argument17 [0710G 戴三个表冲刺小组] 第4次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT17 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.
"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ-which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks-has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance."

WORDS: 436          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-7-29 17:49:11

In a letter to  Walnut Grove town newspaper the author is callling for continuing uing EZ Disposal, which has had contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years, in spite that EZ rcently raised its monthly fee from$2,000 to 2,500 a month. and think the twon council is mistaken to advocate switching to ABC Wast whose fee is still $2,000. To support his claimation, the author cited that EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. And additional trucks new ordered and the 80 percent respondents's stisfaction of last year seem provide further support to the author's claim. The claim seems plausible at first glance, but the further ananylize make me draw the conclusion that the it is totally indefensible.  

First, rejcting the cheaper comany while choosing the company require higher price condicts with comman sense. It will increase the cost of trash collection services for the citizens of Walnut Grove's town sinceEZ Disposal raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $ 2,500 raise the monthly fee, while switching to ABC Waste will not need to spend $500 every month.

Second, the author's claim that the EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once seem to convice us that EZ do more work than ABC. But the author failed to provide any evidence that the Walnut Grove need trash collection twice a week. This may be interpreted as EZ' working effiency is not as high as ABC.

Thirdly, the author assume that EZ' addtional tracks hold advantage over ABC, but provide absolutly no evidence to substatiate this assumption. So it is hard to let me believe that the additional tracks have any bearing to Walnut Grove's town's trash collection. May be they need less than 20 trucks, which ABC and EZ both have.

Finally, 80 percent of respondents' satification did not mean EZ has provide a good service in the past several years, maybe the the survey in last is just  a arbitory, in a relitively long time in the past several years, people may be not  satisfied with EZ's performance. And the less of evidence that the survey is representive enough to all the centizens of the town made the survey unsasuavible.

In sum ,to make me support the claim, the author must provide the evidence that the trach collection twice a week is necessary in the town. the suthoer should also proof that Walnt Grove's town need more than 20 truck for their trash collection. And last year's survey should be proofed representive to all the citizen in the past several years.

[ 本帖最后由 pinuo 于 2007-7-29 18:06 编辑 ]

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为什么argument写45min？

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自己先拍拍，大家接着拍。

In a letter to Walnut Grove town newspaper the author is calling for continuing using EZ Disposal, which has had contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years, in spite that EZ recently raised its monthly fee from$2,000 to $2,500 per month. The author thinks the town council is mistaken to advocate switching to ABC Waste whose fee is still $2,000. To support his claimation(recommendation), the author cited that EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. And additional trucks new ordered and the 80 percent respondents's (respondents')satisfaction of last year seem provide further support to the author's claim( 用clai还是recommendation, 我觉得recommendation准确些). The claim seems plausible at first glance, but the further analysis makes me draw the conclusion that the it is totally indefensible.（At first glance, the author's recommendation seems to be appealing. While clearly examining the author's reasoning, we may find that it is unconvincing. The recommendation contains several facets that are questionable.范文中的这句能当模板用么？）  

First, rejecting the cheaper company(the company claim lower price标价能用claim price) while choosing the company require higher price(the one claim higher) condicts(contradict) with comman(common) sense. It will increase the cost of trash collection services for the citizens of Walnut Grove's town since EZ Disposal raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $ 2,500 raise the monthly fee, while switching to ABC Waste will not need to spend (the extra)$500 every month. (加上这句更清楚总结这段的大意Thus author’s recommendation is not reasonable in term of price)

Second, the author's claim that the EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once seem to convice（cannot convince） me that EZ do more work than ABC. But(Since) the author failed to provide any evidence that the Walnut Grove need trash collection twice a week. This may be interpreted as EZ' working effiency(efficiency) is not as high as ABC.
Thirdly, the author assume that EZ' addtional(additional) tracks hold advantage over ABC, but provide absolutely no evidence to substantiate this assumption. So it is hard to let me believe that the additional tracks have any bearing to Walnut Grove's town's trash collection. May be they need less than 20 trucks, which ABC and EZ both have.
Finally, 80 percent of respondents' satisfaction did not mean EZ has provide a good service in the past several years, maybe the survey in last is just an arbitory(aberration), in a relatively long time of the past several years, people may be not satisfied with EZ's performance. And the less of evidence that the survey is representative enough to all the citizens of the town made the survey unsasuavible(unpersuasively).(Even assume the survey is representative enough to reflect the general attitudes toward trash collection service, without compare with the service ABC, the author cannot convince me that EZ provide a better service .感觉比较这个观点很重要)

In sum ,to make me support the claim, the author must provide the evidence that(替换为模板的In sum, the author's argument depends on a series of doubtful assumptions, and is therefore weak. To strengthen it the author must supply better evidence that) the trach collection twice a week is necessary in the town. the suthoer should also proof that（The author must also provide clear evidence） Walnt Grove's town need more than 20 truck for their trash collection. And（Finally, to better assess the recommendation I would need to know） last year's survey should be proofed(are) representative to all the citizen in the past several years.

