issue130 【0710G superstar小组】第四次作业

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People often say that children are the future of our society, whose qualities and characters  determine the destiny of society. Thus, the way that children are raised by adults and educators are important, which helps children to have the ability of independent thinking, being composed when facing chaos and having the creativity to develop the whole society to a new level. Socialization of children are very important for their growth, along with many other kinds of abilities and qualities.

During the thousands of year's period of humans' society, there is a permanent rule that the society is controlled by generation and generation, the children in one period definitely would become the governors after several decades, which is just like that the seeds under the ground  in spring will inevitably become mature crops in fall. Children are going to come into the society and make contributions and influence to the society in every field such as politics, education, economy and science, which determine the fate of the society in  tomorrow. Because no one can work and live forever, additionally that there is little room for development if the society is controlled and managed all by old people, it is important and necessary for the children to take place of their when they grow up.

Since the children are determination of the destiny of society, the education and skills the y accept is fatal to their growth and develop, which consequently determine the society's future. This let me cannot help to mention the instance of seeds again. There is an old saying that Sow seed of melon, receive melon, while sow seed of bean, receive bean. The way adults introduce the children and the knowledge and virtues that they are imparted with is significant to that whether these children--adults in tomorrow-- will bring about a better society. How children are socialized is one of the most important factors that will affect the destiny of the society, which has many relationship with the unity, conformity and also the harmony of the society. As the children today are often the sole child in the family, who lack the communication and interaction with brothers and sisters, it is totally possible to result the isolation and excessive independence on present children. Nevertheless, in this modern age full of competitions and challenges, it is necessary for people to have the idea of cooperation and team work, which can be raised by the process of socialization. Moreover, besides the socialization, educators should not ignore other qualities and abilities that should be introduced to the children such as common senses and knowledge, virtues of integrity and honesty, intellect skills and creative thoughts, etc, thus children will become more qualified to bring about a better society.

Although there are many good manners and qualities that adults today have found the best way to offer to children, who can help to contribute to a better society, we cannot deny that there will be numerous of conditions and difficulties that educators today cannot anticipate, which demands children to deal with all by themselves when they grow up. And the best way to raise children is to cultivate their ability to solve problems flexibly, which is badly demanded in present education, for many teachers and parent only know to teach children deal with one thing of one kinds of things rather than to cultivate their independent ability to deal with everything. Therefore, educator are also need to find the best and most proper way to raise and introduce children so that they can really have the  ability to build up the future world.

As I have mentioned above, socialization is the determination of children's qualities and characters, thus consequently influence the destiny of the society in tomorrow. Consider the significant of children today to the future, people have to learn about how to raise children in a proper way and lead them to be more helpful in bring about the well-being of tomorrow's brilliance of the society.

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People often say that children are the future of our society, whose qualities and characters  determine the destiny of society. Thus, the way that children are raised by adults and educators are important, which helps children to have the ability of independent thinking, being composed when facing chaos and having the creativity to develop the whole society to a new level. Socialization of children are very important for their growth, along with many other kinds of abilities and qualities.

During the thousands of year's period of humans' society, there is a permanent rule that the society is controlled by generation and generation, the children in one period definitely would become the governors after several decades, which is just like that the seeds under the ground  in spring will inevitably become mature crops in fall.(这种句子写得好,喜欢) Children are going to come into the society and make contributions and influence to the society in every field such as politics, education, economy and science, which determine the fate of the society in  tomorrow. Because no one can work and live forever, additionally that there is little room for development if the society is controlled and managed all by old people, it is important and necessary for the children to take place of their (then)when they grow up.

Since the children are determination(determinant) of the destiny of society, the education and skills the y accept is fatal to their growth and develop, which consequently determine the society's future. This let me cannot help to mention the instance of seeds again. There is an old saying that Sow seed of melon, receive melon, while sow seed of bean, receive bean. The way adults introduce the children and the knowledge and virtues that they are imparted with is significant to that whether these children--adults in(去掉) tomorrow-- will bring about a better society. How children are socialized is one of the most important factors that will affect the destiny of the society, (看到这里我真的看烦了,换个词组吧)which has many relationship with the unity, conformity and also the harmony of the society. As the children today are often the sole child in the family, who lack the communication and interaction with brothers and sisters, it is totally possible(i don't think so ,totally不好) to result the isolation and excessive independence on present children. Nevertheless, in this modern age full of competitions and challenges, it is necessary for people to have the idea of cooperation and team work, which can be raised by the process of socialization. Moreover, besides the socialization, educators should not ignore other qualities and abilities that should be introduced to the children such as common senses and knowledge, virtues of integrity and honesty, intellect skills and creative thoughts, etc, thus children will become more qualified to bring about a better society.

