ARGUMENT106 VIVIEN 4.2 作业

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In this argument, the author concludes that  people in Parkville (P) should stoporganizing athletic competition for children under nine. The author cites someevidences to support his conclusion. But as discussed bellow, the evidencescited by the author suffers from a lot of critical flaws and the assertiondepend on it is therefore unconvincing.

First of all, the author falsely infer children under nineparticipated in softball and soccer in P suffers serious injuries from that80000 children suffers injuries in the whole country. The author overlooks thepossibility that these 80000 injured children are all in other areas in thecountry but the children of  P undernine participated in softball and soccer have not injuries or few injuries.Without accounting this possibility, it is folly to conclude that children in Psuffers a lot of injuries.

Second, the study cited by the author to demonstrate hisconclusion suffers several flaws. On one hand, the author did not provideinformation that how many children had been interviewed. It is possible thatonly 5 children had been interviewed and these five children feel that theyhave serious pressure from coaches and parents to win games but all otherchildren did not have the same feeling. On the other hand, even most childrenfelt great pressure, the result of this interview can only represent theconditions of some major cities. The author give not information aboutchildren's pressure feeling in other areas except some major cities. Since theflaws in the study cited by the author, we can not believe that children of Punder 9 also suffers serious pressure from coaches and parents.

Finally, Even children under nine participated in softballand soccer in P had great pressure from coaches and parents to win the gamesand suffered from injuries seriously, the author should not hastily concludethat all the athletic competitions for children under nine in P should bestopped. Because the author provided no evidences to justify that otherathletic competitions except softball and soccer are harmful to children undernine. Lacking detailed analysis of all factors, it is unreasonable to stop allsports competitions for children under nine.

In summary, the conclusion reached in this argument is notwell supported. To make this argument more persuasive, the author shouldprovide more concrete evidences to demonstrate that children of P under ninesuffers serious injuries and pressure from softball and soccer competitions. Tobetter access the argument, the author need to prove that participating in allthe athletic competitions give more harm than benefit for children of  P under nine.

songxjtuUID：2253904

In this argument, the author concludes that people in Parkville (P) should stop organizing athletic competition for children under nine. The author cites some evidences to support his conclusion. But as discussed bellow, the evidences cited by the author suffers from a lot of critical flaws and the assertion depend on it is therefore unconvincing.(句法错了但不知道怎么改好些)

First of all, the author falsely infer(infers) children under nine participated in softball and soccer in P suffers serious injuries from that80000 children suffers injuries in the whole country. The author overlooks the possibility that these 80000 injured children are all in other areas in the country but the children of  P undernine participated in softball and soccer have not injuries or few injuries. Without accounting this possibility, it is folly to conclude that children in P suffers(suffer) from a lot of  injuries.

Second, the study cited by the author to demonstrate his conclusion suffers several flaws. On one hand, the author did not provide information that how many children had been interviewed. It is possible that only 5 children had been interviewed and these five children feel that they have serious pressure from coaches and parents to win games but all other children did not have the same feeling. On the other hand, even if most children felt great pressure, the result of this interview can only represent the conditions of some major cities. The author give(s) not information about children’s pressure feeling in other areas except some major cities.Since the flaws in the study cited by the author, we can not believe that children of P under 9 also suffers serious pressure from coaches and parents.

Finally, even children under nine participated in softball and soccer in P had great pressure from coaches and parents to win the games and suffered from injuries seriously, the author should not hastily conclude that all the athletic competitions for children under nine in P should be stopped. Because the author provided no evidences to justify that other athletic competitions except softball and soccer are harmful to children under nine. Lacking detailed analysis of all factors, it is unreasonable to stop all sports competitions for children under nine.

In summary, the conclusion reached in this argument is not well supported. To make this argument more persuasive, the author should provide more concrete evidences to demonstrate that children of P under nine suffers serious injuries and pressure from softball and soccer competitions. To better access the argument, the author need(needs) to prove that participating in all the athletic competitions give more harm than benefit for children of  P under nine.

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