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第一次issue,原来前人说写到吐血真不是忽悠，内伤简直，感谢拍砖的贵人咯～～～

题目：ISSUE 51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

Issue提纲
1 学生生来是不同的，需要在他有天赋的方面加以引导，才能有所成。
2兴趣是激发人们学习的源泉，尤其对于孩子，兴趣可以让他们走的更远。
3但是由于学生数目的庞大为每个学生量身定做计划是不可行的，但是可以用选修来改善。


Can a student who has gotten an individual education become more useful than traditional taught ones? In my view, it will be. Nowadays we search for more people who has great achievement in his own research area, like those celebrities in Hollywood, can they improve their ability during full aspect learning? God create human being as individual and give us different talent. So in that case from all the profession such as business and science we know lots of experts who cannot adopt the teacher-oriented teach method turning to self-study.

Neither Gates nor Einstein is anybody unknown. When Einstein was young, he was always asking some strange question the teacher cannot answer him. So teachers persuaded him to give up his life in school. At that time all the teachers thought he was clumsy, nevertheless we all saw the result Einstein got Nobel price and was one of the best scientists in twentieth century. As well as Eistein, Gates are also left school even though the decision was made by himself. After he left Harvard he established Microsoft which company produce windows operating system and attain a unbelievable success. Both of the two great people have not achieved the regular curriculums but get the career's peak, so it can be seen from the case that traditional lessons may not fit the entire of student especially those talent ones.

Like the skills the children born with, interest can also help them to learn more. When child is one year old, parents always arrange a little test: they will put several things on the bed like book, money, pen etc. And then let the child to choose. If the child chose the book parents think he/she will become a professor, if it is the pen he/she will be a writer, of cause he/she maybe doing business in the future if he get the money. Even though it just a little game but we can see a theory from it: the interests push us going. Why he/she chose that is only because he/she like it. So we can image that if we learn the things we have passion, we would like pay a deluge of attention on, will much better than others on this field. Like Gates and Einstein we can provide our own faculty to effect the world on improving the science and make the life more convenient.

So in order to arouse all the students' talent will we need to conceive different education plan for every student? It is obviously impossible. We don not have enough teacher to teach them personally, we don not have the money to support this idea and we don not need to do this. To the contrast a absolute individual and follow the interest teaching plan also have a mass of problems for instance: the fundamental subject like math is the basic lessons, but some student do not feel it attractive. In the unique education they may reject to learn those if so it will influence other subjects result in learning well nothing. It seems specifically designed education cannot come true, nonetheless, we can suggest students attain minor lessons and elective lessons to solve this question. A student whose major is advertising can choose math to be is minor, the same like that a person studying math can elect art courses to broaden his insight.

To sum up, students have their own thinking and know what are they want. The traditional teaching method misunderstood many great people and we must to change it. Using minor and elective lessons can make education more effective and powerful. It will no longer let us lose a genius and can make common people changing to outstanding ones.

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Can a student who has gotten an individual education become more useful换个词可能好点than traditional taught ones? In my view, it will be. Nowadays we search for more people who has great achievement in his own research area, like those celebrities in Hollywood, can they improve their ability during full aspect learning? God create 是不是用单数名词好点，不太确定，因为我没有用过godhuman being as individual and give us different talent. 不过这句话有点不太科学, 考虑用另一种方式表达“人们天赋不同”这个意思So in that case from all the profession such as business and science we know lots of experts who cannot adopt the teacher-oriented teach method turning to self-study.

开头写写TS会妥当一点Neither Gates nor Einstein is anybody unknown. 这句话并到下句或者改成典型的例证型过渡句 When Einstein was young, he was always asking some strange question the teacher cannot answer him. So teachers persuaded him to give up his life in school. At that time all the teachers thought he was clumsy, nevertheless we all saw the result Einstein got Nobel price and was one of the best scientists in twentieth century. 例子有点太长，最好例子简洁，重视透彻的分析As well as Eistein, Gates are also left school even though the decision was made by himself. After he left Harvard he established Microsoft which company produce windows operating system and attain a unbelievable success. Both of the two great people have not achieved the regular curriculums but get the career's peak, so it can be seen from the case that traditional lessons may not fit the entire of student especially those talent ones. 其实两个人的经历相似，不如合并一下，例子简洁，重要的是要分析。这段话2/3都在举例，多分析一些更能体现自己的实力

Like the skills the children born with, interest can also help them to learn more. 这句话隐含天生的skills 能help children learn more, 过渡句的前半句是概括前文的大意，但是这里和上一段话的中心意思不太相符When child is one year old, parents always arrange a little test: they will put several things on the bed like book, money, pen etc. And then let the child to choose. If the child chose the book parents think he/she will become a professor, if it is the pen he/she will be a writer, of cause he/she maybe doing business in the future if he get the money. 还是，例子减肥啊Even though it just a little game but we can see a theory from it: the interests push us going. Why he/she chose that is only because he/she like it. So we can image that if we learn the things we have passion, we would like pay a deluge of attention on, will much better than others on this field. Like Gates and Einstein we can provide our own faculty to effect the world on improving the science and make the life more convenient. 这段前面的例子最好篇幅少点，重点落在讨论Interest如何促进学习

So in order to arouse all the students' talent will we need to conceive different education plan for every student? It is obviously impossible. We don not 改成do not have enough teacher teachersto teach them personally,两个句子要分开哦，或者合并成复句 we don not 改成do not have the money to support this idea and we don not 改成do not need to do this. 这里为什么加一句我们不需要这样做？To the contrast a absolute考虑换词 individual and follow the interest 换词 teaching plan also have a mass of problems for instance: the fundamental subject like math is the basic lessons, but some student do not feel it attractive. In the unique education they may reject to learn those if so it will influence other subjects result in learning well nothing. 有点不懂，不太顺It seems specifically designed education cannot come true, nonetheless, we can suggest students attain minor换词 lessons and elective lessons to solve this question. A student whose major is advertising can choose math to be is minor, the same like that a person studying math can elect art courses to broaden his insight.

To sum up, students have their own thinking and know what are they want. The traditional teaching method misunderstood many great people and we must 删to change it. Using minor and elective lessons can make education more effective and powerful. It will no longer let us lose a genius and can make common people changingmake sb do sth. to outstanding ones.

例子不够简洁，加强分析例子的力度，注意过渡，用词最好推敲一下，还有一些词语搭配的语法错误应当尽量避免。
话说的直，请不要生气啊～～以后还请多多指教
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感激不尽啊，我会修改的，多谢～共勉拉