educators should take practical measures to guide these needs and interests. However, the ultimate goal of education should not be neglected which transmits to one not only the accumulated knowledge of the race but also the accumulated experience of social living.

这篇文章句式和用词还是比较丰富的,在观点问题上,也是写出了兴趣教育的利弊,可能是碍于篇幅的限制,利弊两方面的阐述似乎还不够深;正如你列出的参考资料里的分析，兴趣是可以培养的，以前觉得枯燥的东西，以后却可能感兴趣；而学生所感兴趣的科目也未必是适合其发展的方向等问题。

应该说写得很不错了,我也只能指出几个我觉得别扭的小问题,呵呵。