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ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."

The assertion given by the author could be divided into two parts. The first is machines will never be cleverer than the human mind and the second is machines are the tools of human minds. I agree with the second point in the author's assertion, while I cannot reach the same opinion with the former point.

In past time, ancient people had already learned how to use stone as tools. With the development of human minds and the innovation of technology, different kinds of machines appeared in the world and helped people's work a lot. The first machine was without doubt invented by human being and from that time, the relationship between human minds and the machines is often used in movies or books. In the movie-Me and Robert, the scientist invented the more advanced Robert which even had the thought and passion as a human being and the Robert could also create other Roberts in different use. However, this is only a movie. It is confessed that nowadays machines can create other machines; for example, the car factory may use different kinds of machines in fixing different parts of a car which makes up the whole final car. But all machines cannot make use of other tools unless people give them the demand or control them to do the work. What kinds of job they should do or which tools they would make use of is all settled by human being. To this extent, they are only the tools of human beings and used to make up other tools which also serve the use of human beings.

However, whether the human mind will always be superior to machines is questionable. The author thinks that because human invent the machines and could make use of them, their minds will always be superior to machines. No direct relationship between these two facts. The computer, which is invented by human being, now its calculate and analysis ability have far been superior than human being. In the architecture area, it takes people several months or years to calculate the precise structure of a building, yet if it is not suitable for the actual use of the building, all work might have no use. Take the gym building built for the 2008 Olympic Games in Beijing for example. The engineers first made a mold of the gym and calculated the structure in the computer, and finally successfully made up a nettle-like gym, which was called the miracle in the architecture history.

In sum, it is a fact that machines are tools of human minds and its purpose is to serve human beings. However, that human create machines has no causal relationship with the fact that the human mind will always be superior to machines. Moreover, in several parts the ability of machines has already been superexcellence beyond human minds. The chess play between computer and human beings is the best evidence.
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(咱可先说好了阿,从今晚后恭维的话我一句不讲~)
The assertion given by the author could be divided into two parts. The first is machines will never be cleverer than the human mind(这里要加个逗号吧?) and the second is machines are the tools of human minds. I agree with the second point in the author's assertion, while I cannot reach the same opinion with the former point.

In past time, ancient people had already learned how to use stone as tools. With the development of human minds and the innovation of technology, different kinds of machines appeared in the world and helped people's work a lot. The first machine was without doubt invented by human being and from that time,(这个可能引起歧义,改为human being, and from that time the relationship…… 纯属个人意见,未经愈发查实,仅供参考) the relationship between human minds and the machines is often used in movies or books. In the movie-Me and Robert, the scientist invented the more advanced Robert which even had the thought and passion as a human being(which has a more agile注这个词的比较级弄不准了, sturdy and endurable body, even the thought and passion as a human being 前面应该加点对physical 的描述) and the Robert could also create other Roberts in different use(还是uses? ). However, this is (中式英语 建议 It is)only a movie. It is confessed that nowadays machines can create other machines; for example, the car factory may use different kinds of machines in fixing different parts of a car which makes up the whole final car. But all machines cannot make use of other tools unless people give them the demand or control them to do the work. What kinds of job they should do or which tools they would make use of is all settled by human being. To this extent, they are only the tools of human beings and used to make up other tools which also serve the use of (the use of 还是去掉吧……)human beings.

However, whether the human mind will always be superior to machines is questionable. The author thinks that because human invent the machines and could make use of them, their(这两个词代表不同的东西,连在一起会有歧义吧?) minds will always be superior to machines. No direct relationship between these two facts. (这个有疑问,这句没谓语行么?没错的话是不是也太口语化了) The computer, which is invented by human being, now its calculate and analysis ability have far been superior than(没记错的话superior 后面只能跟to 你再查一查。另外这句毛病很重我就不细说了,回头自己在看看 我改为The calculating and analyizing ability of computer, invented by human being, have ……) human being. In the architecture area, it takes people several months or years to calculate the precise structure of a building, yet if it is not suitable for the actual use of the building, all work might have no use. Take the gym building built for the 2008 Olympic Games in Beijing for example. The engineers first made a mold of the gym and calculated the structure in the computer, and finally successfully made up a nettle-like gym, which was called the miracle in the architecture history. (例子方向是对的,但是所描述的有些偏离了。要使它能明确的证明论点。应该强调一下the machine such as computer 在其中的作用吧)

In sum, it is a fact that machines are tools of human minds and its purpose is to serve human beings. However, that human create machines(应该用human creating machines 吧?) has no causal relationship with the fact that the human mind will always be superior to machines. Moreover, in several parts the ability of machines has already been superexcellence(在webster里没查到这个词) beyond human minds. The chess play between computer and human beings is the best evidence. (最后添的这个更像是个有力的例子而不想是应该出现在最后一段里的总结性结论)
(总述,由于很困了,对这篇的改动可能很多是错的,或者是有争议的。望你再仔细的查看,对于一些我写的句子也没有什么质量,不要笑我,也就是个抛砖引玉的作用了。Fighting!!)
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