Argument140【SWEETBOX小组】第二次作业 by shrek

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OPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

The author of the report conclude that if Elm City University (ECU) fail to furnish her with a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson, Professor Thomas may leave ECU for another college .To justify this conclusion the author points out that she is one of the most popular professors at the university, and her teaching and research abilities are unassailable .I find this argument specious on several grounds.

Firstly, the author provide no evident that it is her personal attraction that lead to her classes are among the largest in the university. When it comes to some public courses or compulsory ones, there always be a great many students in one classroom, sometimes even hundreds of students share one class. Nor can the author provide clear evidence that she is skillful in teaching because there is no feedback from students for her classes in author’s report. We can not merely judge her talent in teaching and her popularity among students by the students' number of her classes. Lacking such evidence the author can not convince me that the professor is popular and talented.

Secondly, the mere fact that Professor Thomas attracted some research grants during the last two years is insufficient to demonstrate her research ability .After all, two years is not long enough to judge a professor's research ability .Besides, there is no further evidence indicates that her researches during the last two years are successful and lead to some new discoveries. Still, even assuming she is worth owning the research fee, her assistants or students may contribute more to the success of their research instead of her. Without further evidence the author cannot reasonably conclude that Professor Thomas possesses mighty research ability.

Finally, even we concede that Professor Thomas with powerful research ability is talented and popular as well, the author assumes too hastily about the issue of promoting her to Department Chairperson. To be the chairman of a department, not only should she have a reputation for her specialty, but also she should prove her ability of management to a whole department .However, there is no obvious evidence showing her owns both of the two indispensable requirements. Besides, there may be a pile of outstanding professors who exceed Professor Thomas in every aspect in her department. Still, there is no evident evidence show that she will leave ECU for another college without such a raise and promotion. In short, the author's conclusion remains dubious at best.

In sums, as it stands the argument is wholly unpersuasive. To bolster it the author must show that it the professor's personal attraction that made her classes among the largest in the university. The author must also provide more specific evidence to show her abilities in teaching and in research. It would be useful to know the requirements of being the chairperson in their department, the detail conditions there, and whether she will leave for another college without a raise and promotion.

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The author of the report concludes that if Elm City University (ECU) fail to furnish her who? with a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson, Professor Thomas 前面说全，后面说she吧may leave ECU for another college .To justify this conclusion the author points out that she is one of the most popular professors at the university, and her teaching and research abilities are unassailable .I find this argument specious on several grounds.

Firstly, the author provide no evident evidence？that it is her personal attraction that lead to her classes are lead, are two verbs?among the largest in the university. When it comes to some public courses or compulsory ones, there always be a great many a great many？ iam not sure the acuracy of this phrase？students in one classroom, sometimes even hundreds of students share one class. Nor can the author provide clear evidence that she is skillful in teaching because there is no feedback from students for of or from her classes in author’s report. We can not merely judge her talent in teaching and her popularity among students merely方这里好点？ by the students' number of her classes. Lacking such evidence the author can not convince me that the professor is popular and talented.

Secondly, the mere fact that Professor Thomas attracted 好像大家都很喜欢用这个attract why? no other proper words having the same function? some research grants during the last two years is insufficient to demonstrate her research ability .After all, two years is not long enough to judge a professor's research ability .Besides, 又见besides there is no further evidence indicates that her researches during the last two years are successful and lead to some new discoveries. Still, even assuming she is worth owning the research fee还是grant好一点, her assistants or students may contribute more to the success of their research instead of her这点~~~不知道应不应该说，如果她计划的好，领导的好，成果好了不是她自己做得也没所谓，毕竟已经是老板了，没有几个人还亲自做试验了. Without further evidence the author cannot reasonably conclude that Professor Thomas possesses mighty research ability.

Finally, even if we concede that Professor Thomas with powerful research ability is talented and popular as well, the author assumes too hastily about the issue of promoting her to Department Chairperson. To be the chairman of a department, not only should she have a reputation for her specialty, but also she should prove her ability of management to a whole department .However, there is no obvious evidence showing her owns both of the two indispensable requirements. Besides,  又见besides there may be a pile of outstanding professors who exceed Professor Thomas in every aspect in her department. Still, there is no evident evidence ?? show that she will leave ECU for another college without such a raise and promotion. In short, the author's conclusion remains dubious at best.

In sums, as it stands the argument is wholly unpersuasive. To bolster it the author must show that it the professor's personal attraction that made her classes among the largest in the university. The author must also provide more specific evidence to show her abilities in teaching and in research. It would be useful to know the requirements of being the chairperson in their department, the detail conditions there, and whether she will leave for another college without a raise and promotion.

我又来捣乱了，呵呵
进步了好多阿~~~瓦卡卡，
evidence用了好多遍，多些variation比较好，攻击的点都很好，也展开了，学习学习
不过还有些小毛病，以后要注意~~~
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