issue41(南智组sisokia第十九次作业)

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[ 本帖最后由 sisokia 于 2007-2-7 14:11 编辑 ]

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每段之间要空行！

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The speaker maintains that nonmainstream areas , like astrology, paranormal pursuits and physic exert an notable effect on human for their physical acquirement. in my view, the nonmainstream indeed help humans to place themselves into a self-center world, which many experiences or facts can be given presentation and explanation in some sense while mainstream science can no rationally. While, this feature of unwarranted assumption, or even so-called verify without any evidence in nonmainstream circle, did provide a opportunity for who disobey morality to fabricate so-called truth pursuing the economical benefit from innocent people that believes in the “truth”brutally.

Admittedly, the nonmainstream of areas own their necessity in reality that many things can not be given a certain answer in universal conception（主流领域在现实中有他们的必要性，很多事情不能用一定的答案来回答。这两个短句之间是什么关系，怎么用that连接呢）. Undeniable, human-being is mere one small life-form in vast universe, maybe like a grain of sand in a desert, whose power and position both indicate the unrealistic dominant role in universe. Hence, many novelty or unexplainable facts in science have to be placed in the other field—nonmainstream of areas. Still, it is divine to concede（concede是退一步说，让步的意思，不合适） the facts that many people are in the midst of suffering from a dismaying six-sense feeling when their relatives will be mortal. Facing so many unresolved inquiry,These exploring for soul and physical question are barely explained in nonmainstream way. 这一段的主题：是很多事情科学是不能解释的。但是我觉得题目要你论证的非主流领域的作用到底是至关重要的还是别的，所以，没有必要用一段来说这个。

Even the non-mainstream areas are unable to offer persuasive statistic to support their argument. It is instrumental in delighting people and extricate peolple from regret and troubles subconsciously in some extent. In astrology, it support the notion of lucky day and hapless day for different people in constellations. Many people determine their affairs of importance in lucky day. To surprise, most of people deal with their affairs smoothly, and almost led to a agreeable result. The reason for the right luck , in my opinion, great attribute to the mood in correct state but the very possible effect for the lucky day themselves. lucky day adds confidence to people who will have a interview, lucky day help display the much more gorgeous charming to singers who have a performance.. it is the “luck” word that impel people from nervous and less-confidence, and mobilize people to endearvor to do anything without troubles conflicted.（这段是些非主流领域的好处，挺好的，）

Nevertheless, based on the hardly agitated faith in the fortune-telling, some people adhere to his opinion so radical that they lose intellect to mess about individual issues. Faced with a period of true love nearly without any flaws, a girl , one of my classmate, posed the breakup by default. The only reason is so simple and somewhat absurd---the concellatation of her boyfriend does not match with hers as the astronogy indicated. What a pity if a girl draw much more attention on the colletation than her boyfriend himself and defy the true love by unwarranted unmatched forecast.  （这段的论据不充分，坏处）  

Besides, the nonstream areas inflict on potential harm in losing people’s motivation and activation to transform their so-called doomed fate misfortune. Actually , one of the significance for people who believed in these areas is to help people make choices when in dilemma, or in other words, anticipate the future in diverse factors. Once people believed the fortune-telling in strong faith, it is less likely to give way from which they will be haunted by. Maybe people’s intense faith in being a businessman of success will be greatly stuck down by the unpleasant future in fortune—telling, which lead him to transform his career into other unavailable one reluctantly.  While, in fact, without the forwards anticipation in unmainstream area, most possibly the man will be able to get closer with success and invariablyengage in his favourite career in delight.

Just in light of the people whose decision can be easily diverted by others above mentioned, many pseudoscience created by swindler could show their strikeries without upset. Falunkong, for example, is a apparently evidence, which not only aroused many members of the group ill—phychicl, but also arise the whole nation to suffer from a period of disturbance.  This worthless worship for folk science should certainly be refused, no matter how strong faith you believe in nonstream areas.（这个三段都写非主流领域的坏处，虽然是不同的坏处吧，但4和5都是讲对个人的坏处，可以和成一段，第6段讲个人和社会，可以着重于社会，法轮功的例子挺好的，我怎么没有想到呢^_^）

In general, I claim that the non-stream streams pursuits is ought to be disseminated to inspire and mobilize people’s enthusiasm to live a higher-quality life as long as erratic or radical guidance can be  wore off. Nonstreams make up the vanity of science and of course, should not been equated with assumption disobeying the scientific theory, which become the way to obtain considerable benefit with cheat for swindler.


我觉得很多句子用词看不懂，用法也有问题，好好斟酌下，还有句子结构。
不过总的来说，条理很清楚，稍微整合一下就更好了。

[ 本帖最后由 qqwuweiyi 于 2007-2-1 22:32 编辑 ]