issue36 [AWB小组] 第十一次作业

dennis1230UID: 2247126

36."The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, but not their contemporaries."
基本赞成
个人的伟大之处，相比于同时代的人们，更多地被后人发现进而追捧

1 后人能够对前人进行相对客观和公平的评价。 后人的评价由于比前人少了一些利于冲突，和舆论影响，因此显得更加客观，同时后人有了更加丰富的知识
同时能够按照对历史发展的影响 判断得失
例子 古希腊几何学家Apollonius总结了Conics introduced the terms parabola, ellipse and hyperbola，一千八百年后由德国天文学家开普 勒将其应用于行星轨道理论。
Cervantes's Don Quixote
2 有些人的作品会超前与时代的发展，因此得不到同时期的正统思想的认可，于是产生了种种不幸
例子：Van Gogh； 哥白尼
3 个人高尚的情操；政治影响；科学事业的贡献 往往能够被同时代的人所认同，进而影响后人
例子：华盛顿拒绝当皇帝，保证了美国的民主；一些科学，方面的影响能够被同时代的人们认可 例子：Einstain;  Bill Gates; Mezart; Picasso cubism；

In the long-term development of history, there are a large amount of celebrities bring the invaluable knowledge and achievements. To some degree, I agree with the speaker's point of view; The Individuals can be regarded greatness, for the right and responsibility of those later who have the more affluence knowledge and more impartial view than their contemporaries.

To begin with, ones who live after the celebrities can value the greatness of them in an objective measure and decided with affluence knowledge. Firstly, for any event happened in certain historic background, it is unavoidable that the contemporaries more or less were influenced by that time or mainstream culture. Therefore modern public can progress a more equally evaluation than contemporary. Secondly, ones, who live in the later time, can treat the greatness of individuals as segments of the moving river of well-developed history. And then, it is more likely to determinate whether it is benefit to our society and makes a properly judgment on individuals. For example, Apollonius, the ancient Greek mathematician who wrote a book named Conics, introduced the terms parabola, ellipse and hyperbola. The theory did not came into practice in his time, but 1800 years later, it worked on the theory of star’s movement by German astronomer Kapolei. Although Apollonius' contemporaries may not recognize his great effect, the later eventually proved his great contribution. In thus, the ones later can make an imparity and definite assessments  

On the other hand, sometimes, their outstanding works excess the ability of understanding of their contemporaries. Experience tells us, ignorance always leads to misunderstand. Van Gogh, two of whose paintings have broken all records in selling, sold only one painting during his lifetime, and when his expressionism was accepted by the public, he had already died. Furthermore, the great works or discoveries sometimes conflict with authority. Since Copernicus's heliocentric system would impair and replace the Geocentric theory, Roman Catholicism made a command in order to forbid publishing his work. In most situation, all of such unfortunately events happened in the era in which mainstream did not affirm to the latest opinions and discoveries.

Admittedly, some facets, which include indignity feature, the political influence and the scientific contribution, are more likely to be recognized by the contemporaries. This kind of attainments spurs human's spirits, advances quality of persons' lives. Benjamin Franklin erected a indigent figure of what a person could be; Washington, who rejected suggestion to become the emperor of USA, protected democracy from overriding; Einstein established the theory of relativity and gained the Nobel Prize; Bill Gates not only creates a myth of software industry, but also is too generous to donate with people who need help. All mentioned above, have obtain public recognition and are verified their greatness.

In conclusion, ones who live in the later age have the decisive functions on determine the greatness of individuals, and in some extent, the contemporaries also contribute to the praise, even if both of them have their own disadvantage.

word 495
Thanks~~:handshake

amblueUID: 2264518

In the long-term development of history, there are a large amount of celebrities bring (the) invaluable knowledge and achievements. To some degree, I agree with the speaker's point of view;/：The Individuals can be regarded greatness/ regarded as great, for the right and responsibility of those later who have (the) more affluence/affluent[词性的问题要注意！] knowledge and more impartial[好词] view than their contemporaries. To begin with, ones who live after the celebrities can value the greatness of them in an objective measure and decided/decide[时态一致] with affluence/affluent knowledge.