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原帖由 chinesewap 于 2007-7-29 18:24 发表
为什么argument写45min？

第一次限时，前面照模板套了2篇，担心写不完，就多设了15Min，写的还很差了。再练习一次45Min，后面就设定严格30min。

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In a letter to Walnut Grove town newspaper the author is calling for continuing using EZ Disposal, which has had contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years, in spite that EZ recently raised its monthly fee from$2,000 to $2,500 per month. The author thinks the town council is mistaken to advocate switching to ABC Waste whose fee is still $2,000. To support his claimation(recommendation), the author cited that EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. And additional trucks new ordered and the 80 percent respondents's (respondents')satisfaction of last year seem provide further support to the author's claim( 用clai还是recommendation, 我觉得recommendation准确些). The claim seems plausible at first glance, but the further analysis makes me draw the conclusion that the it is totally indefensible.（At first glance, the author's recommendation seems to be appealing. While clearly examining the author's reasoning, we may find that it is unconvincing. The recommendation contains several facets that are questionable.范文中的这句能当模板用么？）很多模板都是这个样子的，开头估计都是千篇一律了。总结一个记牢就行了。还有就是有点长了，简练一些，不然显得头重脚轻，毕竟分析是重点。  

Firstly, rejecting the cheaper company(the company claim lower price标价能用claim price)（make price） while choosing the company require higher price(the one claim higher) condicts(contradict) with comman(common) sense. It will increase the cost of trash collection services for the citizens of Walnut Grove's town since EZ Disposal raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $ 2,500 raise the monthly fee, while switching to ABC Waste will not need to spend (the extra)$500 every month. (加上这句更清楚总结这段的大意Thus author’s recommendation is not reasonable in term of price)这一段写的没什么作用,就是选高价违反常识. Arguer的意思是高价有理,应该把重点放在分析高价高的不一定合理的可能性上,我们就不会为不合理的帐单付钱

.Secondly, the author's claim that the EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once seem to convice（cannot convince） me that EZ do more work than ABC. But(Since) the author failed to provide any evidence that the Walnut Grove need trash collection(needs to collect trash) twice a week. This may be interpreted as thatEZ' working effiency(efficiency) is not as high as ABC.

Thirdly, the author assume that EZ' additional tracks hold advantagesover ABC, but provide absolutely no evidence to substantiate this assumption. So it is hard to let me believe that the additional tracks have any bearing to Walnut Grove's town's trash collection. May be they need less than 20 trucks, which ABC and EZ both have.

Finally, 80 percent of respondents' satisfaction did not mean EZ has provide a good service in the past several years, maybe the survey in last is just an arbitory(aberration), in a relatively long time of the past several years, people may be not satisfied with EZ's performance. And the less of evidence that the survey is representative enough to all the citizens of the town made the survey unsasuavible(unpersuasively).这个句子语法上是不是有点问题。(Even assume the survey is representative enough to reflect the general attitudes toward trash collection service, without compare with the service ABC, the author cannot convince me that EZ provide a better service .感觉比较这个观点很重要)这个观点是要说明一下，多看看论坛上总结的句型。对写句子还是很有帮助的。

In sum ,to make me support the claim, the author must provide the evidence that(替换为模板的In sum, the author's argument depends on a series of doubtful assumptions, and is therefore weak. To strengthen it the author must supply better evidence that) the trach collection twice a week is necessary in the town. the suthoer should also proof that（The author must also provide clear evidence） Walnt Grove's town need more than 20 truck for their trash collection. And（Finally, to better assess the recommendation I would need to know） last year's survey should be proofed(are) representative to all the citizen in the past several years.开头结尾都有很多模板的。学习别人的套路，形成自己的。你这个结尾我收了。

[ 本帖最后由 scorpiocc 于 2007-7-30 22:08 编辑 ]