issue56

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issue56（自由女神小组第三次作业）
提纲：1 First of all, the current problems represent what kinds of problems are people’s urgency.
             2 Secondly, solving current problems will pave the way for future blueprint.
             3 Face to anticipated problems of future

Every person in our society hopes that his or her needs can be satisfied, so does every generation. Of course, it is perfect to solve the immediate and the anticipated problems of future at the same time, but given our limited time and resources, it is very hard to figure out both of them. In my opinion, just like the speaker says, we should focus more on solving the immediate issues than on the anticipated ones of future.
First of all, the current problems represent what kinds of problems are people’s urgency. If such issues can not be solve well, how do we live a smooth life, let alone thinking about our offspring. Take the former Soviet Union for example, in 1980s, he overrated the importance of militate issues to assure its national security, so he striven for developing a formidably arsenal of nuclear weapons and launching the first man-made satellite in human history. On the contrary, he paid less attention to enrich his agriculture products and improve living conditions of his people. In the end ,the whole country ran into trouble and nearly collapse overnight. From this case, we are informed the devastating results of ignoring the immediate concerns. In addition, all of us have limited time, and during our lifetime, we have to deal with various things with our finite energy. If we spend more time on the problems related future, naturally, time spent on the current issues will be less. To some extent, it may affect the efficiency of solving the current affairs including our daily things and issues among nations. Therefore, to make the whole society run orderly and healthily, we must pay more attention to the immediate problems.
Secondly, solving current problems will pave the way for future blueprint. As we know, Carl Max’s famous philosophical law is that anything in the world is connected and no one can be divided, so as to the currents problems and those related future. Our offspring can learn from us through the relationship between today and future. It is easy to find examples concerning learning form the forerunners. For instance, Chairman Mao, a famous leader in China, was fond of reading “The Art of War”by Sunzi, a famous militarist in immemorial China to guild his militate activities. In other word, if we handle our daily things well with good means. We can provide those methods and the ways of thinking to the after-comers.
Admittedly, some anticipated problems of future such as energy deficiency and pollutions have turned up. How to face them? Completely ignoring them? Of course not. A better approach is that we first satisfy ourselves to some extent and improve all aspects of our development, after that, seek for new ways to generate energy and materials which may not cause pollution. Through this way, we can decrease the damage that those anticipated issues may produce to our next generation.
To sum up, everything has its main aspects and the less-important ones, so as to the problems of a country. We must pay more attention to the main aspects-the immediate problems. Only in this way, can we share a society with peace and stability. It does good to both us and our offspring.

nujnujoahzUID: 2287893

issue56（自由女神小组第三次作业）
提纲：    1 First of all, the current problems represent what kinds of problems are people’s urgency.
             2 Secondly, solving current problems will pave the way for future blueprint(好辞).
             3 Face to anticipated problems of future

