issue147 【米国有米】第十一次作业 多谢指教

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TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 572          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-23

提纲：
1．   总述观点，在一定程度上要做到传统与现代的结合
2．   现代知识的优点，更先进
3．   传统的优势，集中体现在更安全
4．   我们应该使两者结合，使其互补
5．   在某些特定的领域，两者是不能结合的
6．   我们应该在相对合适的情况下，使两者得到适当的结合

正文：
As we know, today's world is a modern world in which many new things coming out every day. Every aspect in our life can be called modernization. At the same time, tradition seems to be farer and farer to our daily life step by step. Some people say that tradition and modernization are incompatible, which can not combine together, but in my opinion, to some extent, tradition and modernization can company together to be good partners.

Modernization is very important to every aspect of our life. Modern, itself, has some characters to draw more attention of youth who are the strong power of the social development. As the development of the society and the improvement of the technology, "modern" is becoming a signal of "developed", "advanced". It means that modern things will have more advantages and more useful than the traditional ones, because the modern ones always work out by some modern, well-developed technology. So considering with the advantage of the modern technical, people will choose modernization.

While we saw the advantage of modernization, we should also concede that tradition also has its advantage. A long time treatment and examination will be tradition's powerful superiority. Because the traditional things are used and examined by many people through the past several hundreds of years, it will much safer than some new and modern ways. So the long-time examination is the best wealth of tradition. And also considering with this, many people are inclining to choose the traditional ways.

However, must one choose either tradition or modernization? After reviewing with life and society surrounding, I draw an answer--no. To some extent, tradition and modernization can combine together well. If they can be combined well and exert their own advantage, it will come to a new step of human development. This can be seen in many fields in our life. Pop music can take up with some traditional music element, in which way pop music can becoming more different and more wonderful; on the fashion show of some famous cloth-designer, you can draw many traditional technique in their most fashioned and most modern designation; Even in the modern management of companies, managers will take some experience from some traditional books, even in the books about strategies and strategics in war. So when tradition and modernization are combined, they can improve each other- tradition will be more advanced and modernization will be much safer.

And I also concede that in some especial fields, tradition and modernization should not combine together and even they can be combined, there will be many problems should be thought of. Just take education for an example. A student can be taught both some modern knowledge and some traditional thought. But a child can not be taught by both traditional and modern ways, because they are based on different methods. Modern education way is based on the method that freedom is the best prompting/arousal/encouragement in the growth of children. If you take the modern way to educate the children, you should give more and more freedom room to them. On the contrary, the traditional education believes that the strict and rigorous teaching will lead children to a successful achievement. So to some extent, tradition and modernization can not be combined together, and people should choose one which is suit to them and their children.

In sum, tradition and modernization have their own advantage and if we take good use of them, they can improve our life. In most aspects of our life, combination of them will become a higher level of our achievement. So we should use both tradition and modernization together, and get rid of the shortages in one thing with the advantage of the other thing. In this way, we can get a good combination with the tradition and modernization.

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TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 572          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-23

提纲：
1．   总述观点，在一定程度上要做到传统与现代的结合
2．   现代知识的优点，更先进
3．   传统的优势，集中体现在更安全
4．   我们应该使两者结合，使其互补
5．   在某些特定的领域，两者是不能结合的
6．   我们应该在相对合适的情况下，使两者得到适当的结合

正文：
As we know, today's world is a modern world in which many new things coming out every day. Every aspect in our life can be called modernization. At the same time, tradition seems to be farer(further) and farer(further) to(from) our daily life step by step(个人觉得step by step &further and further 有点重复，要么就step by step away 或者getting further and further 就好了). Some people say that tradition and modernization are incompatible, which can not combine together, but in my opinion, to some extent, tradition and modernization can company (company(vt.) with each other)together to be good partners.

Modernization is very important to every aspect of our life. Modern, itself, has some characters to draw more attention of youth who are the strong power of the social development. As the development of the society and the improvement of the technology, "modern" is becoming a signal of "developed"(and), "advanced". It means that modern things will have more advantages and (be) more useful than the traditional ones, because the modern ones always work out by some modern, well-developed technology. So considering with the advantage of the modern technical, people will choose modernization.

While we saw the advantage of modernization, we should also concede that tradition also has its advantage. A long time treatment and examination will be tradition's powerful superiority(the powerful superiority of tradition). Because the traditional things are used and examined by many people through the past several hundreds of years, it will much safer than some new and modern ways. So the long-time examination is the best wealth of tradition. And also considering with this, many people are inclining (inclne一般现在时好点) to choose the traditional ways.

However, must one choose either tradition or modernization? (这句转承得好好) After reviewing with life and society surrounding, I draw an answer—no (negative answer). To some extent, tradition and modernization can combine together well. If they can be combined well and exert their own advantage(s), it will come to a new step of human development. This can be seen in many fields in our life. Pop music can take up with some traditional music element, in which way pop music can becoming more different and more wonderful (这里不妨提及一下jazz和黑人folk music 的渊源); on the fashion show of some famous cloth-designer, you can draw many traditional technique in their most fashioned and most modern designation; Even in the modern management of companies, managers will take some experience from some traditional books, even in the books about strategies and strategics in war. So when tradition and modernization are combined, they can improve each other- tradition will be more advanced and modernization will be much safer.

And I also concede that in some especial fields, tradition and modernization should not combine together and even they can be combined, there will be many problems should be thought of. Just take education for an example. A student can be taught both some modern knowledge and some traditional thought. But a child can not be taught by both traditional and modern ways (似乎knowledge and ways不是对应得很好), because they are based on different methods. Modern education way(idea 教育理念也许会好一点) is based on the method that freedom is the best prompting/arousal/encouragement (首尾两个词都可以，aarousal好像不是很合适) in the growth of children. If you take the modern way to educate the children, you should give more and more freedom room (freedom or space) to them. On the contrary, the traditional education believes that (the不用) strict and rigorous teaching will lead children to a successful achievement. So to some extent, tradition and modernization can not be combined together, and people should choose one which is suit to them and their children.

In sum, tradition and modernization have their own advantage and if we take good use of them, they can improve our life (constructive to our life?). In most aspects of our life, combination of them will become a higher level of our achievement. So we should use both tradition and modernization together, and get rid of the shortages in one thing with the advantage of the other thing. In this way, we can get a good combination with the tradition and modernization.

Summary Comment:
1.        45分钟570＋ 字数，厉害
2.        内容充实，也有例子支持
3.        条理清晰，逻辑发展很自然
4.        觉得既然楼主能在45分钟内写570多个字，可以得话，何不少些几十个字，留点时间检查呢？
5.        不少将来时用will的地方，如果改would的话，感觉会客观点，用过多用will的话，会有点绝对的感觉