Firstly, for any event happened in[background能搭配in么？查了字典，好像通常使用against，个人意见] certain historic background, it is unavoidable that (the) contemporaries more or less were influenced by that time or mainstream culture. Therefore modern public can progress[这里progress当什么意思讲呢？] a more equally(adv.)/equal evaluation than contemporary/ies. Secondly, ones, who live in the later time, can treat the greatness of individuals as segments of the moving river of well-developed history[Excellent!]. And then, it is more likely to determinate(adj.)/determine whether it is benefit to our society and make(s)[时态一致] a properly(adv.)/proper judgment on individuals. For example, Apollonius, the ancient Greek mathematician who wrote a book named Conics, introduced the terms parabola, ellipse and hyperbola[上帝啊！强！我的脑袋废掉了都不会想出数学的例子…]. The theory did not came into practice in his time, but 1800 years later, it worked on the theory of star’s movement by[?这句是否应该是被动句？] German astronomer Kapolei. Although Apollonius' contemporaries may not recognize his great effect, the later eventually proved his great contribution. In thus[？有这种用法么], the ones later can make an imparity/impartial?[另，imparity是名词“不平等”，impartial的名次形式为impartiality] and definite assessments

On the other hand, sometimes, their outstanding works excess(adj./n.)/exceed the ability of understanding of their contemporaries. Experience tells us, ignorance always leads to misunderstand. Van Gogh, two of whose paintings have broken all records in selling, sold only one painting during his lifetime,/;[一句话两个主语两个谓语动词]and when his expressionism was accepted by the public, he had already died. Furthermore, the great works or discoveries sometimes conflict with authority. Since Copernicus's heliocentric system would impair and replace the Geocentric theory[强！学习ing], Roman Catholicism made a command in order to forbid publishing his work. In most situation, all of such unfortunately(adv.)/unfortunate events happened in the era in which mainstream did not affirm (to)[affirm做肯定讲的时候是及物动词，直接跟宾语或者从句] the latest opinions and discoveries.

Admittedly, some facets, which include indignity feature, the political influence and the scientific contribution, are more likely to be recognized by (the)[不需要特指] contemporaries. This kind of attainments spurs human('s) spirits, advances quality of persons' lives. Benjamin Franklin erected[这个词通常用于客观事物，如建筑物的建立或树立，建议用set up] a/an indigent[贫穷的？] figure of what a person could be; Washington, who rejected suggestion to become the emperor of USA, protected democracy from overriding(adj.最重要的，压倒一切的)[你是想用“推翻”么？建议overthrow]; Einstein established the theory of relativity and gained the Nobel Prize; Bill Gates not only creates a myth of software industry, but also is too generous to donate with people who need help[too…to…句型的意思是太…而不能…，而且not only,but also句型两句话应该是同样的形式，都跟形容词或都接动词等].

All mentioned above, have obtain/obtained public recognition and (are)[又是一句话两个动词…] verified their greatness. In conclusion, ones who live in the later age have the decisive functions on/of determine the greatness of individuals[这句话翻译出来是不是有些重复：对决定个人的伟大有决定性的作用], and in/to some extent, (the) contemporaries also contribute to the praise, even if both of them have their own disadvantage.

整篇文章结构清晰，论证充分，有很多闪光句型，赞！我要好好学习！然而，语法错误过多，影响理解。希望以后写作的时候多加注意！

[ 本帖最后由 amblue 于 2007-3-14 12:10 编辑 ]

dennis1230UID: 2247126

很多词性和语法错误下次一定注意，自己改的时候再认真点，word的自动纠错真是
override记得红宝里面有践踏的意思，所以就用了
数学的例子我找了老长时间了
:handshake  谢谢

gracewx626UID: 2311628

a large amount ---a huge amout比较常见

......the ancient Greek mathematician who wrote a book named Conics/Conics...... 书名儿要么是斜体字，要么要underline.因为英文中没有书名号儿。

On the other hand, sometimes, their outstanding works excess the ability of understanding of their contemporaries.  ---their outstanding works exceed the capability of their contemporaries.

ignorance always leads to misunderstand(v)--misunderstanding