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题目
ARGUMENT230 - The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
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（1）       除非高速路旁的住房与城市另一端居民区的环境和条件完全一样，否则城市另一端居民区不适合于改造为工业使用。
（2）       没有足够的证据表明邻近街区在改造期间一直会有空闲的住房存在，而且不清楚空闲的房子是否足够多。
（3）       住房的改造与工厂建立、犯罪率下降、全市财产税收收入的增加不能证明存在因果关系。因此对a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city进行改造不一定能够繁荣本市。

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The author declare that the adaptation of severely substandard housing near the freeway made several factories constructed, crime rates declining, property tax revenues for the entire city increasing. The similar action should be taken in the unoccupied residential area on the opposite side of the city to revitalize the city. The argument relies on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.

The crucial assumption the author relies on is that the circumstances and condition of housing near the freeway is perfectly the same as those of residential area on the opposite side of the city. On the base of the assumption, the author assort the similar action should be taken in the residential area. However, the argument can't provide enough evidences to substantiate the assumption. Perhaps the residential area is far away the freeway, the subway, and the railway. Maybe there are severe traffic jams in the residential area and the transportation is inconvenient. Most investors aren't willing to construct factories there. Adapting the housing which is severely substandard is accepted by most of previous residents and is reasonable in laws. If the main population of the entire city dwells in the residential area on the opposite side of the city, the adaptation to the area is not suitable.

The author relies on another assumption that unoccupied houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods are sufficient and warrant to settle the people who dwell in the residential area. It will take a long period to adapt a residential area. The author can't provide any information about how many unoccupied houses and apartments exist nearby neighborhoods and whether some houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods are unoccupied or not during that period. If the alternate housing for those displaced by that action is unavailable in the future, the operation of urban renewal program will bring into a lot of homeless people and cause crime rates rising, even social disturbance.

The author assume that the prosperity of the city such as construction of factories, decline of crime rates, increase of property tax revenues of the entire city and so forth, attribute to the adaptation of housing. Perhaps the government spends an excess of tax revenues on the adaptation of housing and have severe financial deficit. Maybe the government took a series of other effective actions to decline crime rates after housing near the freeway was adapted. The increase of property tax revenues for the entire city may result from the nationwide economic boom, not the adaptation of housing in the city.

In conclusion, the unsubstantiated assumptions make the author's assort unbelievable. The author should provide more information about the circumstances of the residential area, availability of unoccupied houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods, and the relation between adaptation of housing and the prosperity of the city.

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Argument36提纲
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[ 本帖最后由 lrih 于 2007-1-6 23:49 编辑 ]

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The author declare [declares] that the adaptation of severely substandard housing near the freeway made several factories constructed, crime rates declining, property tax revenues for the entire city increasing. The similar action should be taken in the unoccupied residential area on the opposite side of the city to revitalize the city. The argument relies on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
The crucial assumption the author relies on is that the circumstances and condition of housing near the freeway is perfectly [are perfectly] the same as those of residential area on the opposite side of the city. On the base [basis 好像词组on the base of 和on the basis of 是同一个意思，不过后接抽象名词的时候，应该用basis的] of the assumption, the author assort [asserts] the similar action should be taken in the residential area. However, the argument can't provide enough evidences to substantiate the assumption. Perhaps the residential area is far away [加入from] the freeway, the subway, and the railway. Maybe there are severe traffic jams in the residential area and the transportation is inconvenient. Most investors aren't willing to construct factories there. Adapting the housing which is severely substandard is accepted by most of previous residents and is reasonable in laws. If the main population of the entire city dwells in the residential area on the opposite side of the city, the adaptation to the area is not suitable.[从adapting 开始的这两句不太明白其之间的逻辑]
[第一段的连接词少了一点]
The author relies on another assumption that unoccupied houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods are sufficient and warrant [warrant不能做形容词哦，要用warranted表示被动吧] to settle the people who dwell in the residential area. It will take a long period to adapt a residential area. The author can't provide any information about how many unoccupied houses and apartments exist nearby neighborhoods and whether some houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods [这里和上面重复了] are unoccupied or not during that period. If the alternate housing for those displaced by that action is unavailable in the future, the operation of urban renewal program will bring into a lot of homeless people and cause crime rates rising, even social disturbance.[这个词用得不对，建议再斟酌下]
The author assume [assumes] that the prosperity of the city such as construction of factories, decline of crime rates, increase of property tax revenues of the entire city and so forth, attribute [attributes][这个词的主语应该是prosperity吧，我理解decline of crime rates, increase of property tax revenues of the entire city and so forth你是用来作同位语的吧]，所以应该用attributes呀] to the adaptation of housing. Perhaps the government spends an excess of tax revenues on the adaptation of housing and have severe financial deficit. Maybe the government took a series of other effective actions to decline crime rates after housing near the freeway was adapted. The increase of property tax revenues for the entire city may result [results]from the nationwide economic boom, not the adaptation of housing in the city.
In conclusion, the unsubstantiated assumptions make the author's assort [assert] unbelievable. The author should provide more information about the circumstances of the residential area, availability of unoccupied houses and apartments nearby neighborhoods, and the relation between adaptation of housing and the prosperity of the city.
总评：
1． 你能较好地运用语言，可是存在不少简单的错误哦！比如第三人称动词，单复数不一致。小错误不可以忽视哦~~~
2． 这篇逻辑上大家都写得差不多，也不多评了~~^_^

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be far away from
Adapting the severely substandard housing was justified and easily accepted by most of previous residents. Nevertheless, the adaptation to the residential area may result in the discontent of previous residents, even causing street demonstration. If the main population of the entire city dwells in the residential area, the government will face enormous risk from adaptation to the residential area.
even social turbulence