issue196 【0706G-自由女神作文】第四次作业

mh1988UID: 2189586

TOPIC: ISSUE196 - "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
WORDS: 489          TIME: 1:50:27          DATE: 2007-1-14
提纲：
1.核能为我们带来一个能源宝库，但人类不当的使用导致了原子弹的出现。但总的来说，核能还是为我们带来的好处大于坏处。
2.internet同样如此。
3.即使有时我们正确的使用新技术，仍不可避免的遇到很多问题。但这些问题并不能掩盖新技术带来的好处。核电站做例子。
    Technology changes our life,in a hand ,solving our problems,bringing us benefits;in the other hand,creating some problems,threatening and damaging our life.For any technology,these two aspects just like twins always come to this world together,because any one can be utilized in a two different way by human beings ourselves.

    Atomic energy is the best example to expalin it.Einstein helped us open a door to a energy wealth that is never going to be exhausted and offer us a perfect way to solve energy problems.But when this technology was used by human beings in a inappropriate way,the other opening door set free a monster-atomic bomb,the most dangerous weapon that created the most horrible tragedy in the second world war.Even though,we should not deny the greatness of this technology and the anticipated progress it will bring to us.

     Internet may be the most controversial technology we ever had and totally changes our life,making it more convinient and bringing us loneliness.Nowdays the whole world is connected by it,and you almost can get any information in this digtital world.If want to read some book,you can easily find it on the net but does not need to go to the library.If want to have a trip,you can check the plan ticket through the net but needs not to go to the airport;even if want to go shopping,you can get any shopping information on the net and just need a call but not to go shopping youself.But when enjoying the convinience the net brings us,we also needs to endure troubles from who does not use the net in the wrong way.A new kind of entertainment-the online game gives us a lot of fun in our spare time.However some people,especially young persons,who indulges in it and can not live a normal life will not only hurt themselves but sadden their parents and families.The net provides us a channel to connect with the whole world but at the same time offers the bad hackers a channel to disturb others’ normal life or even commit crimes.Even though,can we deny the net raises our life to a higher level?The answer is surely no.

   Admittedly,though some time the technology used appropriate way also will bring some big trouhle.Neuclear power station seems to be a perfect way to utilize atomic energy,which can provide large amouts of power but produces little amout of waste.However,in fact,some accidents made this way not so perfect.The radiant leak leaded thousands of people dying from unname disease and its effects would not disappear in a long time;the explode of power station erased almost everything aroud it.Even though,such flaws can not impede the development of this kind of technology,just like the airport accidents would not stop us taking planes.

   In sum,no matter what problems the technology creats,our life indeed get a great progress and the development of the technology will never stop.What we should do is to try our best to diminish the bad part when utilizing any new technology.




[ 本帖最后由 mh1988 于 2007-1-14 16:06 编辑 ]

蔓草菊UID: 2195399

批改 Technology changes our life,in a hand ,solving our problems,bringing us benefits;in the other hand,creating some problems,threatening and damaging our life.For any technology,these two aspects just like twins always come to this world together,（用twins做比喻好像不太合适啊）because any one can be utilized in a two different way by human beings ourselves.（改成our human beings 会不会更好些）

    Atomic energy is the best example to expalin it.Einstein helped us open a door to a energy wealth that is never going to be exhausted and offer us a perfect way to solve energy problems.But when this technology was used by human beings in a inappropriate way,the other opening door set free a monster-atomic bomb,the most dangerous weapon that created the most horrible tragedy in the second world war.Even though,we should not deny the greatness of this technology and the anticipated progress it will bring to us.

     Internet may be the most controversial technology we ever had（改成have） and totally changes our life,making it more convinient and bringing us loneliness.Nowdays the whole world is connected by it,and you almost can get any information in this digtital world.If want to read some book（s）,you can easily find it on the net but does not need to go to the library.If want to have a trip,you can check the plan ticket through the net but needs not（改成donont need） to go to the airport;even if want to go shopping,you can get any shopping information on the net and just need a call but not to go shopping youself.But when enjoying the convinience the net brings us,we also needs（去掉s） to endure troubles from who does not use the net in the wrong way.A new kind of entertainment-the online game gives us a lot of fun in our spare time.However some people,especially young persons,who indulges（去掉s） in it and can not live a normal life will not only hurt themselves but sadden their parents and families.The net provides us a channel to connect with the whole world but at the same time offers the bad hackers a channel to disturb others’ normal life or even commit crimes.Even though,can we deny the net raises our life to a higher level?The answer is surely no.（以上2段都在赞科技的好，有讲它不适当利用的不好）

   Admittedly,though some time the technology used（by） appropriate way also will bring some big trouhle.Neuclear power station seems to be a perfect way to utilize atomic energy,which can provide large amouts of power but produces little amout of waste.However,in fact,some accidents made this way not so perfect.The radiant leak leaded thousands of people dying from unname disease and its effects would not disappear in a long time;the explode of power station erased almost everything aroud it.Even though,such flaws can not impede the development of this kind of technology,just like the airport accidents would not stop us taking planes.

   In sum,no matter what problems the technology creats,our life indeed get（＋s） a great progress and the development of the technology will never stop.What we should do is to try our best to diminish the bad part when utilizing any new technology.

通篇文章语言挺通畅的，句式也多样化。

除了几处语法错外，整体感觉还不错