Every person in our society hopes that his or her needs can be satisfied, so does every generation(这句加到这感觉不太合适,every generation和every person不是一个层面上的,应该单独列出一句说). Of course(用absolutely好), it is perfect to solve the immediate and the anticipated problems of future at the same time, but given our limited time and resources, it is very hard to figure out both of them. In my opinion, just like the speaker says, we should focus more on solving the immediate issues than on the anticipated ones of future.(分析题目,给出自己观点:完全同意)(在用词上我感觉应该用更文的词比如figure out:fulfil;says:asserts,complain,argue)
First of all, the current problems represent what kinds of problems are people’s urgency. If such issues can not be solve well, how do we live a smooth life, let alone(这个句式用的不错) thinking about our offspring. Take the former Soviet Union for example, in 1980s, he overrated the importance of militate issues to assure its national security, so he striven for developing a formidably arsenal of nuclear weapons and launching the first man-made satellite in human history. On the contrary, he paid less attention to enrich his agriculture products and improve living conditions of his people. In the end ,the whole country ran into trouble and nearly collapse(collapsed) overnight. From this case, we are informed the devastating results of ignoring the immediate concerns. In addition, all of us have limited time, and during our lifetime, we have to deal with various things with our finite energy. If we spend more time on the problems related future, naturally, time spent on the current issues will be less. To some extent, it may affect the efficiency of solving the current affairs including our daily things and issues among nations. Therefore, to make the whole society run orderly and healthily, we must pay more attention to the immediate problems.(写的不错,例子也很好,不过,题目的主语是governments,在行文中应该将主语写成governments而不是we)
Secondly, solving current problems will pave the way for future blueprint. As we know, Carl Max’s famous philosophical law is that anything in the world is connected and no one can be divided, so as to the currents problems and those related future(老美好象不太喜欢马克思的思想). Our offspring can learn from us through the relationship between today and future. It is easy to find examples concerning learning form the forerunners. For instance, Chairman Mao, a famous leader in China, was fond of reading “The Art of War”by Sunzi, a famous militarist in immemorial China to guild his militate activities. In other word, if we handle our daily things well with good means. We can provide those methods and the ways of thinking to the after-comers.(感觉这两个例子有点反推的意思,是以前的例子,以前的好的东西可以给我们现在以借鉴,但是不是现在的好的做法可以给以后的人以启示.  有点跑题哦
     应该多举现在的例子,说明我们把现在做好了,以后就不愁了)而且本身马克思的思想是针对未来的,似乎在他们生活的年代没起到太大的现实意义,所有有些自相矛盾.应该举些离我们不远的,而且对当时有很大现实意义的事情,这样我们现在可以借鉴的
     感觉想在历史上找例子就有些牵强,那些对我们现在很有用处的思想和做法,大多都是对当时没什么太大现实意义的,孙子这个还好,当时引起轰动,现在也好用.
Admittedly, some anticipated problems of future such as energy deficiency and pollutions have turned up. How to face them? Completely ignoring them? Of course not. A better approach is that we first satisfy ourselves to some extent and improve all aspects of our development, after that, seek for new ways to generate energy and materials which may not cause pollution. Through this way, we can decrease the damage that those anticipated issues may produce to our next generation.
(能源危机和环境污染的例子还是有些不好哦
你说,"首先,我们先满足我们的需求,"这样做已经在危害后代了,我们究竟需要多少,需要量限制在多少才可以不对后代产生影响我们也不知道,
所以提到这个环境污染,肯定是"着眼于未来"的例子,举到这里就不好了,谈到这个,我们肯定会想到我们给未来的危害的)
To sum up, everything has its main aspects and the less-important ones(main aspects和less-important ones不是很对仗,用subordinate应该和main对应一些), so as to the problems of a country. We must pay more attention to the main aspects-the immediate problems. Only in this way, can we share a society with peace and stability. It does good to both us and our offspring.

谈到长远大计和当务之急,用一种绝对的观点不太好写哦,一般写成平衡观点比较好
不过写的好也是很好的文章

这篇文章有一下亮点:
1.文笔很好,用词比较恰当
2.例子的表述很好
3.结构很清晰

也同样有一些缺点:
1.例子举的不是很恰当

这是我的一点拙见,希望能给你带来一些帮助
有说的不恰当的地方请在这个帖子回,我们可以在上面讨论,我会经常关注这个帖子的

[ 本帖最后由 nujnujoahz 于 2007-1-13 09:55 编辑 ]

nujnujoahzUID: 2287893

对了
多举老美的例子啊
FORD汽车的例子不错
当时FORD发明了生产线,给自己带来了利润,也让大家都很快坐上CAR
拿到现在也是促进了工业的发展,流水线作业得到了普及

蔓草菊UID: 2195399

太感谢nujnujoahz 的批改了，
我觉得你的观点都很到位呢，我会在改改的～

蔓草菊UID: 2195399

我一直为例子而烦呢, 本身脑袋里就没装什么东西的说