issue56 [chasing for 6小组]第二次作业 有拍必回

susan8940UID: 160449

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 372          TIME: 0:47:17          DATE: 2007-2-6

When it comes to whether governments should pay more attention to immediate problems or not, I fully support the author's viewpoint. Because immediate problems, in most cases, are the direct causes of the anticipated problems of the future, of course we ought to take more efforts to solve it. Nevertheless, it does not mean that there is no need to try to solve problems of the future.

First of all, as we all know, today's problems usually lead to that of the future. Take for example the environmental problems, it is just because more and more cars and factories today, which are producing countless harmful gases and polluted chemical substances, that make our environment worse and worse, which is largely possible to shorten the natural resourses, water and the forth, necessary for the future survival of our human beings. That is why governments and civils focus more on trying their best to make all these problems of today being solved.

Additionally, most problems of today directly harm our living standard or development of our society. If we do not take effective measurments to solve them, our immediate needs may not be able to meet, not to say solve problems of the future. For instance, the horrible desease SARS killed handreds of people in China when it comes, and millions of other lives would be in danger if it is not successfully cured. In such case, how can we put such urgent problem behind and discuss something far behind like extinction of elephants?

Finally, I should admit that focusing more on immediate problems does not necessarily mean completely neglect future problems, which will surely affect us as well, just by times. As mentioned above, extinction of animals is becoming a biger poblem of the future. Once some animals, even if just one kind, disappeared, more and more animals would defenitely die because of it, thus the demage of  the food chain. Consequently, the extinction of our human beings is totally unavoidable. So, be ware of the possible problems of future and try to control it by now is obviously significant.

In conclusion, governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today, and meanwhile, pay appropriate attention to problems of the future.

看来得再写一段才够字数了．．．或者论证上怎么更充实呢？？

桃太郎UID: 2275108

占位,晚上回来看~
When it comes to whether governments should pay more attention to immediate problems or not, I fully support the author's viewpoint(感觉上个人观点放在段末比较好). Because immediate problems, in most cases, are the direct causes of the anticipated problems of the future, of course we ought to take more efforts to solve it. Nevertheless, it does not mean that there is no need to try to solve problems of the future.
First of all, as we all know, today's problems usually lead to that of the future. Take for example the environmental problems, it is just because (because of)more and more cars and factories today, which are producing countless harmful gases and polluted chemical substances, that make our environment worse and worse, which is largely possible to shorten the natural resourses(resources), water and the forth, necessary for the future survival ()of our human beings. That is why governments and civils(不明白这个单词想说什么…civils拼写错误) focus more on trying their best to make all these problems of today being solved.
Additionally, most problems of today directly harm our living standard or development of our society. If we do not take effective measurments(measurement) to solve them, our immediate needs may not be able to meet(这个有被动的意思么?), not to say solve problems of the future. For instance, the horrible desease(disease) SARS killed handreds(hundreds) of people in China when it comes, and millions of other lives would be in danger if it is not successfully cured. In such case, how can we put such urgent problem behind and discuss something far behind like extinction of elephants?
Finally, I should admit that focusing more on immediate problems does not necessarily mean completely neglect future problems, which will surely affect us as well, just by times. As mentioned above, extinction of animals is becoming a biger poblem(bigger problem) of the future. Once some animals, even if just one kind, disappeared, more and more animals would defenitely(definitely) die because of it, thus the demage(damage) of  the food chain. Consequently, the extinction of our human beings is totally unavoidable. So, be ware of the possible problems of future and try to control it by now is obviously significant.
In conclusion, governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today, and meanwhile, pay appropriate attention to problems of the future.
总体评价一下,感觉这篇文章和上篇文章的语言上有点差距…不知道是例子不充分还是怎么回事,总体结构上是两段正面一段负面的结构,尝试用了不少复杂句,例子比较简单,如果多举些例子或者把例子说的详细些就更好了~

[ 本帖最后由 桃太郎 于 2007-2-9 23:04 编辑 ]

rixiaohanUID: 2291600

When it comes to whether governments should pay more attention to immediate problems or not, I fully support the author's viewpoint. Because immediate problems, in most cases, are the direct causes of the anticipated problems of the future, of course we ought to take more efforts to solve it. Nevertheless, it does not mean that there is no need to try to solve problems of the future.First of all, as we all know, today's problems usually lead to that of the future. Take for example（我用google 在网页上搜了一下，一般用：take，for example, …,which …或 take for example this:……或take for example the…。所以我认为it is应变为It is好像更符合美语习惯，也可能是我不知变通，还请多指教。） the environmental problems, it is just because more and more cars and factories today, which are producing countless harmful gases and polluted chemical substances, that（that 前不可加，）make our environment worse and worse, which is largely possible to shorten the natural resourses（resources）, water and the forth（and so forth?）, necessary for the future survival of our human beings(human beings’ survival). That is why governments and civils(citizens) focus more on trying their best to make all these problems of today being solved(我认为这里用主动比较好，make是一个不是很严谨的词，在GRE中最好不要随便用，不过在实在不知道用什么的时候可用).Additionally, most problems of today directly harm our living standard or development of our society. If we do not take effective measurments（measurements） to solve them, our immediate needs may not be able to meet, not to say solve problems of the future. For instance, the horrible desease (disease) SARS killed handreds (hundreds) of people in China when it comes, and millions of other lives would be in danger if it is not successfully cured(我认为这是一个很好的例子，可以在说的详细一些). In such case, how can we put such urgent problem behind and discuss something far behind（为了避免两个behind 重复，前面的是不是可以改成put …… away 之类的短语） like extinction of elephants（我认为extinction of elephants 和SARS是俩方面的例子，不如换一个由SARS引起的比较远问题，如SARS带来的经济倒退或石油持续涨价（此为一个瑞士学家说的，我也不知道为什么，应该可以归结为蝴蝶效应the butterfly effect））?Finally, I should admit that focusing more on immediate problems does not necessarily (immediate 本身就有necessarily 的意思，immediate 最好换一个词比如present)mean completely neglect future problems, which will surely affect us as well, just by times. As mentioned above(因为前面我把大象的改了，前提是你认为我该得有理的话，这里要换一个过渡词), extinction of animals is becoming a biger（bigger）（我认为还是换个词serious，severe之类的） poblem（problem） of the future. Once some animals, even if just one kind, disappeared, more and more animals would defenitely（definitely）die(died) because of it, thus the demage（damage） of  the food chain. Consequently, the extinction of our human beings is totally unavoidable. So, be ware aware)f the possible problems of future and try to control it by now is obviously significant.In conclusion, governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today, and meanwhile, pay appropriate attention to problems of the future.（此段可以把两个方面的理由说明一下，显得更加完整和有说服力）