Although there are many good manners and qualities that adults today have found the best way to offer to children, who can help to contribute to a better society, we cannot deny that there will be numerous of conditions and difficulties that educators today cannot anticipate, which demands children to deal with all by themselves when they grow up. And the best way to raise children is to cultivate their ability to solve problems flexibly, which is badly demanded in present education, for many teachers and parent only know to teach children deal with one thing of one kinds of things rather than to cultivate their independent ability to deal with everything. Therefore, educator are also need to find the best and most proper way to raise and introduce children so that they can really have the  ability to build up the future world.

As I have mentioned above, socialization is the determination of children's qualities and characters, thus consequently influence the destiny of the society in tomorrow. Consider the significant of children today to the future, people have to learn about how to raise children in a proper way and lead them to be more helpful in bring about the well-being of tomorrow's brilliance of the society.
写得很有5分作文的味道,用词很好,有闪光词汇,而且LZ能在超时那么一点点的情况下,一口气写出这样的文章,佩服~~~~~~

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有人抢先一步了~~:rolleyes:



People often say that children are the future of our society, whose qualities and characters  determine the destiny of society. Thus, the way that children are raised by adults and educators are important, which helps children to have the ability of independent thinking, being composed when facing chaos and having the creativity to develop the whole society to a new level. Socialization of children are very important （换词）for their growth, along with many other kinds of abilities and qualities.（建议一开头见开门见山，直接把主题说出来）



During the thousands of years' period of humans' society, there is a permanent rule that the society is controlled by generation and generation, the children in one period definitely would become the governors after several decades, which is just like that the seeds under the ground  in spring will inevitably become mature crops in fall. Children are going to come into the society and make contributions and influence to the society in every field such as politics, education, economy and science, which determine the fate of the society in  （不需要IN）tomorrow. Because no one can work and live forever, additionally that there is little room for development if the society is controlled and managed all by old people, it is important and necessary for the children to take place of their(错了） when they grow up.（已经2段过去了，怎么还没有阐述到孩子的社会化程度是不是决定了社会的命运呢？精简下）




Since the children are determination of the destiny of society, the education and skills they accept is fatal to their growth and develop, which consequently determine the society's future. This let me cannot help to mention the instance of seeds again. There is an old saying that Sow seed of melon, receive melon, while sow seed of bean, receive bean. The way adults introduce the children and the knowledge and virtues that they are imparted with is significant to that whether these children--adults in tomorrow-- will bring about a better society. How children are socialized is one of the most important factors that will affect the destiny of the society, which has many relationship with the unity, conformity and also the harmony of the society. （到这里才开始看到你的观点）As the children today are often the sole child in the family, who lack the communication and interaction with brothers and sisters, it is totally possible to result the isolation and excessive independence on present children. Nevertheless, in this modern age full of competitions and challenges, it is necessary for people to have the idea of cooperation and team work, which can be raised by the process of socialization. Moreover, besides the socialization, educators should not ignore other qualities and abilities that should be introduced to the children such as common senses and knowledge, virtues of integrity and honesty, intellect skills and creative thoughts, etc, thus children will become more qualified to bring about a better society.


Although there are many good manners and qualities that adults today have found the best way to offer to children, who can help to contribute to a better society, we cannot deny that there will be numerous of conditions and difficulties that educators today cannot anticipate, which demands children to deal with all by themselves when they grow up. And the best way to raise children is to cultivate their ability to solve problems flexibly, which is badly demanded in present education, for many teachers and parent only know to teach children deal with one thing of one kinds of things rather than to cultivate their independent ability to deal with everything. Therefore, educator are also need to find the best and most proper way to raise and introduce children so that they can really have the  ability to build up the future world.


As I have mentioned above, socialization is the determination of children's qualities and characters, thus consequently influence (觉得影响这词用不好，毕竟影响和决定还是有程度差别）the destiny of the society in tomorrow. Consider the significant of children today to the future, people have to learn about how to raise children in a proper way and lead them to be more helpful in bring about the well-being of tomorrow's brilliance of the society.

总结：在你的观点出来以前，都是为你观点做铺垫的，可以精简点。不要铺垫的东西反而比主要的东西还多

这只是我的观点，有什么不同意见可以提出来哦~呵呵，这周我会继续关注你的作文。


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[ 本帖最后由 laura001 于 2007-5-29 03:01 编辑 ]